Repression # 45
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Comment from leather
This is a good poem with a colorful image.
It does need a spelling change in the second sentence and probably a grammar check on this sentence: "I stuff and stuff until I cannot feel no more." This line leaves the reader with a choppy reading experience. You may want to consider changing it to: 'I cannot feel any more' or 'I can feel no more.' Best wishes.
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This is a good poem with a colorful image.
It does need a spelling change in the second sentence and probably a grammar check on this sentence: "I stuff and stuff until I cannot feel no more." This line leaves the reader with a choppy reading experience. You may want to consider changing it to: 'I cannot feel any more' or 'I can feel no more.' Best wishes.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
Comment from prettybluebirds
In the second sentence you misspelled (here) You wrote (her) Other than that I didn't spot any errors. What we all need to do is let go and let God. We fight and struggle when all we need to do is ask. Nicely written.
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In the second sentence you misspelled (here) You wrote (her) Other than that I didn't spot any errors. What we all need to do is let go and let God. We fight and struggle when all we need to do is ask. Nicely written.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
