Here is How a Cloud Grows
A cloud is a flower from many seeds13 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this is an interesting explanation of how rain drops are formed. But, I can't see how it relates to the contest or the topic requirements. There is no Christian science competition. No sponsor. nothing gone wrong.
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Hmm, this is an interesting explanation of how rain drops are formed. But, I can't see how it relates to the contest or the topic requirements. There is no Christian science competition. No sponsor. nothing gone wrong.
Editing and revisions are needed.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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I missed the one wrong and thought the contest was an entry for a child attending a Science Fair. 😔
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That's okay. Most voters don't care about contest rules anyway.
Comment from Bill Schott
This piece, Here is How a Cloud Grows, is well explained as a helpful understanding of the water cycle and the indications of both heating and cooling of the earth and gravity.
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This piece, Here is How a Cloud Grows, is well explained as a helpful understanding of the water cycle and the indications of both heating and cooling of the earth and gravity.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A cloudy sky tells you that rains on the way, while a cloudy pond or a cloudy glass of water isn't translucent -- you can't see through it. You can also describe an issue, though, or memory as cloudy when it's vague or half-remembered, or unclear. Meteorology is an interest among many people.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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A cloudy sky tells you that rains on the way, while a cloudy pond or a cloudy glass of water isn't translucent -- you can't see through it. You can also describe an issue, though, or memory as cloudy when it's vague or half-remembered, or unclear. Meteorology is an interest among many people.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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A drop of rain is as a refrain in poetry, refreshing.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is on a great topic of interest for
all future meteorologists. I enjoyed reading it. Your
picture is great to pair with your descriptions and
info. You gave some great hints about cloud formation
that should spark interest in learning more.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Your contest entry is on a great topic of interest for
all future meteorologists. I enjoyed reading it. Your
picture is great to pair with your descriptions and
info. You gave some great hints about cloud formation
that should spark interest in learning more.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Amen
Comment from Wendy G
I enjoyed your article very much and found it well written. It doesn't seem to be about a Christian Science Fair which has gone wrong however, so is not on the topic. However it is by far the best written piece! Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed your article very much and found it well written. It doesn't seem to be about a Christian Science Fair which has gone wrong however, so is not on the topic. However it is by far the best written piece! Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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You are the second person who mentioned not meeting guidelines. So I went and read it and I miss: does not go according to plan. Did the other few? Oh well. I'll expect to be dq'd before it is over.
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No yo won?t be disqualified. The fact that it is in for voting indicates that it got past the reviewing committee. I?m voting for it in the basis of writing quality and maintaining the interest.
Best wishes.
Wendy
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Thank you for understanding my misunderstanding. That is a conundrum, no doubt, a play on words from your true friend in the Land Up Over.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a very interesting description of how clouds form, and the explanation of the photograph is extremely informative. Where I have problems is seeing how this falls into the contest requirement of a childrens science fair.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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This is a very interesting description of how clouds form, and the explanation of the photograph is extremely informative. Where I have problems is seeing how this falls into the contest requirement of a childrens science fair.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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That's what you said yesterday. I remain puzzled. Perhaps, I don't know what science fairs did. A volcano cake a child could see. and if I was constructive making things I could likely fix a cellophane tent with water inside to show how heat evaporates droplets which must cling to debris, salt, dust and smoke, etc, to show them how mist would form. Can I help otherwise?
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a very interesting article, and I learned a lot about raindrops. I'm not sure it answers the idea of the contest, but the one other article I had already read last weed didn't either.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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This is a very interesting article, and I learned a lot about raindrops. I'm not sure it answers the idea of the contest, but the one other article I had already read last weed didn't either.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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The idea was science fair, no? Meteorology is science. What question have you re: this entry?
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I think I misunderstood the intent off the contest. Yours was still the best told and well written.
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Thank you. I began to doubt what I missed.
Comment from Olivanne Marsh
Good luck in the contest. I enjoyed reading your notes at the end almost as much as reading the article. I think you tell as much about rain as you do about clouds. Your topic is right on though, clouds are wondrous to many children. I spent many otherwise boring summer days lying on my back in the grass, watching the clouds above me form themselves into all kinds of fantastic animals, ships and scenes.
"Though the rain indeed falls mainly on the plain in Spain it falls as well on boats and trains, and planes, elsewhere, cleansing every and all things." An arresting first line with a nice rhythm, but somehow, awkward and off-putting. I had to read it a few times to understand what you were saying.
"...similar to the nacre that collects around a pearl to reduce pain?" Did you mean similar to the nacre that collects around the seed that becomes a pearl? If so is the nacre the irritant or the response to it that reduces pain? Does an oyster feel pain?
"...Lord will keep them from harm's way for too much rain can make water run deep
washing cars clean or flooding them away." you need punctuation here, break of some sort between for and too much.
"...others hope for it to stop..." Don't understand the need for the ellipsis in the last two lines.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Good luck in the contest. I enjoyed reading your notes at the end almost as much as reading the article. I think you tell as much about rain as you do about clouds. Your topic is right on though, clouds are wondrous to many children. I spent many otherwise boring summer days lying on my back in the grass, watching the clouds above me form themselves into all kinds of fantastic animals, ships and scenes.
"Though the rain indeed falls mainly on the plain in Spain it falls as well on boats and trains, and planes, elsewhere, cleansing every and all things." An arresting first line with a nice rhythm, but somehow, awkward and off-putting. I had to read it a few times to understand what you were saying.
"...similar to the nacre that collects around a pearl to reduce pain?" Did you mean similar to the nacre that collects around the seed that becomes a pearl? If so is the nacre the irritant or the response to it that reduces pain? Does an oyster feel pain?
"...Lord will keep them from harm's way for too much rain can make water run deep
washing cars clean or flooding them away." you need punctuation here, break of some sort between for and too much.
"...others hope for it to stop..." Don't understand the need for the ellipsis in the last two lines.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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I use ellipsis for pause while reading. Yes, oysters do feel pain as sand and debris is the cause of creating pearls. Clouds in turn need to have "hygroscopic nuclei" similar to sand to have water vapor grab hold. Tough rating but your opine is appreciated.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This work speaks all about the sciences, how a cloud grows, confirming how a cloud is a flower from many seeds; God's action about raining, we know and feel about the law of Nature; growing clouds has its own natural process in the making; well said, well done; post god speed more; positively encouraging editing, negatively not wording, forgiving errors of theist-good authors-writers. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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This work speaks all about the sciences, how a cloud grows, confirming how a cloud is a flower from many seeds; God's action about raining, we know and feel about the law of Nature; growing clouds has its own natural process in the making; well said, well done; post god speed more; positively encouraging editing, negatively not wording, forgiving errors of theist-good authors-writers. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Your understanding is congruent to what I hoped would come with the reading. Thanks for stopping by.
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
This is an interesting piece with lots of good scientific information. However, you say you hope to interest children in the study of weather science, yet the language you use is to complex and uses vocabulary well beyond the reading skills of most children. I do like the way you mix scientific data about rain, feelings about rain, and a hint at the havoc that too much rain can produce.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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This is an interesting piece with lots of good scientific information. However, you say you hope to interest children in the study of weather science, yet the language you use is to complex and uses vocabulary well beyond the reading skills of most children. I do like the way you mix scientific data about rain, feelings about rain, and a hint at the havoc that too much rain can produce.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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Oh well. Maybe their teacher can help. Thanks for stopping by.
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Oh well. Maybe their teacher can help. Thanks for stopping by.
