Quiet Lawyer
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30 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Dinner and dancing on the agenda. I wonder if they do the line dancing where they are going. Line dancing is a very popular western dance down in the Southern states, too.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Dinner and dancing on the agenda. I wonder if they do the line dancing where they are going. Line dancing is a very popular western dance down in the Southern states, too.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Yes, they do line dancing. I am ready for it. LOL Thank you.
Comment from Mickamus J
Thank you for sharing your story. It has a nice build-up of characters and plot. I found myself drawn to the characters of Ali and Rosa. Though Ali seems nervous, there is a certain calmness and mystery about her.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Thank you for sharing your story. It has a nice build-up of characters and plot. I found myself drawn to the characters of Ali and Rosa. Though Ali seems nervous, there is a certain calmness and mystery about her.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Ali is very nervous. Much of her background will come out in pieces. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
All these food references make the reader hungry, especially the taco salad.
Seems Alexandra is smitten with Cordero, even buying new clothes not to stand out or make herself seem out of place in his world.
Several possibilities this storyline could travel.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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All these food references make the reader hungry, especially the taco salad.
Seems Alexandra is smitten with Cordero, even buying new clothes not to stand out or make herself seem out of place in his world.
Several possibilities this storyline could travel.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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This story is complete. I hope I hit one you expected. LOL
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Congratulations on being RECOGNIZED and for ALL TIME BEST! The storyline is captivating and held my attention throughout the piece and the characters interact nicely;-)
Thank you for sharing this well written piece with us and may God bless you and your family!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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Congratulations on being RECOGNIZED and for ALL TIME BEST! The storyline is captivating and held my attention throughout the piece and the characters interact nicely;-)
Thank you for sharing this well written piece with us and may God bless you and your family!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from Ethan Vandervelden
Really well done chapter. I am continuing to be engaged in your writing and am finding the story interesting.
I particularly liked that you included Pat in this part of the chapter as that gave the writer a bit of trepidation for things to come. I am looking forward to reading more!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Really well done chapter. I am continuing to be engaged in your writing and am finding the story interesting.
I particularly liked that you included Pat in this part of the chapter as that gave the writer a bit of trepidation for things to come. I am looking forward to reading more!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Pat is not a good guy and will bring and interesting point to the story. (I hope!) Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well written. The plot is moving right along.
Cord seems a bit, no a lot, naive. Maybe a bit overly so regarding the 'date' issue. Every man is well aware that when he asks a lady out, it is a 'date'. And to think about making a reservation, whether it has been done yet, or not, confirms/compounds the matter - a date.
Best wishes and good luck with the story.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Well written. The plot is moving right along.
Cord seems a bit, no a lot, naive. Maybe a bit overly so regarding the 'date' issue. Every man is well aware that when he asks a lady out, it is a 'date'. And to think about making a reservation, whether it has been done yet, or not, confirms/compounds the matter - a date.
Best wishes and good luck with the story.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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I don't think he's naive, I think he's in denial. He wants to believe it's a brother/sister thing.
Comment from jessizero
This was entertaining and engrossing. It kept my interest, which isn't always easy. Thank you for sharing this with the community. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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This was entertaining and engrossing. It kept my interest, which isn't always easy. Thank you for sharing this with the community. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
In the section, toward the end, that started with,"He chuckled. You had written Alexander instead Alexandra. You moved the story along nicely.
I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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In the section, toward the end, that started with,"He chuckled. You had written Alexander instead Alexandra. You moved the story along nicely.
I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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LOL I will fix that. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Begin Again
seen you two together.
It's a date. You can deny it all you want,
You look amazing." He pointed to a sack. "What's in there?"
Alexander held it out for him. "I bought you some bandanas.
The appearance of Pat is like a burr under the saddle...I have a feeling he will be trouble in some way.
Of course, I am loving the story. Keep up the great work.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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seen you two together.
It's a date. You can deny it all you want,
You look amazing." He pointed to a sack. "What's in there?"
Alexander held it out for him. "I bought you some bandanas.
The appearance of Pat is like a burr under the saddle...I have a feeling he will be trouble in some way.
Of course, I am loving the story. Keep up the great work.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 06-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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Yes, Pat will cause a lot of trouble. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from amahra
Century and Railroad Blues are great names for your story's restaurant. This seemed to have a lot more dialogue, but I think it's great because it just answers questions much more dramatically than a lot of narration.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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Century and Railroad Blues are great names for your story's restaurant. This seemed to have a lot more dialogue, but I think it's great because it just answers questions much more dramatically than a lot of narration.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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I normally use dialogue to move my story along. I'm not one who normally writes narrative. Thank you for the kind review.
