Some Call It Luck
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I like your golf story as it makes a person think about the Lucky ball that was found. Was this ball special or was it a ball that got lost and was found again by its owner? How did this ball change the person's life? I think I will have to read some of the previous chapters to find out.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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I like your golf story as it makes a person think about the Lucky ball that was found. Was this ball special or was it a ball that got lost and was found again by its owner? How did this ball change the person's life? I think I will have to read some of the previous chapters to find out.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the good review, Rosemary. The ball was found by E.J. in the previous chapter on the edge of a pond where it had been for a while. It plays an interesting role in the story, but it won't be made clear for a while yet.
Comment from JT traveller
One hundred and fifty years away! Impressive stroke to say the least. You have clearly unleashed a talent. Let it flow from within. I like the narrative of the prose. It flows well.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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One hundred and fifty years away! Impressive stroke to say the least. You have clearly unleashed a talent. Let it flow from within. I like the narrative of the prose. It flows well.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much. I've played golf for over 50 years and never had a hole-in-one, and he gets one on his first shot in 20 years! There's something fishy here!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting chapter. I haven't seen any previous ones, but you are a good writer. It was possible to get into the story without confusion and learn a little about the characters of E.J. and Abby.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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This is an interesting chapter. I haven't seen any previous ones, but you are a good writer. It was possible to get into the story without confusion and learn a little about the characters of E.J. and Abby.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much, Carol. I'm so glad you found it.
Comment from lancellot
E.J. is still in a funk during this scene. Abby was giving him the 'Go on and ask me' vibes. He totally missed it. Not a hole in one on that front.
Good chapter. On to the next.
"Oooh, this sounds intriguing! Alright, I'll meet you there at {4:00," and she} went back to wiping the tables.
-4:00." Then she
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E.J. is still in a funk during this scene. Abby was giving him the 'Go on and ask me' vibes. He totally missed it. Not a hole in one on that front.
Good chapter. On to the next.
"Oooh, this sounds intriguing! Alright, I'll meet you there at {4:00," and she} went back to wiping the tables.
-4:00." Then she
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Nice writing. Storyline is quite clear and the writing uncomplicated. The dialogue is good, sparse and natural. I like the mystery aura surrounding the lucky 1 ball. Will have to read more of you.
Great chapter!!
Mario
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Nice writing. Storyline is quite clear and the writing uncomplicated. The dialogue is good, sparse and natural. I like the mystery aura surrounding the lucky 1 ball. Will have to read more of you.
Great chapter!!
Mario
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Thanks for the good review, Mario. Check out chapter 19, posted today, for further mystery surrounding this ball.
Comment from Dr. Von
I like the storyline. You have written a good flow of events and language. I like the clarity of the words you have chosen to use in describing events. This is a solid way to invest the reader in the characters. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2022
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I like the storyline. You have written a good flow of events and language. I like the clarity of the words you have chosen to use in describing events. This is a solid way to invest the reader in the characters. Nicely done.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read it and for the great review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting scene. The pace is good. The images are clear. The dialogue is believable. The narrative stays on point. The language is conversational. This snippet ends with a hook for further reading.
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I always look for colorful phrases, figures of speech, and unusual words. This and descriptive adjectives. I would hope these show up in parts of the book.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2022
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An interesting scene. The pace is good. The images are clear. The dialogue is believable. The narrative stays on point. The language is conversational. This snippet ends with a hook for further reading.
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I always look for colorful phrases, figures of speech, and unusual words. This and descriptive adjectives. I would hope these show up in parts of the book.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2022
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You're welcome, and thanks for the great review.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from royowen
Wow! A hole in one, I don't think they are very common, I think that's why a lot of golf clubs offer prizes, (if it's officially witnessed) but I did play on the elementary level, and the bidding systems confused me. An excellent work Jim, good story, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2022
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Wow! A hole in one, I don't think they are very common, I think that's why a lot of golf clubs offer prizes, (if it's officially witnessed) but I did play on the elementary level, and the bidding systems confused me. An excellent work Jim, good story, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2022
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Thanks, Roy. If you think that hole-in-one is rare (which it definitely is), just wait until tomorrow's chapter!
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Well done Jim
Comment from JoannaN
Hello, your characters seem to be likeable (a bit nerdy, but this was the concept). I am curious about what is going to happen next. There are plenty of ways your story can unfold :)
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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2022
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Hello, your characters seem to be likeable (a bit nerdy, but this was the concept). I am curious about what is going to happen next. There are plenty of ways your story can unfold :)
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Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much for your great review. I hope you will stay engaged as the story unfolds. There are a few surprises in store!
Comment from Kaiku
I think this read as well as any story I have read for some time. Plus I am a golfer that just finished with a golf invention that has a design patent being applied for. The read was smooth as a green reading 10 on the stimpmeter. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2022
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I think this read as well as any story I have read for some time. Plus I am a golfer that just finished with a golf invention that has a design patent being applied for. The read was smooth as a green reading 10 on the stimpmeter. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2022
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Oooo! I hope you don't preempt Abby's invention that comes later! Hey, thanks so much for the 6-star review!
There will be a number of golf scenes in future chapters. I hope you stay with it.
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My pleasure
