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My Bipolar Head50 total reviews
Comment from leather
This is a poignant and well-described poem about an issue many are unfamiliar with. Depression follows when everything gets scrambled and doesn't seem to want to leave. I do hope you can find hope or therapy that will be of help.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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This is a poignant and well-described poem about an issue many are unfamiliar with. Depression follows when everything gets scrambled and doesn't seem to want to leave. I do hope you can find hope or therapy that will be of help.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thanks for your insightful understanding and yes depression is hard but therapy and my writing do help. Your review is very much appreciated!
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You're welcome.
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Thanks for your insightful understanding and yes depression is hard but therapy and my writing do help. Your review is very much appreciated!
Comment from R.B.Bunn
This is raw and sounds very honest. While I don't have bipolar disorder (I have other mental health issues), I can relate to this. It's like one day I was fine and the one day there was like a switch that flipped liked you described. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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This is raw and sounds very honest. While I don't have bipolar disorder (I have other mental health issues), I can relate to this. It's like one day I was fine and the one day there was like a switch that flipped liked you described. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I feel for you my friend. Thanks for sharing your challenges and tans thanks for the great review!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
As a fellow Bipolar sufferer I feel for you. I also had a lot of black in my life for many years, that lead to numerous hospitalizations - the last one for three months. That was the beginning of my stabilization, fuelled by a complete change of environment and lifestyle, and completed by becoming a Grandy that has brought me great joy. I hope you too will one day find a way to chase out the black. Kate xx
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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As a fellow Bipolar sufferer I feel for you. I also had a lot of black in my life for many years, that lead to numerous hospitalizations - the last one for three months. That was the beginning of my stabilization, fuelled by a complete change of environment and lifestyle, and completed by becoming a Grandy that has brought me great joy. I hope you too will one day find a way to chase out the black. Kate xx
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Dear Kate, congratulations on becoming a Grandy and finding your source of happiness. I am finding mine through writing and the peacefulness of my new surroundings. Many blessings to you.
Comment from Write Right Writer
Ramona...
Excellent work. A strong theme and focused content. No worries about rhythm, meter, or rhyme in free verse. Your work touched my heart and stirred my soul. Thanks you.
The color metaphor and expressed desire for that addition of new colors (pink and purple) with the uninvited addition of immutable, black, gunky stuff is particularly powerful and emotionally evocative. Well done.
At the risk of overstepping and in the spirit of collaboration, I have a thought that may or may not be helpful. Your work is not my work and you may be expressing precisely what you intend--but I wonder if the three stanzas that do not include an overt reference to color (not all days..., I start things..., what's the point...) and the first part of stanza four (I wish it would. It makes me mad! It makes me very sad...), though critically important aspects of BP disorder, may diffuse focus and lessen the impact of this piece. Just a thought. Take it, tweak it, or trash it as you see fit.
Lastly, I really like your "brain is jumbled" stanza. It brilliantly connects the color metaphor to the bipolar theme. Excellent work!
Given your picture and reference to "gunky stuff," what about replacing the words, "bits and pieces" with something like "tangled shreds" or "mangled swiggles" or "tattered knots?" Again, please view my collaborative suggestions in the spirit they are intended (only powerful work like this engages my creative thinking).
Blessings...
Curt
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Ramona...
Excellent work. A strong theme and focused content. No worries about rhythm, meter, or rhyme in free verse. Your work touched my heart and stirred my soul. Thanks you.
The color metaphor and expressed desire for that addition of new colors (pink and purple) with the uninvited addition of immutable, black, gunky stuff is particularly powerful and emotionally evocative. Well done.
At the risk of overstepping and in the spirit of collaboration, I have a thought that may or may not be helpful. Your work is not my work and you may be expressing precisely what you intend--but I wonder if the three stanzas that do not include an overt reference to color (not all days..., I start things..., what's the point...) and the first part of stanza four (I wish it would. It makes me mad! It makes me very sad...), though critically important aspects of BP disorder, may diffuse focus and lessen the impact of this piece. Just a thought. Take it, tweak it, or trash it as you see fit.
Lastly, I really like your "brain is jumbled" stanza. It brilliantly connects the color metaphor to the bipolar theme. Excellent work!
Given your picture and reference to "gunky stuff," what about replacing the words, "bits and pieces" with something like "tangled shreds" or "mangled swiggles" or "tattered knots?" Again, please view my collaborative suggestions in the spirit they are intended (only powerful work like this engages my creative thinking).
Blessings...
Curt
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Dear Curt, thank you so much for your thoughts. I shall put them to work on my rewrite for my book. I appreciate the review.
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Ramona...
You are welcome. It was my pleasure. And thank you for accepting my prescriptive opinions with an open and graceful spirit. Congratulations on your upcoming book. Keep me posted as to its release.
Blessings...
Curt
Comment from MissMerri
I have great sympathy for your bipolar disorder Ramona. I think I know something about what it must feel like. I have a daughter with the same condition. Your poem was so readable and so relatable too. I liked how you compared your brain to the various colors, and bad days to black. I hope you have some artistic activities to occupy your time. Writing is a good activity, but painting or making jewelry or drawing can also be lots of fun and extremely satisfying. I wish you the best. MM
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I have great sympathy for your bipolar disorder Ramona. I think I know something about what it must feel like. I have a daughter with the same condition. Your poem was so readable and so relatable too. I liked how you compared your brain to the various colors, and bad days to black. I hope you have some artistic activities to occupy your time. Writing is a good activity, but painting or making jewelry or drawing can also be lots of fun and extremely satisfying. I wish you the best. MM
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much for your kindness, understanding and encouragement.
Comment from ElPoetry001
Welcome, we are ready to get started.
We must all focus on the up take inhibitors, while embracing the BP, OCD, and history, genes, prescriptions, and therapy.
Oh, it could be worse, they say, yet their minds are not open for play.
Embrace the irritating colors, consider them as a friend that seeks to hang out, praise them as exciting and welcome; the lack of resistance will diminish their existence.
You have moved on; your thoughts become focused on a positive goal, and the colors become a faded background.
Easy, miracle cure?
No, but the mind can be recaptured.
It belongs to you. Take charge.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Welcome, we are ready to get started.
We must all focus on the up take inhibitors, while embracing the BP, OCD, and history, genes, prescriptions, and therapy.
Oh, it could be worse, they say, yet their minds are not open for play.
Embrace the irritating colors, consider them as a friend that seeks to hang out, praise them as exciting and welcome; the lack of resistance will diminish their existence.
You have moved on; your thoughts become focused on a positive goal, and the colors become a faded background.
Easy, miracle cure?
No, but the mind can be recaptured.
It belongs to you. Take charge.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Wise words to live by my friend. Thank you for the excellent review! I?m exalted!
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Stay well.
Comment from estory
The image of the jumbled up kalaidascope of colors is a great metaphor for the bipolar condition. It has that jumpiness to it, the moments of brightness and darkness contrasting with each other, and I liked how you fractured and fragmented your lines here. The form followed the theme very well. A great framework for it. estory
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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The image of the jumbled up kalaidascope of colors is a great metaphor for the bipolar condition. It has that jumpiness to it, the moments of brightness and darkness contrasting with each other, and I liked how you fractured and fragmented your lines here. The form followed the theme very well. A great framework for it. estory
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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You really seemed to understand the bipolar condition. Perhaps from knowing someone with it? The best review I have had yet. Thank you.
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Great poem! This is a unique way to express the jumble of thoughts and feelings; and the artwork complements the poem beautifully! It is a very nice expression of a complicated and invading illness, and I wish you luck and health in the future! Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Great poem! This is a unique way to express the jumble of thoughts and feelings; and the artwork complements the poem beautifully! It is a very nice expression of a complicated and invading illness, and I wish you luck and health in the future! Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thanks for the nice review!
Comment from rjuselius
This is a beautifully written poem dear ramona! It touches the darkside of life and sanity. Very interestering indeed although rather eerie.
Good luck! Blessings with hugs and kisses!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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This is a beautifully written poem dear ramona! It touches the darkside of life and sanity. Very interestering indeed although rather eerie.
Good luck! Blessings with hugs and kisses!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thank you Rebekka! I?m glad you found it interesting and we?re able to understand. Blessings to you also.
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My pleasure entirely dear ramona!
Comment from sherrygreywolf
Interesting free form poem. Having dealt with bipolar disorder in my own family, I can relate to almost everything you said. And though I do not suffer from bipolar disorder myself, I do suffer from occation depressive episodes that lead to the same type of exhaustion and inability to complete tasks. Found myself identifying with much of the piece. Great job and HANG IN THERE!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Interesting free form poem. Having dealt with bipolar disorder in my own family, I can relate to almost everything you said. And though I do not suffer from bipolar disorder myself, I do suffer from occation depressive episodes that lead to the same type of exhaustion and inability to complete tasks. Found myself identifying with much of the piece. Great job and HANG IN THERE!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thank you! Depression is debilitating. You hang in there too. Thanks for the nice review!
