Some Call It Luck
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5 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
A nicely written chapter. I am starting to wonder where the book is going again. I think it is important that the reader never lose sight of the plot, or the purpose. Side quests are good, but the goal needs to be clear.
notes:
"He's wrapped in a blanket in a thick plastic bag inside the freezer
- For two weeks? I would turn and leave.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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A nicely written chapter. I am starting to wonder where the book is going again. I think it is important that the reader never lose sight of the plot, or the purpose. Side quests are good, but the goal needs to be clear.
notes:
"He's wrapped in a blanket in a thick plastic bag inside the freezer
- For two weeks? I would turn and leave.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Coming very soon.
Comment from royowen
I'm so glad Kenny and Abby have made up, and buried dear Lester, Abby's original friend, and that EJ is sorting his life, he needs a good woman to complete him, and seeing he's correcting his putting as well, I think maybe college is a good idea, well done, Jim. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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I'm so glad Kenny and Abby have made up, and buried dear Lester, Abby's original friend, and that EJ is sorting his life, he needs a good woman to complete him, and seeing he's correcting his putting as well, I think maybe college is a good idea, well done, Jim. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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E.J. is not out of the woods yet, and that putting problem may be the start of a dangerous detour. Nuff said for now.
Thanks for the good review and for being a faithful reader of this story, Roy. Jim
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Bless you
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this addition to your novel with us. I enjoyed reading. You have a good story on your hand. I am not sure E.J. should have had that 'few ounces of scotch' before leaving to practice.
He showed up around 5:00, came up the stairs and rang the bell. I opened the door, but before I could say anything to him, he said to me, (You can omit 'to him' it's understood. There are a few more places where it's understood, also that can be omitted for a tighter read.)
Examples:
You just can't know how sorry I am about it. (about it)
didn't hear you start the car. It was no one's fault; it just happened. Can you ever forgive me for blaming you for it? (for it)
We sat down after a while, (down)
"Did you have the fun this summer that you'd hoped you would?" I asked her. (her)
"That sounds great, but if something comes up, and you're just too busy to make it, I'll understand." (to make it)
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Thank you for sharing this addition to your novel with us. I enjoyed reading. You have a good story on your hand. I am not sure E.J. should have had that 'few ounces of scotch' before leaving to practice.
He showed up around 5:00, came up the stairs and rang the bell. I opened the door, but before I could say anything to him, he said to me, (You can omit 'to him' it's understood. There are a few more places where it's understood, also that can be omitted for a tighter read.)
Examples:
You just can't know how sorry I am about it. (about it)
didn't hear you start the car. It was no one's fault; it just happened. Can you ever forgive me for blaming you for it? (for it)
We sat down after a while, (down)
"Did you have the fun this summer that you'd hoped you would?" I asked her. (her)
"That sounds great, but if something comes up, and you're just too busy to make it, I'll understand." (to make it)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Barbara. And thanks for all your good catches.
Comment from jmdg1954
Not good! A few ounces of scotch to take the edge off?
Can lead him back to drinking which he worked so hard at putting behind him.
What goes that do for his future plan? We'll see.
Good chapter., John
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Not good! A few ounces of scotch to take the edge off?
Can lead him back to drinking which he worked so hard at putting behind him.
What goes that do for his future plan? We'll see.
Good chapter., John
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Thanks, John. He hasn't really put drinking behind him yet; it's just that with the focus on Abby the last few chapters, we haven't seen him drinking. He is physically as well as psychologically addicted to alcohol, and fairly soon we will see some of the devastating effects this has on him and his possibility of a future.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The reconciliation is sensitively written, as is the tearful funeral of poor Lester! E J seems to be facilitating the romance with Kenny but you're still leaving him a lifeline!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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The reconciliation is sensitively written, as is the tearful funeral of poor Lester! E J seems to be facilitating the romance with Kenny but you're still leaving him a lifeline!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Sarah. I will say this: Abby will always be in E.J.'s life.
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My granddaughter prefers Kenny!
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Cute. Do you read it to her or tell her about it, or does she read it herself?
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She reads. She's 13+ AND A GOOD READER!
