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Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Dangerous Sport"
Dragon Dance Chronicles Book 2

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Comment from John Ciarmello
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I love this story, Mike. I try to read and keep up, but they are so well written and prologued they stand-alone, which I like. I'm partial to the character Smiff. He is super definable and easy to read. Great stuff.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
    Thanks so much, John :-). Almost finished with this one now.

    Mike
Comment from prettybluebirds
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Excellent writing. I truly enjoyed reading another chapter of your interesting story. I can't wait to find out where you are going with this. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
    Thank you :-). We're entering the home straight now so only 2 or 3 more to go!

    Mike
Comment from royowen
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Oh there's a fifth column in the camp, Napoleon was right! It's not the enemy one faces, it's the one in your midst. But he seems genuine enough, but how can one trust anyone completely. But the character Rozlyn is a smart, but tainted cookie, well done, Mike, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
    Thanks Roy :-). Almost at the end of this mad tale (I have two more Companions stories waiting to be finished, polished and posted though).

    Mike
reply by royowen on 04-Jun-2022
    Well done
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I really like this story. I can't wait for more.

He opened his mouth to speak and I leaned forward, smashing his lips with my forehead. (comma needed after 'speak' because of two different subjects.)

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
    Aha! Many thanks for the eagle eye! We're heading I to the closing straight for this story now :-).

    Mike
Comment from Beri Bee
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The dialogue really shines! The pacing is great! My two cents: 1) When you write "spec... special" It read as "speck... special," since I didn't know what word was coming; 2) I love how you begin en media res, but your dialogue is so compelling, I'd like to hear a line, any line, at the beginning of the first punishing (first paragraph). That is all, sir. Well done! Thanks!

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
    Thanks so much, my friend :-). We're heading into the final straight for this tale now. Thoughts always appreciated.

    Mike
reply by Beri Bee on 04-Jun-2022
    my pleasure! It will be fun to go back and read the whole thing straight through.