Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

For a newbie, you have found the sweet spot in the right length of posts to keep your readers interested. If you don't post too frequently, and you have time to review, it always helps to promote with at least one certificate so your readers get "paid" to review.
You created a lot of sympathy for your character here.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2022

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2022

Thank you so much for the good rating and the good advice.

Comment from Aiona

Excellent

Interesting piece. It's pretty short for a chapter, but I don't know if you intended it as a chapter, or it's just FanStory's constraints of posting that you have to label a post as a "chapter." Intriguing character! Makes me want to read more.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2022

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022

Yes, this is one of the shortest chapters in the novel. I couldn't really combine it with anything else for a longer one for FanStory. My chapters tend to vary greatly in size, but that's because the story is told chronologically across a 32-year period and different amounts of detail happen at different times.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I think you've woven a pretty good plot here, the thought that one could be thrown out of house and home would be a real bummer to any young man or woman, I think one could have wrecked one's own life when young is pretty sobering, but for God I could have done the same. Beautifully written Jim, blessings Roy
Typo : I could do it on my own (dime) time?

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2022

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022

Thanks, Roy. It is a sobering thought, but there's still hope for E.J. It doesn't come easy for him, and he hasn't hit bottom yet, though.

"On your own dime" is an expression in the US for "out of your own pocket."

reply by royowen on 06-Dec-2022

Oh huh