Hourglass
When sands are drained37 total reviews
Comment from Goodadvicechan
Good title and a good choice of the picture!
The opening paragraph: My heart is broken
from all those I have lost
my angst mounting
as my country writhes
in the throws of death."
reminds me of
"Covid has killed so many people worldwide."
It is both sad and scary.
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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Good title and a good choice of the picture!
The opening paragraph: My heart is broken
from all those I have lost
my angst mounting
as my country writhes
in the throws of death."
reminds me of
"Covid has killed so many people worldwide."
It is both sad and scary.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 29-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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Thank you, It was a political reference, Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Paul McFarland
You have very effectively put forth your feelings in a short poem. I have those same feelings. As we near the end of our mortal life, we fear for the future of the young ones.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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You have very effectively put forth your feelings in a short poem. I have those same feelings. As we near the end of our mortal life, we fear for the future of the young ones.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Paul so much. Yes, we do. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
A well-written but sad poem. It seems as if you feel hopeless for better days to come. The visual fits well. I feel the font size could be larger for easier reading. Overall, a well-written and presented poem.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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A well-written but sad poem. It seems as if you feel hopeless for better days to come. The visual fits well. I feel the font size could be larger for easier reading. Overall, a well-written and presented poem.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Sandra. Blessings Barbara
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You are welcome, and blessings to you too.
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Thank you.
Comment from Michaela Moore
Your last line brought tears to my eyes. What a lovely poem of mourning and loss, but simultaneously shows weaves in much grace and mercy. I love poems that are so emotional and use the perfect word choice to paint unique images in the reader's mind to evoke those images. Lovely job!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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Your last line brought tears to my eyes. What a lovely poem of mourning and loss, but simultaneously shows weaves in much grace and mercy. I love poems that are so emotional and use the perfect word choice to paint unique images in the reader's mind to evoke those images. Lovely job!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Michaela for your lovely words, I'm so happy you liked it. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Lovnpeace,
although there is a deep sadness over-riding the shade in this poem, there is also a resounding calmness of acceptance that shines through in a knowing of protected faith.
I enjoyed reading your poem. I appreciated the presentation and composition... I appreciate the sentiment behind the words, it is beautiful.
With our thoughts we create...
a timeless view.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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Hi Lovnpeace,
although there is a deep sadness over-riding the shade in this poem, there is also a resounding calmness of acceptance that shines through in a knowing of protected faith.
I enjoyed reading your poem. I appreciated the presentation and composition... I appreciate the sentiment behind the words, it is beautiful.
With our thoughts we create...
a timeless view.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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Thank you James. I apprecate your kind words and happy you liked this. Blessings, Barbaea
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
I hear you. I am the youngest of 13 kids, so I have lost almost all of my twelve siblings, and still I linger. Now I am beginning to lose grandchildren. Lord knows I am ready for my reward. Sometimes it just gets too hard.
Very introspective piece.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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I hear you. I am the youngest of 13 kids, so I have lost almost all of my twelve siblings, and still I linger. Now I am beginning to lose grandchildren. Lord knows I am ready for my reward. Sometimes it just gets too hard.
Very introspective piece.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Gary. OMY Gosh, I am so sorry for your losses. I too am ready. God Bless you, Barbara
Comment from royowen
There is a wonderful scripture that tells us God will never allow us to be temped above what we're able to stand, sometimes we seem to reach that level, but He reassures us that we won't break, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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There is a wonderful scripture that tells us God will never allow us to be temped above what we're able to stand, sometimes we seem to reach that level, but He reassures us that we won't break, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Roy. I always say, God made me strong, cause He knew I would need it. Blessings, Barbara
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I?m only glad God is strong.
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Amen
Comment from lyenochka
Yes, the Lord has all our days in His wise and perfect Hands. That's why Moses wrote in Psalm 90, "Teach us to number our days." Though things can look bleak, and we suffer loss here on earth, we know God has it all in His control. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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Yes, the Lord has all our days in His wise and perfect Hands. That's why Moses wrote in Psalm 90, "Teach us to number our days." Though things can look bleak, and we suffer loss here on earth, we know God has it all in His control. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Amen. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A beautiful poem about faith shining through grief.
I enjoyed reading it. I also enjoyed your unique style and well chosen words.
Good presentation Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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A beautiful poem about faith shining through grief.
I enjoyed reading it. I also enjoyed your unique style and well chosen words.
Good presentation Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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Thank you, so much Gypsy. I believe in Kiss, even in my writing. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem's stanzas use Line breaks well and some vaguely look like an hour glass. The words remind us to be thankful for our time here and for Gog's mercy.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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This poem's stanzas use Line breaks well and some vaguely look like an hour glass. The words remind us to be thankful for our time here and for Gog's mercy.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Joan. You also. Blessings, Barbara
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No problem, LnP.
Joan
