Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Security cameras might be a safe way to keep Alexandra safe. Some of the fellows sound a little rough; possibly be a situation where they would try to kidnap or hurt her again. She appears not afraid.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Security cameras might be a safe way to keep Alexandra safe. Some of the fellows sound a little rough; possibly be a situation where they would try to kidnap or hurt her again. She appears not afraid.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
You've done a great job with this chapter, Barbara. Apparently Alexandra hadn't considered the bag of worms she was opening and the danger she put herself in. Codero won't want to leave her side until these guys are in jail.
I'm happy your son came through his surgery well and you are home now. I understand how you feel about the traveling. We are on our way home and should be there sometime on Thursday. I really thought I'd get much more reviewing and writing done than I have. I'll be busy catching up for the rest of the week!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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You've done a great job with this chapter, Barbara. Apparently Alexandra hadn't considered the bag of worms she was opening and the danger she put herself in. Codero won't want to leave her side until these guys are in jail.
I'm happy your son came through his surgery well and you are home now. I understand how you feel about the traveling. We are on our way home and should be there sometime on Thursday. I really thought I'd get much more reviewing and writing done than I have. I'll be busy catching up for the rest of the week!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and I will pray for traveling mercies.
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You?re very welcome, Barbara. Hugs.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good plot development. Well written.
"I'm sorry I've brought this trouble on you. Maybe I should..." - When ending a sentence, an ellipsis needs a fourth dot.
I'll help Ali to her room - Sometimes Ali is made to behave as if an invalid after having been strong.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Good plot development. Well written.
"I'm sorry I've brought this trouble on you. Maybe I should..." - When ending a sentence, an ellipsis needs a fourth dot.
I'll help Ali to her room - Sometimes Ali is made to behave as if an invalid after having been strong.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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So true. Cord feels he must protect her. She will come out strong at the end. I promise. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is another one of your very interesting chapters. Pat sounds like he could be deadly. You did have a few little problems, probably from all that travelling. Amy Hardy (to) see if . . . As Alex cringed (her hand was pressed) against . . . ( I read the previous sentence s few times before I got it read correctly, but it is awkward.) . . . closed her eyes and (sighed--used cringed already) . . . Good to hear Steven is doing well.
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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This is another one of your very interesting chapters. Pat sounds like he could be deadly. You did have a few little problems, probably from all that travelling. Amy Hardy (to) see if . . . As Alex cringed (her hand was pressed) against . . . ( I read the previous sentence s few times before I got it read correctly, but it is awkward.) . . . closed her eyes and (sighed--used cringed already) . . . Good to hear Steven is doing well.
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Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the help. I have made the corrections. Did you mean to give me four stars?
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Sort of. I tend to give that for three or more mistakes. Then I feel guilty but wish there was an easier way to just say, whoa, wait a minute, better look it over better. This grading system is difficult for me.
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Okay, I reserve fours for about 6 or 7 errors. I understand.
Comment from estory
I thought you had great lively dialogue in this chapter that intertwined all the characters and brough out the emotions between them. The heros and the trouble makers stand in sharp contrast to each other, and we see Alexandra and Rico and those on their side working to achieve justice. estory
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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I thought you had great lively dialogue in this chapter that intertwined all the characters and brough out the emotions between them. The heros and the trouble makers stand in sharp contrast to each other, and we see Alexandra and Rico and those on their side working to achieve justice. estory
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Sankey
This was a very dramatic chapter. Why is the font so large? Is that a mistake? "I guess now-a-days that's enough." ...Isn't "nowadays" more correct?
Amy Harding (t)[s]o see if I can get her
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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This was a very dramatic chapter. Why is the font so large? Is that a mistake? "I guess now-a-days that's enough." ...Isn't "nowadays" more correct?
Amy Harding (t)[s]o see if I can get her
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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I am not sure about now a days. That's what my computer corrected it to. I will search it out. I've had complaints about small font, so I went large. Thank you for the kind review.
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Well my eyes are not that good and your regular font was ok with me. Grammarly can be a pain if that is what you use for editing.
Comment from lancellot
Your writing is good and the conversations flow naturally. Luke's feelings are still on the weak side, but you need a villain to go with Roberts.
I would take care. Many times you say how there are no secrets in a small town. Then... well you know.
Nice chapter. Good editing.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Your writing is good and the conversations flow naturally. Luke's feelings are still on the weak side, but you need a villain to go with Roberts.
I would take care. Many times you say how there are no secrets in a small town. Then... well you know.
Nice chapter. Good editing.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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There are no secrets in small town. Truly there are none. Everybody knows everybody's business. If they don't, they will make it up. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
You ramped up the tension with Sam's warning to Cordero to keep her under close wraps until Pat was found and arrested. Great chapter!
As Alexandra cringed, with her hand she pressed against her wound. [I question the order of this sentence, Barbara. The way it's written it begs the question, what else would she press against her wound but her hand. Yet when you turn it around to, "Alexandra cringed when she pressed her hand against her wound." ... you don't have that problem.]
Cordero stood. "Sam, could you come back later? I think Ali needs to rest." [Cordero's a real lamb ... *wink* *wink*]
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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You ramped up the tension with Sam's warning to Cordero to keep her under close wraps until Pat was found and arrested. Great chapter!
As Alexandra cringed, with her hand she pressed against her wound. [I question the order of this sentence, Barbara. The way it's written it begs the question, what else would she press against her wound but her hand. Yet when you turn it around to, "Alexandra cringed when she pressed her hand against her wound." ... you don't have that problem.]
Cordero stood. "Sam, could you come back later? I think Ali needs to rest." [Cordero's a real lamb ... *wink* *wink*]
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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I didn't have the hand there to begin with but was afraid somebody would question it. So added it. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Loved the chapter, and here's your six for the week. I'm glad the surgery went well, and you do get to stay home for awhile. Have a blessed Sunday evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Loved the chapter, and here's your six for the week. I'm glad the surgery went well, and you do get to stay home for awhile. Have a blessed Sunday evening. Shirley
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I think Steven is ready for his mom to stay home too. LOL
Comment from BethShelby
Ali had some men very angry with her for not allowing them to get away with what they do without having to answer for it. These men are ruthless and Ali fees she has put everyone in danger. I'm enjoying your story.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Ali had some men very angry with her for not allowing them to get away with what they do without having to answer for it. These men are ruthless and Ali fees she has put everyone in danger. I'm enjoying your story.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
