Mutant Frogs
Could it happen?22 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I don't know about editing. I read to read. If you instruct me to look for editing I will, I will read once for joy, and the second time for mistakes and errors so you will secretly hate me.. I believe in RicMyworlds's vision of reviewing. If they don't slow you down, they don't matter. This was very good.
Loved it. Karen
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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I don't know about editing. I read to read. If you instruct me to look for editing I will, I will read once for joy, and the second time for mistakes and errors so you will secretly hate me.. I believe in RicMyworlds's vision of reviewing. If they don't slow you down, they don't matter. This was very good.
Loved it. Karen
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you. Nah, just read and enjoy. I might go back and edit some of those old stories, then angain, I might not. I write for the joy of it, not to practice perfect grammar. I try to help some of the authors through reviewing, but that's because we are supposed to point out errors.
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Some folks want me to pick at it. Some folks love to review me because i say edit it as much as you like. Some go to town on me. It is flat out amazing how they can find things I can't see. 8 times out of 10 they are right. :-)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I really like your fantasy story. I'm not a lover of frogs after reading your fictional story; never was before that either. My mom always told me that I would get warts if I picked up a frog. The frog in the image is very frightening.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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I really like your fantasy story. I'm not a lover of frogs after reading your fictional story; never was before that either. My mom always told me that I would get warts if I picked up a frog. The frog in the image is very frightening.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Thank you, and thanks for the six stars. I don't like frogs either, which probably helped me write the story. Hugs.
Comment from Michaela Moore
Such Fun! The ending to your story reminds me of an ending to a wonderful chapter in Ray Bradbury's book, Dandelion Wine. The growing suspense is like his chapter as well. And I don't know if it is the frogs or the way it reminds me of the 'Ol South, but I also couldn't stop thinking of Mark Twain while I read this piece. What a fun and mysterious fantasy story you have crafted! Cheers!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Such Fun! The ending to your story reminds me of an ending to a wonderful chapter in Ray Bradbury's book, Dandelion Wine. The growing suspense is like his chapter as well. And I don't know if it is the frogs or the way it reminds me of the 'Ol South, but I also couldn't stop thinking of Mark Twain while I read this piece. What a fun and mysterious fantasy story you have crafted! Cheers!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read this rather long story (contest rules-2000 words) It was fun to write and there really is a pond like the one in the story, which gave me the idea. Hugs
Comment from sunnilicious
Mutant Ninja Turtles exist. Anything is possible now. Hahahahaha.
Anyways, I enjoyed the ending. Well thought out and clearly written. Good details in the narration. Excellent work. Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2022
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Mutant Ninja Turtles exist. Anything is possible now. Hahahahaha.
Anyways, I enjoyed the ending. Well thought out and clearly written. Good details in the narration. Excellent work. Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2022
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Thank you. Yeah, I forgot about those turtles. LOl. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Hugs.
Comment from Thomas Blanks
The story is well done, building the suspense up. You know someone was going to get frogged. I have one suggestion. The bolded, single-spaced, black font on white is a little hard on the eyes. RIBBIT! RIBBIT!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2022
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The story is well done, building the suspense up. You know someone was going to get frogged. I have one suggestion. The bolded, single-spaced, black font on white is a little hard on the eyes. RIBBIT! RIBBIT!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2022
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Thank you. Well, I think the bold font shows an extremely loud ribbit. I hope I never run into one of them. Hugs.
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent fantasy story, and a well-written one. I hope I don't dream about them tonight! You maintained my interest throughout, to the point I didn't notice anything to correct! very well done. Sending best wishes for the Fantasy contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2022
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An excellent fantasy story, and a well-written one. I hope I don't dream about them tonight! You maintained my interest throughout, to the point I didn't notice anything to correct! very well done. Sending best wishes for the Fantasy contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2022
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Thank you. If you didn't find anything then it must be okay. You are one of the more honest and nit-picky reviewers on here. I mean that in a nice way. Hugs.
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Very interesting fantasy story! Nicely detailed, includes some suspense and a twisty ending. The only note I have is to capitalize and hyphenate Miss Knows-It-All. I enjoyed the story and wish you luck on the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Very interesting fantasy story! Nicely detailed, includes some suspense and a twisty ending. The only note I have is to capitalize and hyphenate Miss Knows-It-All. I enjoyed the story and wish you luck on the contest!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thank you, and thanks for the tip. I appreciate any help I can get.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I think this is the best fantasy contest entry I've ever read because there's an element of belief in it. This is really good. Thank you for sharing. Good luck with the contest.
When I asked my Aunt about it, she explained the pond's history. (lower case 'a' on 'aunt' because of the 'my' and in very other 'my Aunt')
My Aunt took a long breath, then continued. "I was afraid something like this might happen in the future. (same issue as before & comma after 'continued')
I'm gullible sometimes, but not that stupid," I laughed. (period needed after 'stupid')
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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I think this is the best fantasy contest entry I've ever read because there's an element of belief in it. This is really good. Thank you for sharing. Good luck with the contest.
When I asked my Aunt about it, she explained the pond's history. (lower case 'a' on 'aunt' because of the 'my' and in very other 'my Aunt')
My Aunt took a long breath, then continued. "I was afraid something like this might happen in the future. (same issue as before & comma after 'continued')
I'm gullible sometimes, but not that stupid," I laughed. (period needed after 'stupid')
Comment Written 18-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thank you. What would I do without you grammar experts? There really is a pond we drained chemicals into, and it is dead. I did spot some tadpoles in the pond shortly before leaving the farm for good. I did tell my niece there would be mutant frogs. The rest is fiction, of course. Thanks again for the help. Hugs.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Be sure your sins will find you out.
A couple suggestions:
Para 7, 1st sentence: Remove one space between (What's) and (the)
Para 16, 4th sentence: (velcro) should be (Velcro) proper name
Para 16, 6th sentence: (Aunt Ruth.!") should be (Aunt Ruth!") double punctuation
Great story. Those frogs just wouldn't give up. I'm all for the frog leg dinner.
Good job.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Be sure your sins will find you out.
A couple suggestions:
Para 7, 1st sentence: Remove one space between (What's) and (the)
Para 16, 4th sentence: (velcro) should be (Velcro) proper name
Para 16, 6th sentence: (Aunt Ruth.!") should be (Aunt Ruth!") double punctuation
Great story. Those frogs just wouldn't give up. I'm all for the frog leg dinner.
Good job.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thank you, and thanks for the tips. You grammar experts are the best. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Hugs
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It was fun, almost plausible. ;))
Comment from evilynne
OMG - I think your pulling our legs (frog legs, that is). That was a fun read, hope I was supposed to laugh! I didn't see any errors. Best of luck in the contest! RIBBIT! Evi
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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OMG - I think your pulling our legs (frog legs, that is). That was a fun read, hope I was supposed to laugh! I didn't see any errors. Best of luck in the contest! RIBBIT! Evi
Comment Written 18-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed the story, and it tickled your funny bone. I meant it to. Hugs.
