Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
Agree "Alan's" comment was a threat.
With "Rogers" running around Ali better take all the precautions she can get her hands on.
The opera cake's description makes it sound good.
"He took Alexandra hand" should be He took Alexandra's hand
Under Jim's bio "foremen's" should be foremen
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Agree "Alan's" comment was a threat.
With "Rogers" running around Ali better take all the precautions she can get her hands on.
The opera cake's description makes it sound good.
"He took Alexandra hand" should be He took Alexandra's hand
Under Jim's bio "foremen's" should be foremen
Comment Written 03-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and the help. I have made the corrections.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I ran out of sixes before I got to you, sorry. Another well written chapter to read. I liked the inserted levity concerning the water. You did a great job as always. Have a great evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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I ran out of sixes before I got to you, sorry. Another well written chapter to read. I liked the inserted levity concerning the water. You did a great job as always. Have a great evening. Shirley
Comment Written 01-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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Not worried about the six, it's the thought that counts. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
You gave me a scare when Ali was left alone and there was screaming! I guess I wasn't following from the beginning of the book so I was surprised to find Alie back in Texas in Cord's house. I guess they left New York together? I guess there is some danger here, too, even without Griffin.
Good use of suspense!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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You gave me a scare when Ali was left alone and there was screaming! I guess I wasn't following from the beginning of the book so I was surprised to find Alie back in Texas in Cord's house. I guess they left New York together? I guess there is some danger here, too, even without Griffin.
Good use of suspense!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Yes, they left NY together in the privately owned jet. Yes, there is danger all around Ali. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
As a stand-alone story, this was fine. Well-rounded and read well. But in terms of continuity wit the last chapter it felt off. The writing was very different, and the characters didn't interact with each other in the way I would have expected. Kate xx
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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As a stand-alone story, this was fine. Well-rounded and read well. But in terms of continuity wit the last chapter it felt off. The writing was very different, and the characters didn't interact with each other in the way I would have expected. Kate xx
Comment Written 01-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Hmmm, I wonder why. The last chapter they left NY for Texas and are now in Texas and life is going on as usual. I'm confused. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. There are a number of threads that keep it interesting. I look forward to the next chapter. I do not see any room for improvement.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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This is another excellent chapter. There are a number of threads that keep it interesting. I look forward to the next chapter. I do not see any room for improvement.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
How do you get rid of Evil Eddie when you're writing? I know I have had some graffiti which always has to be deleted to make the story look better.
This story brings Cord and Alexandra to Texas again. The bad boy (Mr. Pat Rogers) is at it again. I hope they will find an answer to his corruption.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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How do you get rid of Evil Eddie when you're writing? I know I have had some graffiti which always has to be deleted to make the story look better.
This story brings Cord and Alexandra to Texas again. The bad boy (Mr. Pat Rogers) is at it again. I hope they will find an answer to his corruption.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I don't use accent marks for one thing. I also don't use advanced editor. I'm not sure that helps.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Very interesting good story. I think that the dialogue is spot on and realistic.
Watch saying "said Jorge" as opposed to "Jorge said' as it interrupts the flow for the reader.
Great story. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Very interesting good story. I think that the dialogue is spot on and realistic.
Watch saying "said Jorge" as opposed to "Jorge said' as it interrupts the flow for the reader.
Great story. Keep it up!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Interesting. I've been told to have the action go first. I'll research it. Thank you for the kind review.
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I'm better at reader than I am at writing
Comment from estory
We see Cord and Ali shifting in those roles of man and woman, with him being protective and taking care of the problems around the house and her kind of deffering to him to here a bit. There's some tension there but they seem to be figuring it out. Lots of humor and personality in the dialogue as always. the characters are well defined. estory
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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We see Cord and Ali shifting in those roles of man and woman, with him being protective and taking care of the problems around the house and her kind of deffering to him to here a bit. There's some tension there but they seem to be figuring it out. Lots of humor and personality in the dialogue as always. the characters are well defined. estory
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Thank you for this kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, you managed to start my day out hungry as a bear with your pictures a recipe. Of course, making me hungry isn't hard to do, since eating is my favorite activity. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Well, you managed to start my day out hungry as a bear with your pictures a recipe. Of course, making me hungry isn't hard to do, since eating is my favorite activity. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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LOL I do have a lot of eating in my novels. Not sure why, I guess because everybody eats so maybe my readers can relate to that. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What I like about your books, you have a lot of normal, everyday happenings in them, making the stories more realistic. I really enjoyed this chapter, although I'm wondering why Pat Rogers was just standing there watching. He's got something planned, that's for sure. Let's hope he doesn't meet Alan! Excellent as always, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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What I like about your books, you have a lot of normal, everyday happenings in them, making the stories more realistic. I really enjoyed this chapter, although I'm wondering why Pat Rogers was just standing there watching. He's got something planned, that's for sure. Let's hope he doesn't meet Alan! Excellent as always, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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I never thought of Alan and Pat meeting up. That would be interesting. Thank you for kind review.
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You are very welcome, Barbara. xx
