Novella - Unwanted Dog
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Unwanted Dog-22"Adopted By Unknown Stranger In Wal-Mart Parking Lo
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Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting story. The flow is good. The images are clear. The dialogue is believable. The narrative stays on track. I like the it-is-what-it-is attitude.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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An interesting story. The flow is good. The images are clear. The dialogue is believable. The narrative stays on track. I like the it-is-what-it-is attitude.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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Appreciate the review and comments.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
At last the narrator seems to have struck lucky in a chance encounter in a
super market parking lot. He happens to choose a real character with his designer jeans and shades! Yet he also appears a charitable man. The foreshadowing is certainly used to catch the reader's interest.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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At last the narrator seems to have struck lucky in a chance encounter in a
super market parking lot. He happens to choose a real character with his designer jeans and shades! Yet he also appears a charitable man. The foreshadowing is certainly used to catch the reader's interest.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Appreciate the comments and the review.
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I'm really into this! I am curious about the next part!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an attention getting chapter. I know I've read two of your other dog stories but can't honestly remember them, although I think they had something to do with homelessness. Anyway, you are a good writer with little statements that foretell the future (your future?). Sometimes so many clues are spoilers, but yours seem intent to draw the reader in. Very good writing in this case.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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This is an attention getting chapter. I know I've read two of your other dog stories but can't honestly remember them, although I think they had something to do with homelessness. Anyway, you are a good writer with little statements that foretell the future (your future?). Sometimes so many clues are spoilers, but yours seem intent to draw the reader in. Very good writing in this case.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Actually my autobiography. Appreciate your review.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Brett,
What are the odds? In all of Nashville, how is it possible that you would meet your dad at a Wal-Mart parking lot? I'm a little curious as to why you were separated from him in the first place, but perhaps that will be forthcoming. Thanks for sharing this. I hope things start on an uphill swing now. I'd love to hear that your dad confronted the clowns at the place you were staying. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Hello Brett,
What are the odds? In all of Nashville, how is it possible that you would meet your dad at a Wal-Mart parking lot? I'm a little curious as to why you were separated from him in the first place, but perhaps that will be forthcoming. Thanks for sharing this. I hope things start on an uphill swing now. I'd love to hear that your dad confronted the clowns at the place you were staying. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Twas orphaned until I met him at Walmart. The story will continue to explain. Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
This chapter makes it sound like things are just about to get going between your new found friend or otherwise. Thanks for sharing. So, glad to get your good news and wish you a happy holiday!
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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This chapter makes it sound like things are just about to get going between your new found friend or otherwise. Thanks for sharing. So, glad to get your good news and wish you a happy holiday!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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So very much appreciate your continual support, comments, and reviews. Merry Christmas!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You finally found a decent, presentable friend, even though you did not know much about him yet. I hope this ordeal changes your attitude and outlook on life. It is the best part of your story so far .... good things are finally happening for you.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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You finally found a decent, presentable friend, even though you did not know much about him yet. I hope this ordeal changes your attitude and outlook on life. It is the best part of your story so far .... good things are finally happening for you.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Wendy G
Good description of the man, and of the boy's feeling as he tried to approach him with nonchalance. Enjoying the story and glad to hear he is getting some help and care.
Wendy.
Typos: "separate" not "seperate"
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Good description of the man, and of the boy's feeling as he tried to approach him with nonchalance. Enjoying the story and glad to hear he is getting some help and care.
Wendy.
Typos: "separate" not "seperate"
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Appreciate the catch, your comments, and the review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I like that you were at least intimidated by this guy. I feel like sometimes you might have thought you were more slick than you acrmtually were. That is an assumption but tends to get people in trouble. Another great chapter. Gretchen
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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I like that you were at least intimidated by this guy. I feel like sometimes you might have thought you were more slick than you acrmtually were. That is an assumption but tends to get people in trouble. Another great chapter. Gretchen
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from BethShelby
You never how something insignificant can be the big break in life. I love stories like this. It is sort of like a fairy tale. I met the man who became my husband in about the same kind of unplanned way. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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You never how something insignificant can be the big break in life. I love stories like this. It is sort of like a fairy tale. I met the man who became my husband in about the same kind of unplanned way. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Sankey
Now we are getting down to business with your Dad. I look forward enthusiastically to where this is headed.
I sent you the MP3's for my carols. Do you need the written music or the words?
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Now we are getting down to business with your Dad. I look forward enthusiastically to where this is headed.
I sent you the MP3's for my carols. Do you need the written music or the words?
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Appreciate the MP3s. Had my oncology tests yesterday. No new tumors found. Does not mean I can not still develop them, but for now, no new ones. Fourteen more than enough for anybody. Can truthfully say that was all I wanted for Christmas. Hope yours is wonderful!
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Glad you like the music. Now for more of your saga. I would love to meet you some day, maybe in Glory, I guess.
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See you there!
