Quiet Lawyer
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25 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Alexandra is a New York lawyer, but I think she is trying to be a tough Texas cowboy lawyer in this story. Is she not afraid of those big bad boys when she gets to New York?
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Alexandra is a New York lawyer, but I think she is trying to be a tough Texas cowboy lawyer in this story. Is she not afraid of those big bad boys when she gets to New York?
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Ali has a lot of strengths to go with her weaknesses. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Barbara,
I stumbled onto your novel in the midst of the action; but like any good novel, I get the gist of what this story is about. (I studied Spanish in college, and, at one time, I was fluent. It is a beautiful language, another reason I like your story).
I like your characterization, and the way you keep the reader guessing about what comes next.
Congratulations on being published!
Good luck with all you write.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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Barbara,
I stumbled onto your novel in the midst of the action; but like any good novel, I get the gist of what this story is about. (I studied Spanish in college, and, at one time, I was fluent. It is a beautiful language, another reason I like your story).
I like your characterization, and the way you keep the reader guessing about what comes next.
Congratulations on being published!
Good luck with all you write.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this encouraging review. I taught first grade in a bilingual for 14 years. Please drop by again.
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You?re welcome, Barbara.😊
Comment from dmt1967
"You're armed, aren't you?" (When he nodded, she started to say something, but instead answered her ringing phone.) This is very telling. (He nodded. Alexandra phone rang.) Something like this, in my opinion, is short and sweet.
(She shot a warning glare at Cordero for laughing.) Again, telling. (Cordero laughed and she shot him a warning glare.)
This is another great chapter. Thank you for sharing and have a great week.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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"You're armed, aren't you?" (When he nodded, she started to say something, but instead answered her ringing phone.) This is very telling. (He nodded. Alexandra phone rang.) Something like this, in my opinion, is short and sweet.
(She shot a warning glare at Cordero for laughing.) Again, telling. (Cordero laughed and she shot him a warning glare.)
This is another great chapter. Thank you for sharing and have a great week.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and catching those small points. I did put them there for a reason.
Comment from estory
I thought the dialogue was very engaging and it also revealed the mutually respectful / romantic relationship Corderro and Alexandra are dancing around in. And also Alexandra's quick on her feet posturing as he deals with the other lawyer. I thought it was all very well composed visually with lots of good detail and I could deffinitely see this unfolding on a TV screen. estory
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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I thought the dialogue was very engaging and it also revealed the mutually respectful / romantic relationship Corderro and Alexandra are dancing around in. And also Alexandra's quick on her feet posturing as he deals with the other lawyer. I thought it was all very well composed visually with lots of good detail and I could deffinitely see this unfolding on a TV screen. estory
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is an excellent lead up chapter to the visit, in a dangerous setting, Barbara. And I like that Alex and Cord take every little opportunity they get, to learn something more about each other. Well done.
One little spag: Van Horn's up head(ahead).
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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This is an excellent lead up chapter to the visit, in a dangerous setting, Barbara. And I like that Alex and Cord take every little opportunity they get, to learn something more about each other. Well done.
One little spag: Van Horn's up head(ahead).
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help.
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You?re very welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Another good chapter. I like the way Alexandra responded to Mr. Brown. Sounds like she knows what she is doing and won't let anyone put anything over on her. Romance is progressing.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Another good chapter. I like the way Alexandra responded to Mr. Brown. Sounds like she knows what she is doing and won't let anyone put anything over on her. Romance is progressing.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome
Comment from Gert sherwood
Barbra
Here I am wondering who is broken
I'm going to say, You for some
reason not comfortable of what you are saying, here is an example
"If you meant, do I wish you were from Hispanic descendants? It's not important as long as my culture's respected. You do." Cordero exhaled. "Now for the tough one. If you meant, do I wish you weren't from New York City? I do wish that. But I need to add, I care about you, a lot. Being from the city is part of who you are.
Barb, One thing about your writing is written very well, so I can understand what you are saying
Gert
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Barbra
Here I am wondering who is broken
I'm going to say, You for some
reason not comfortable of what you are saying, here is an example
"If you meant, do I wish you were from Hispanic descendants? It's not important as long as my culture's respected. You do." Cordero exhaled. "Now for the tough one. If you meant, do I wish you weren't from New York City? I do wish that. But I need to add, I care about you, a lot. Being from the city is part of who you are.
Barb, One thing about your writing is written very well, so I can understand what you are saying
Gert
Comment Written 25-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I will look at that section.
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You are most welcome
Barbara
Gert
Comment from Ric Myworld
I used to eat at Whataburger in Ft. Walton Beach Florida way back in the days. My favorite late night pig out after a night on the town. LOL. It appears that Alexandra is more worldly wise than I had figured her. Thanks for another great chapter.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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I used to eat at Whataburger in Ft. Walton Beach Florida way back in the days. My favorite late night pig out after a night on the town. LOL. It appears that Alexandra is more worldly wise than I had figured her. Thanks for another great chapter.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. When I need to cheat on my diet, Whataburger is one of my favorite places to go.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
A nice post pushing the plot along with Amy and Mr. Brown at the same time and developing the characters of Alexandra and Cordero. A good flow to this chapter. Good work.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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A nice post pushing the plot along with Amy and Mr. Brown at the same time and developing the characters of Alexandra and Cordero. A good flow to this chapter. Good work.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Everything looks good to me. I would check for comma placement. I'm not an expert on it myself. I thought you did a good job on the transitions and scene changes. Your character traits remain constant, which shows good note keeping.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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Everything looks good to me. I would check for comma placement. I'm not an expert on it myself. I thought you did a good job on the transitions and scene changes. Your character traits remain constant, which shows good note keeping.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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I am lousy at comma placements. I have a few reviewers who keep me honest with them. I usually believe in the 'when in doubt leave it out' theory.
