Lessons?
life, I should think32 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
How many of us lose sight of our dreams because we have to live the life we are given, to survive. It's not until it's almost too late that we see this. If we could just step back and see what we're giving up. Your poem is remarkable, Victor, and made me think of my dreams. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
How many of us lose sight of our dreams because we have to live the life we are given, to survive. It's not until it's almost too late that we see this. If we could just step back and see what we're giving up. Your poem is remarkable, Victor, and made me think of my dreams. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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That was very comforting to me, Sandra. Thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your concise, thought-provoking poem conveys a powerful message about the realities we face when we really confront life~~the dreams we met, those we failed to fulfill. . . .
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
Your concise, thought-provoking poem conveys a powerful message about the realities we face when we really confront life~~the dreams we met, those we failed to fulfill. . . .
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you, dear.
I?m glad you liked it.
Doug
Comment from Sanku
This is very thought provoking .The formatting with short lines is suitable of intense emotions .The persona has lived his life but what about the dreams he had? Well thought out..
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
This is very thought provoking .The formatting with short lines is suitable of intense emotions .The persona has lived his life but what about the dreams he had? Well thought out..
Comment Written 26-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nice and powerful poem about life, love, the meaning of it all. I like the flow and the simplicity of the poem ending with the last two lines about giving up one's dreams
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
nice and powerful poem about life, love, the meaning of it all. I like the flow and the simplicity of the poem ending with the last two lines about giving up one's dreams
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Thank you.
I appreciate it.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem, Victor. I liked the image and the
formatting of your lines. Your words were well thought
out and believable. I believe you said the individual in
the poem wondered if life got in the way of his dreams.
Yes, he lived life, but what of his dreams? However in
living life, all that it encompasses may have led to the
realization of some of the dreams or parts of them.
You gave readers much to think about.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
I enjoyed your poem, Victor. I liked the image and the
formatting of your lines. Your words were well thought
out and believable. I believe you said the individual in
the poem wondered if life got in the way of his dreams.
Yes, he lived life, but what of his dreams? However in
living life, all that it encompasses may have led to the
realization of some of the dreams or parts of them.
You gave readers much to think about.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Thank you my dear.
And, ur basically right.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are deep, thought provoking and meaningful. I pondered on the words of this poem and thought about the lessons I
have learned in this life. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork
and the layout of these words is awesome!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
The author's words are deep, thought provoking and meaningful. I pondered on the words of this poem and thought about the lessons I
have learned in this life. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork
and the layout of these words is awesome!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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That's so nice of you.
Thank you.
Comment from Frank Malley
I like poetry that exposes the invisible consciousness, the mind's experience of being. I think "Believe in Yourself" is a poor title for this poem; there are no words herein to urge one towards confidence. The interest of this poem is exposing some basic questions about existence, and then making observations about what life is, what literary expression accomplishes, and fails to accomplish.
"Believe in Yourself" is an exercise in a sort of slippery logic. Its statements do not reach any important conclusions by means the reader can understand; instead, we are left to draw what connections we can with the slender outcomes of thought that are present. The poem is graceful in its diction, but it finds basis for not one inclusion of an image for the reader's mind to enjoy, nor one true paradox to challenge and thrill our imagination.
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
I like poetry that exposes the invisible consciousness, the mind's experience of being. I think "Believe in Yourself" is a poor title for this poem; there are no words herein to urge one towards confidence. The interest of this poem is exposing some basic questions about existence, and then making observations about what life is, what literary expression accomplishes, and fails to accomplish.
"Believe in Yourself" is an exercise in a sort of slippery logic. Its statements do not reach any important conclusions by means the reader can understand; instead, we are left to draw what connections we can with the slender outcomes of thought that are present. The poem is graceful in its diction, but it finds basis for not one inclusion of an image for the reader's mind to enjoy, nor one true paradox to challenge and thrill our imagination.
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Correct.
But, the poem's name is
"Lessons?"
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I was befuddled by the text on the picture. I actually believe that a somewhat competitive writing site shouldn't have pictures, which are a distinct and powerful addition to literature. Be well. Frank
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Yes, I agree.
Pictures are an invaluable addition to a poetic piece. However, for evaluation purposes, they may dominate too much.
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I think your poem has potential. The riddles within poems are important, and sometimes unsolvable. I sometimes struggle with the human impact of having something from your soul reviewed, but I try to stand up for what works in literature. All the best. Frank
Comment from Reese Turner
Nice picture, visual and justified presentation. Honestly, I am not sure what you are saying. Maybe that you experienced much, but it meant less than you had hoped or it wasn't exactly what you were aiming for? Me thinks that is the story of real life.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
Nice picture, visual and justified presentation. Honestly, I am not sure what you are saying. Maybe that you experienced much, but it meant less than you had hoped or it wasn't exactly what you were aiming for? Me thinks that is the story of real life.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Absolutely, unequivocally correct.
Thank you.
Doug
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Thanks. Well, must have been good writing when an old man like me gets the point. Well done!
Comment from royowen
I love your post Doug. Yes when I was relatively new to poetry, I really didn't get your "flight of fancy" style. My wife will tell me off for talking about things in my mind, assuming everybody knows what I'm thinking, but of course they don't, I might get it one day, I think they call it a "stream of consciousness" heh heh, as always, I love it. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
I love your post Doug. Yes when I was relatively new to poetry, I really didn't get your "flight of fancy" style. My wife will tell me off for talking about things in my mind, assuming everybody knows what I'm thinking, but of course they don't, I might get it one day, I think they call it a "stream of consciousness" heh heh, as always, I love it. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Awe, Roy, thanks.
Sincerely,
Doug
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Well done
Comment from amahra
bring only
visions
of what passes
for a journey. [liked the poem and particularly this stanza] Also, I liked the artwork you chose for your writing. Blessings.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
bring only
visions
of what passes
for a journey. [liked the poem and particularly this stanza] Also, I liked the artwork you chose for your writing. Blessings.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Thank you.