Quiet Lawyer
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28 total reviews
Comment from J. P. Olesen
Hi, Barbara,
I just finished reading your story. Last time I was here, you were presenting excerpts from the football novel.
This one looks equally well-written. Extraordinarily smooth dialogue and an interesting plot that even an unromantic slob like me finds compelling. When reading, I paused only long enough to confirm that Marfa was where they filmed the movie "Giant," among others.
Bravo!
Sincerely,
J. P.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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Hi, Barbara,
I just finished reading your story. Last time I was here, you were presenting excerpts from the football novel.
This one looks equally well-written. Extraordinarily smooth dialogue and an interesting plot that even an unromantic slob like me finds compelling. When reading, I paused only long enough to confirm that Marfa was where they filmed the movie "Giant," among others.
Bravo!
Sincerely,
J. P.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement. I hope you return again.
Comment from robyn corum
Barb,
Very nice! Crazy, I've never heard of the Marfa lights. It's not fair! I've always wanted to see the Northern Lights but they are much farther away - this could be doable! hahahaha This was an intimate, sweet scene and I liked it a lot!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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Barb,
Very nice! Crazy, I've never heard of the Marfa lights. It's not fair! I've always wanted to see the Northern Lights but they are much farther away - this could be doable! hahahaha This was an intimate, sweet scene and I liked it a lot!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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Yes, the Marfa lights are a real thing. They are about as reliable as the Northern Lights, which are on my bucket list. LOL Thank you for the kind review. I will PM you.
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is a great chapter. Cordero is an interesting character. I'm not sure if it's the cowboy in him, but he seems like an old soul. Alexandra seems to be a great match for him and has her own soulful way, but seems to be a bit insecure. I feel like Maggie is going to be a problem for Cordero. Great work!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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This is a great chapter. Cordero is an interesting character. I'm not sure if it's the cowboy in him, but he seems like an old soul. Alexandra seems to be a great match for him and has her own soulful way, but seems to be a bit insecure. I feel like Maggie is going to be a problem for Cordero. Great work!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2022
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Maggie, I think, it out of the picture. The problem is Pat. We will see him often. In two weeks, we'll see how bad he really is. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.wilkey,
After a long time, but this piece of Romance Fiction is nice to make me comfortable with the story which I'm going to enjoy fully soon.
The main characters - Cord and Ali - have grabbed my attention and it's sufficient now.
Lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology;
Captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end;
Ending of Previous Post proved a great help for me to reach the main stream of the story.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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Hello Barbara.wilkey,
After a long time, but this piece of Romance Fiction is nice to make me comfortable with the story which I'm going to enjoy fully soon.
The main characters - Cord and Ali - have grabbed my attention and it's sufficient now.
Lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology;
Captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end;
Ending of Previous Post proved a great help for me to reach the main stream of the story.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate it.
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Barbara.Wilkey, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from lancellot
Well written and much in keeping with your style of romantic writing. It was pleasant. The added drama was quickly and easily sorted out. Nothing will interfere with your two characters nice romance.
Good work. Your fans will like it.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Well written and much in keeping with your style of romantic writing. It was pleasant. The added drama was quickly and easily sorted out. Nothing will interfere with your two characters nice romance.
Good work. Your fans will like it.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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There is plenty of drama that will continue to interfere with their romance. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is very interesting. Surely Alexandra realizes why she can't trust Pat after the DNA test and the baby. The Marfa Lights interest me and were a special event for Alexandra. What was the clash sound when they appeared? Her old boyfriend doesn't sound as if he did anything to please Alexandra.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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This is very interesting. Surely Alexandra realizes why she can't trust Pat after the DNA test and the baby. The Marfa Lights interest me and were a special event for Alexandra. What was the clash sound when they appeared? Her old boyfriend doesn't sound as if he did anything to please Alexandra.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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He did not. We'll find out more about that later. Pat is really bad and we'll find out more about him in about two weeks. As for the crash, there's a crash before the lights show up. I need to figure out a way to show that. Thank you for the kind review.
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So, it isn't like Northern Lights?
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No. It's literally lights that show in a small Texas town of Marfa. For real!!
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's always nice when things work out like they should and lies don't ruin the chance for them to. In real life, the ending doesn't always work out so well. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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It's always nice when things work out like they should and lies don't ruin the chance for them to. In real life, the ending doesn't always work out so well. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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You're right it doesn't. Lies take on a life of their own. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Very nice. Well-written. Barb, I'm headed out of town, so don't have my usual time for a thorough review, but I wanted to award this work with a six before I left! Good job.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Very nice. Well-written. Barb, I'm headed out of town, so don't have my usual time for a thorough review, but I wanted to award this work with a six before I left! Good job.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the kindness. I appreciate it. Have a safe trip. I will pray for traveling mercies.
Comment from Jay Squires
I'm her cat, Howie's vet, [I suggest a comma after "Howie's". Otherwise the primary phrase oddly stands out, "I'm her cat ... [who is] Howie's vet, ..." ]
"Did either have to do with you?" [Shouldn't this sentence have "anything" after "have"? ]
I'm sure I'm not the only one reading the sentence, "As their lips moved closer, a clash was heard," and then wondered right up to the last word in the chapter ... What. Was. The. Clash?
A good chapter, though. Cord an Ali are gonna make it yet.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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I'm her cat, Howie's vet, [I suggest a comma after "Howie's". Otherwise the primary phrase oddly stands out, "I'm her cat ... [who is] Howie's vet, ..." ]
"Did either have to do with you?" [Shouldn't this sentence have "anything" after "have"? ]
I'm sure I'm not the only one reading the sentence, "As their lips moved closer, a clash was heard," and then wondered right up to the last word in the chapter ... What. Was. The. Clash?
A good chapter, though. Cord an Ali are gonna make it yet.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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The sound of the lights starting. Hmm, maybe I need to make that clearer. I will check out that area. I've made the other corrections. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Annette R.
Without any spelling, typos or grammatical errors it is hard to give any constructive suggestions. I haven't read any other chapters. I do appreciate the larger font and separation of paragraphs. It is an interesting and well written piece.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Without any spelling, typos or grammatical errors it is hard to give any constructive suggestions. I haven't read any other chapters. I do appreciate the larger font and separation of paragraphs. It is an interesting and well written piece.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
