The Writings of a Mouse
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Love and Light"Pieces of my Heart
34 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
I can really feel your emotion in this poem. I'm glad I read the notes. It was unclear who you were talking about. You might possibly want to insert a line that identifies your mother.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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I can really feel your emotion in this poem. I'm glad I read the notes. It was unclear who you were talking about. You might possibly want to insert a line that identifies your mother.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Thank so much for your your review and your feedback!
Comment from June Sargent
I know how you feel. My mom passed away in 2014. And I still feel the urge to just pick up the phone sometimes to share some thoughts- a new recipe I found. It's difficult to lose your best friend- but I promised her right before she passed that we will meet again. Hold onto that hope. And thank you for sharing your lovely sentiments.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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I know how you feel. My mom passed away in 2014. And I still feel the urge to just pick up the phone sometimes to share some thoughts- a new recipe I found. It's difficult to lose your best friend- but I promised her right before she passed that we will meet again. Hold onto that hope. And thank you for sharing your lovely sentiments.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your review and for sharing your own story. I?m sorry for your loss. My deepest condolences. You are correct. The longing to see them again I think will probably never go away.
Comment from Wendy G
This is a beautiful poem of love and loss, and the memories which linger are both cherished and painful. The emotion is raw, and deeply felt. A mother is irreplaceable, so I send you a hug and a prayer for peace and comfort. Well written, and good wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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This is a beautiful poem of love and loss, and the memories which linger are both cherished and painful. The emotion is raw, and deeply felt. A mother is irreplaceable, so I send you a hug and a prayer for peace and comfort. Well written, and good wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Thank you so very much for you review and you heartfelt thoughts Wendy.
Comment from Annmuma
I know nothing about poetry, except I either like it or I don't. I love this poem and I feel what you feel when I read it, what you felt when you wrote nothing. I know those feelings when the whole world feels black and just a few minutes of contact would make things so much better. If there is any silver lining to that feeling is the blessing that we had the opportunity to know, love and be loved by the person who has crossed to the other side. A great piece of writing. ann
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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I know nothing about poetry, except I either like it or I don't. I love this poem and I feel what you feel when I read it, what you felt when you wrote nothing. I know those feelings when the whole world feels black and just a few minutes of contact would make things so much better. If there is any silver lining to that feeling is the blessing that we had the opportunity to know, love and be loved by the person who has crossed to the other side. A great piece of writing. ann
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for such a lovely review Ann. I would say you know a lot about poetry. You?ve captured the meaning in my work beautifully.
Comment from juliaSjames
So sorry for your loss. May your dear mother rest in peace. Your poem of remembrance reveals a deep and loving connection between the two of you. As a mother she would not wish you to grieve but to cherish the times you shared. My own mother passed on to glory almost twelve years ago when she was 97. I often speak to her in my mind. On her birthday and on her death anniversary I light a candle in her memory and post her photograph on Facebook. Small rituals of greetings to her spirit. Love continues.
Good luck in the contest.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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So sorry for your loss. May your dear mother rest in peace. Your poem of remembrance reveals a deep and loving connection between the two of you. As a mother she would not wish you to grieve but to cherish the times you shared. My own mother passed on to glory almost twelve years ago when she was 97. I often speak to her in my mind. On her birthday and on her death anniversary I light a candle in her memory and post her photograph on Facebook. Small rituals of greetings to her spirit. Love continues.
Good luck in the contest.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Thank you so very much Julia and my deepest for your loss as well. The longing to see them again never faces. I too have my rituals. You be blessed as well.
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Have a peaceful night
Julia
Comment from karenina
Oh, dear God. My heart is breaking. Your poem might have been written to a lost lover...and then, imagine my reaction when I saw it was written for your best friend, your MOM! My own mom's been gone 35 years... struck down at 60, too young, too soon... There are still days I panic because I fear I've forgotten the sound of her laughter. I'm so sorry for your loss. There's no such thing as closure. We simply learn to live within the memories in our hearts! Beautiful free verse...
Karenina
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Oh, dear God. My heart is breaking. Your poem might have been written to a lost lover...and then, imagine my reaction when I saw it was written for your best friend, your MOM! My own mom's been gone 35 years... struck down at 60, too young, too soon... There are still days I panic because I fear I've forgotten the sound of her laughter. I'm so sorry for your loss. There's no such thing as closure. We simply learn to live within the memories in our hearts! Beautiful free verse...
Karenina
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Karenina, my dear Mother passed young as well. Not as young as yours but young. We missed so much. Think how much we will have to catch up on in the hereafter. Be blessed. Thanks for the great review!
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There will be a great reunion one day, in God's good time! Of that I am sure!
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are heartfelt, sad, descriptive, thought provoking and
creative. I thought about how painful it is when we lose someone close to us. Thank you for the author's notes - I am so sorry for your loss. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork compliments these words.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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The author's words are heartfelt, sad, descriptive, thought provoking and
creative. I thought about how painful it is when we lose someone close to us. Thank you for the author's notes - I am so sorry for your loss. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork compliments these words.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for your well thought out through review of my poem. It helps me a lot as a writer to know that my words touched you.
Comment from Aubree Lorraine
It's a beautiful poem, well written. "You left so quickly. I had no chance to say goodbye" -- that breaks my heart. I'm sorry for the loss of your mother, I can only imagine that pain. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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It's a beautiful poem, well written. "You left so quickly. I had no chance to say goodbye" -- that breaks my heart. I'm sorry for the loss of your mother, I can only imagine that pain. Best wishes.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Sanku
It is a beautiful and emotional poem about missing a person who is well loved .That your mum was your best friend says a lot about her .all the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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It is a beautiful and emotional poem about missing a person who is well loved .That your mum was your best friend says a lot about her .all the best for the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Sounds like you have lost someone very special. Was it because of death?
i know exactly ow you feel. I lost my love of 60 years, 7 years ago. My life
has directly changed witho
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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Sounds like you have lost someone very special. Was it because of death?
i know exactly ow you feel. I lost my love of 60 years, 7 years ago. My life
has directly changed witho
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Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Yes. I did. I lost my Mother. My best friend. I?m so sorry for your loss.
