Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Alexandra does appear to get herself into lots of mischiefs. I hope her steps are safe when she gets into Magoffin. Sounds like an active town of violence.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Alexandra does appear to get herself into lots of mischiefs. I hope her steps are safe when she gets into Magoffin. Sounds like an active town of violence.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. We'll see what happens.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and towards the end the characters' conversation makes the story more interesting.
I've missed some pieces, but I'm sure to feel myself in its main stream soon.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and towards the end the characters' conversation makes the story more interesting.
I've missed some pieces, but I'm sure to feel myself in its main stream soon.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Barbara.Wilkey, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from John Ciarmello
Another great chapter, Ali is a tough little bird. I wish they would admit that they're more than friends. It makes me wonder if you have something else in store for my favorite couple. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Another great chapter, Ali is a tough little bird. I wish they would admit that they're more than friends. It makes me wonder if you have something else in store for my favorite couple. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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I think Ali's background has a lot to do with it. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Keep their relationship moving along as you will. Those things need time to develop.
Pace of story chapter, and plot line, hold interest throughout the telling.
Ending leads to several possible scenarios.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Keep their relationship moving along as you will. Those things need time to develop.
Pace of story chapter, and plot line, hold interest throughout the telling.
Ending leads to several possible scenarios.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the encouraging support.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. I like how you are developing the relationship between Ali and Cord. The picture is perfect for a country courthouse. I look forward to the next installment.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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This is another excellent chapter. I like how you are developing the relationship between Ali and Cord. The picture is perfect for a country courthouse. I look forward to the next installment.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Fleedleflump
For my money, the pace of the relationship is natural and I like it. If this was purely romance, perhaps one might expect it to be faster, but you also have the legal drama plot-line so that develops in parallel. I think it's going at a good pace!
I enjoyed the scene with the judge - I could visualise things as they were playing out - and the gentle closing scene as they talked about El Paso and the culture was a nice counterpoint.
Mike
Spag notes:
'I am. Last week. I filed some paperwork.' - i think it should be a comma after 'week'
'Your reputation proceeds you.' - 'proceeds' should be 'precedes'
'Chuckling Cordero shook his head.' - needs a comma after 'Chuckling'
'During dinner the afternoon events were discussed' - needs a comma after 'dinner'
'It's with the Ford Cooperation.' - is that meant to be corporation?
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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For my money, the pace of the relationship is natural and I like it. If this was purely romance, perhaps one might expect it to be faster, but you also have the legal drama plot-line so that develops in parallel. I think it's going at a good pace!
I enjoyed the scene with the judge - I could visualise things as they were playing out - and the gentle closing scene as they talked about El Paso and the culture was a nice counterpoint.
Mike
Spag notes:
'I am. Last week. I filed some paperwork.' - i think it should be a comma after 'week'
'Your reputation proceeds you.' - 'proceeds' should be 'precedes'
'Chuckling Cordero shook his head.' - needs a comma after 'Chuckling'
'During dinner the afternoon events were discussed' - needs a comma after 'dinner'
'It's with the Ford Cooperation.' - is that meant to be corporation?
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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I HATE commas. I've settled myself into when in doubt leave them out. LOL I really appreciate the help. I honestly thought I had them in this time. When I edited, I knew you would point them out and I still messed up. I truly mean thank you. As for the spelling my US accent gets in the way and then spell check is of no help.
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Just glad I can help. My own Achilles heel is punctuation around speech marks, as I know you've noticed :-)
Comment from Sanku
Lot of excitement and drama here .Ali is very competent.The next chapter alsp promises to be thrilling
I am with you in that the couples romance should develop slowly ..ait is a relief compared to lust at first sight...
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Lot of excitement and drama here .Ali is very competent.The next chapter alsp promises to be thrilling
I am with you in that the couples romance should develop slowly ..ait is a relief compared to lust at first sight...
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind reveiw.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed reading this chapter.
I have not read all of them so I appreciate the last chapter recap, author notes and character descriptions.
I enjoyed the overall flow of the story and sensory details used.
Your phraseology and descriptive writing helped me connect to the characters and their environment.
The dialogue feels authentic and has a nice tempo.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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I enjoyed reading this chapter.
I have not read all of them so I appreciate the last chapter recap, author notes and character descriptions.
I enjoyed the overall flow of the story and sensory details used.
Your phraseology and descriptive writing helped me connect to the characters and their environment.
The dialogue feels authentic and has a nice tempo.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another excellent chapter, Barbara. Alexandra is certainly a different person when she's practicing what she knows about law. I look forward to finding out what the next day will bring.
A couple of little things:
Jorge's eyed(eyes) met hers.
to check on Bendecido and worked(work) with Jewel.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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This is another excellent chapter, Barbara. Alexandra is certainly a different person when she's practicing what she knows about law. I look forward to finding out what the next day will bring.
A couple of little things:
Jorge's eyed(eyes) met hers.
to check on Bendecido and worked(work) with Jewel.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the catches. I have made the corrections. I appreciate the help.
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You are most welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a very taut and interesting chapter. I vote that you are right to allow Ali time to heal from her past relationship, although that guy doesn't sound like he'd have allowed her to remain a virgin. It didn't feel long at all, your writing is so smooth and well-done.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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This is a very taut and interesting chapter. I vote that you are right to allow Ali time to heal from her past relationship, although that guy doesn't sound like he'd have allowed her to remain a virgin. It didn't feel long at all, your writing is so smooth and well-done.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. Hence the reason, he was discovered with another woman.
