lighthouse in storm
20 syllable contest (wind whipped white-capped waves)11 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and well written 20 syllable poem you have penned for the contest. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, teri
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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This is a very beautiful and well written 20 syllable poem you have penned for the contest. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, teri
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thanks Teri!
The FS committee awarded a third place for this poem. Apparently by osmosis, you helped with your good wishes.
Mark
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You are so welcome my friend! love and blessings, teri
Comment from country ranch writer
Light shine their beams through the storms so folks can bring their ships home safely.it helps prevent the ships from crashing on the rock or into each other !
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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Light shine their beams through the storms so folks can bring their ships home safely.it helps prevent the ships from crashing on the rock or into each other !
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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Pleased you liked the idea of this post. Do appreciate your review and stars.
Mark
Comment from dragonpoet
I like all the alliteration with w and sh in this description of how a light house saves a boat from the stormy seas. This can also be a metaphor about how faith and inner light can help you weather the problems life throws at you in daily life.
Congrats on your third place finish in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I like all the alliteration with w and sh in this description of how a light house saves a boat from the stormy seas. This can also be a metaphor about how faith and inner light can help you weather the problems life throws at you in daily life.
Congrats on your third place finish in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Joan,
Thanks for your compliment.
The metaphor was not a conscious thought, but I do appreciate your spin on my poem. Always very pleased when the FS contest committee awards me a podium placement.
Mark
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You're welcome, Mark.
Joan.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Marco!
An engaging theme.
Lighthouses are sentinels, their light reaches out way yonder helping seamen find their way safely home during a storm.
Lighthouse keepers have saved many lives, sadly though many keepers have died doing the job.
I find there is something eerie about these remote structures. Though I'm a loner by nature and can go for days without seeing or speaking a word, the thought to pass even one night in a lighthouse spooks me out.
Many keepers went crazy but it was not solo due to isolation but also because many suffered mercury poisoning.
In the 1890s to ease the rotation of the lens, keepers started to float the very heavy base of the lens structure in liquid mercury. It rotated faster and made less noise.
In those days Mercury was used for medical reasons so no one was aware that prolonged exposure to mercury poisoning caused mood swings, memory loss, anxiety, delirium confusion, hallucinations
Have you watched The Lighthouse based loosely on the true story of two Welsh keepers?
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Ciao Marco!
An engaging theme.
Lighthouses are sentinels, their light reaches out way yonder helping seamen find their way safely home during a storm.
Lighthouse keepers have saved many lives, sadly though many keepers have died doing the job.
I find there is something eerie about these remote structures. Though I'm a loner by nature and can go for days without seeing or speaking a word, the thought to pass even one night in a lighthouse spooks me out.
Many keepers went crazy but it was not solo due to isolation but also because many suffered mercury poisoning.
In the 1890s to ease the rotation of the lens, keepers started to float the very heavy base of the lens structure in liquid mercury. It rotated faster and made less noise.
In those days Mercury was used for medical reasons so no one was aware that prolonged exposure to mercury poisoning caused mood swings, memory loss, anxiety, delirium confusion, hallucinations
Have you watched The Lighthouse based loosely on the true story of two Welsh keepers?
Comment Written 10-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Did not know about the mercury issue. Thanks for that info.
Pleased you felt so positive about my post.
Mark
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Ciao Marco!
No , I did not . It was your poem that spurred me to google and read more about lighthouses.
And this afternoon I ? ll watch The Lighthouse. 2019
I have not seen The Lighthouse Keepers Daughter .. a Sweden film I can?t even find trailer . Is it dubbed or with captions?
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The Lighthouse Keeper's Daughter
1918 film - doubt this is the same one from the book I read LOL
Comment from royowen
What a wonderful entry in thus contest Mark, the storm tossed sea always conjures up some great imagery, the sea can throw up so many great metaphors for writing, well done, Mark, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022
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What a wonderful entry in thus contest Mark, the storm tossed sea always conjures up some great imagery, the sea can throw up so many great metaphors for writing, well done, Mark, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022
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Thanks Roy for such a nice review of this post. As you know, I flavor my poems with alliterative scents.
Mark
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Most welcome
Comment from Faith Williams
Love the alliteration and imagery in the first line of your poem. Great picture to accompany your poem. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022
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Love the alliteration and imagery in the first line of your poem. Great picture to accompany your poem. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022
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Thanks Faith for your kind words for my short poem style; my favorite writing format is actually 5-7-5. And I routinely sprinkle alliterative flourishes in many of my poems.
Mark
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Mark, you poem is filled with good imagery and alliteration.
Perfect syllable count. I especially liked:
lighthouse beacon seeks distressed ship
Well chosen photo. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
LateBloomer
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Hi Mark, you poem is filled with good imagery and alliteration.
Perfect syllable count. I especially liked:
lighthouse beacon seeks distressed ship
Well chosen photo. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
LateBloomer
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you for such a nice review! FanArt delivers again.
Mark
Comment from Beri Bee
These are twenty beautiful syllables! The image of a lighthouse seeking out the distressed is very special. It changes the usual thought of an inanimate light that the ship must find. I really like that! Thanks!
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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These are twenty beautiful syllables! The image of a lighthouse seeking out the distressed is very special. It changes the usual thought of an inanimate light that the ship must find. I really like that! Thanks!
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Beri,
So pleased with your view(point) on this post. It proves that reviewers have different lenses in interpreting a poem.
Comment from karenina
Hello stranger!
It's been a minute between posts!
This one's for the big money, right? Doesn't the committee decide?
Well, they ought to be impressed!
Your alliterative skill is on full display, your image is perfect, and the sheer poetry is packed full of imagery and emotion!
I'm out of sixes - I need to take a course in budgeting!
But if I had any--a stellar sextet would be landing here!
Best of luck!
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Hello stranger!
It's been a minute between posts!
This one's for the big money, right? Doesn't the committee decide?
Well, they ought to be impressed!
Your alliterative skill is on full display, your image is perfect, and the sheer poetry is packed full of imagery and emotion!
I'm out of sixes - I need to take a course in budgeting!
But if I had any--a stellar sextet would be landing here!
Best of luck!
Karenina
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Karenina,
As my press agent, you have outdid yourself with your blurb about my contest post.
Of course, I like to slip in alliteration whenever I can. Some may say it is overdone, but I write for my own pleasure. So your pats on my back are very much appreciated.
There is only one time where I reached the top podium step with a committee vote. So maybe this one will honor me again with a top three placement.
Thanks, as always, for your commentary and good wishes for my posts.
Mark
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As your press agent and fan I try to shine your light whenever I can!
I remember my first $100 winner!
You might have thought I'd win the lottery!
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K
You need to buy a ticket to have a chance LOL
Thanks for your light.
M
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Smile...
Comment from RodG
Mark,i t's easy to visualize this stormy day at sea and the lighthouse's beacon seeking the distressed ship. You're a bit heavy-handed with the alliteration, but it makes this poem fun to read aloud. Rod
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reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Mark,i t's easy to visualize this stormy day at sea and the lighthouse's beacon seeking the distressed ship. You're a bit heavy-handed with the alliteration, but it makes this poem fun to read aloud. Rod
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Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Rod,
I do overdo my alliteration in many of my poems. It is a quirk I often enjoy employing for my posts. Pleased my visualization worked for you.
Mark
