The Nights My Lights Went Out
A Conversation with Myself17 total reviews
Comment from evilynne
That is really cute and quite funny, very imaginative. I would vote for you but the contest is over, maybe next time. Evi
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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That is really cute and quite funny, very imaginative. I would vote for you but the contest is over, maybe next time. Evi
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Nice of you to read and comment. Will you become my friend? Mr Rogers, thought i should ask. :-)
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
I can tell the "writer" is dead, but I also sense a "tongue-in-cheek" reference to sex for the old guy? You know, blue pill, unclad, guided missile, wearing a smile. I happen to be 73, by coincidence, and I would be wearing a smile too.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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I can tell the "writer" is dead, but I also sense a "tongue-in-cheek" reference to sex for the old guy? You know, blue pill, unclad, guided missile, wearing a smile. I happen to be 73, by coincidence, and I would be wearing a smile too.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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We agree. At seventy-three there likely many twins to us.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I thought that was a logical conversation for a dead man talking to his own ghost!! Lol! I'm sure you'd have a lot more to say if it did happen. I'd really have a lot to say to myself if I died. Well done with this, it's a fabulous entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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I thought that was a logical conversation for a dead man talking to his own ghost!! Lol! I'm sure you'd have a lot more to say if it did happen. I'd really have a lot to say to myself if I died. Well done with this, it's a fabulous entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the review. I hope you'll visit many times again.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
It's never a good idea to talk to yourself at the cusp of dying.
Interesting story entry for the What Would You Say If Dead writing prompt contest. It moved along nicely and the plot was easy to understand and follow. Good character development.
Well done, my friend.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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It's never a good idea to talk to yourself at the cusp of dying.
Interesting story entry for the What Would You Say If Dead writing prompt contest. It moved along nicely and the plot was easy to understand and follow. Good character development.
Well done, my friend.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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I think to insinuate my body had died and my sould was making conversation. :-)
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Yeah, I like the idea of this contest.
Comment from Fleedleflump
I adore 'Girding a guided missile.' - that's the least subtle subtle description I think I've ever seen :-). I thought this was clever - you set this up, then fill in the blanks with flashes of thoughts and humour. I very much enjoyed the read.
Mike
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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I adore 'Girding a guided missile.' - that's the least subtle subtle description I think I've ever seen :-). I thought this was clever - you set this up, then fill in the blanks with flashes of thoughts and humour. I very much enjoyed the read.
Mike
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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I try my best to humor myself thinking if I do it may work for someone else. For what other purpose has a writer when he writes?
Comment from Thesis
Quite an interesting story. A conversation with yourself when you are dead, showed that reasoning was not all lost. The build up of what happened, and a glimpse of why, were insightful.
Even at Seventy Three, there was a woman involved.
Nice job.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Quite an interesting story. A conversation with yourself when you are dead, showed that reasoning was not all lost. The build up of what happened, and a glimpse of why, were insightful.
Even at Seventy Three, there was a woman involved.
Nice job.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Why should anything change. God felt Eve was relevant back in those days. What he felt was good, stands the test of time despite what the woke may say.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is definitely weird. I didn't understand all the self-dialogue but you were delirious when you said it to yourself. So, I understand the predicament you were facing.
Lots of images of death for sure and this was entertaining in a weird sort of way.
Thanks for sharing your worst nightmare!
Jesse
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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This is definitely weird. I didn't understand all the self-dialogue but you were delirious when you said it to yourself. So, I understand the predicament you were facing.
Lots of images of death for sure and this was entertaining in a weird sort of way.
Thanks for sharing your worst nightmare!
Jesse
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Actually, it was a fun piece to write. Every once in a while, I fracture a fairy tale making something else from what it was. With this I just began at the beginning and did the same. Appreciate your reading me.
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Sorry I didn't understand it.
Have a great day!
Jesse
Comment from Wendy G
A very original piece, and no, it is not too overtly sexual. I like the creative way you presented this, talking to yourself, confused about why you were even dead. Humorous and witty entry. Best wishes for the contest!
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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A very original piece, and no, it is not too overtly sexual. I like the creative way you presented this, talking to yourself, confused about why you were even dead. Humorous and witty entry. Best wishes for the contest!
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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A fun piece to write. Every once in a while, I fracture a fairy tale making something else from what it was. With this I just began at the beginning and did the same hoping it would be a fun read. Appreciate your stopping by.
Comment from royowen
What a fascinating post. Quite definitely a stream of consciousness, a friend of mine struggles with abstract poetry, (and art) I explained, it's s little like the random thoughts that form a collective narrative, related but unrelated, it too me awhile, but I appreciate them more, as I examine myself. Beautifully written, Tom, I enjoyed, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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What a fascinating post. Quite definitely a stream of consciousness, a friend of mine struggles with abstract poetry, (and art) I explained, it's s little like the random thoughts that form a collective narrative, related but unrelated, it too me awhile, but I appreciate them more, as I examine myself. Beautifully written, Tom, I enjoyed, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Roy. I was unsure if it would pass a litmus test in humor.
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Well done Tom
Comment from lancellot
This is very interesting. I will keep an eye on this contest.
notes:
Why am I wearing a death mask?
"You ran face-on into a tree."
- I would alter or remove this. How would he know what on his face?
"Missing in action.
Likely, stuck in the tree.
Probably, for it seems to be
no longer a part of {me."}
- Here the 2nd you switches from 2nd person to first.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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This is very interesting. I will keep an eye on this contest.
notes:
Why am I wearing a death mask?
"You ran face-on into a tree."
- I would alter or remove this. How would he know what on his face?
"Missing in action.
Likely, stuck in the tree.
Probably, for it seems to be
no longer a part of {me."}
- Here the 2nd you switches from 2nd person to first.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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I am okay with the first suggestions as a spirit can travel through obstacles like dirt.
As for the second, I made an adjustment back to where The deceased was speaking those two lines. Thanks.
