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Comment from dragonpoet
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It is so sad when childhood memories or bad adult relationships cause a person to hid such hurt and to mistrust and doubt love. It is good that he has decided to let it all be in the past and return to true life and try again.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
    Sorry for the copy/paste response

    ?m sorry it?s taken so long to get to these reviews. Some personal issues in my life.
    Please forgive me!

    Always
    Justafan of yours
    Missy
reply by dragonpoet on 12-Jun-2023
    Hi Melissa,
    Hopefully those issued have been resolved in a positive manner. No apology necessary,
    You're welcome.
    Joan
Comment from SimianSavant
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I'm bookmarking this for the song you shared. Somehow I've never heard it before, and it's a good one.

Visually you set this up very nicely. The hourglass image is awesome.

I hesitantly offer two suggestions:
-consider not capitalizing the beginnings of lines by default. This is a stylistic decision for sure, and I think it might add fluidity to some of your text. You could still capitalize proper nouns etc. It's a more modern look, but if the idea makes you cringe, pay it no heed.

-consider omitting the middle instance of "the hourglass has been turned", in order to bookend your piece, and let it breathe.

What I need is a three-day hourglass that tells me how much time I have before the workweek starts again!

Nice work. Best,

Harambe

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
    Hi "H". I have taken your advice on the middle, repeated verse and I thank you for taking the time to read and leave your advice. I grow with each review :),

    Always
    Justafan of yours
    Missy
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
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This is on fire!!! And the art is dope too.
As a whole, you have skills that keeps the
attention of your readers. And that makes for
a hot artist. So Keep Writing. And try not to forget
to stop by to talk. Either way, Stay Connected

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
    My goodness this review has left me speechless :) I am absolutely delighted.
    Thank you very much!

    Always
    Justafan
    Missy
reply by BLACKTITANIUM86 on 01-Mar-2022
    No problem. And if you would like to know more about what I do, you can catch me at? www . reverbnation . com/titanblack222
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Missy,
Fabulous!!!! I read your poem and could not wait to see what was coming next. Your writing gripped me until the very end then you matched it with the perfect song. Stunning job girl!!!!
Blessings,
Darlene

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
    ?m sorry it?s taken so long to get to these reviews. Some personal issues in my life.
    Please forgive me!

    Always
    Justafan of yours
    Missy
Comment from royowen
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What a beautiful and unusual,poem, with a strong message and so well well written, very few write a free verse as well as occasionally I write one, and really enjoy, if I can stop my metronome long enough, well done Missy, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
    ?m sorry it?s taken so long to get to these reviews. Some personal issues in my life.
    Please forgive me!

    Always
    Justafan of yours
    Missy
reply by royowen on 11-Jun-2023
    Bless you Missy
Comment from scongrove
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Aww... just loved this! It deserved a six. But still, all out. :(
This poem kinda feels like me. I know how it feels not to trust after being jaded so many times. You're always wondering if it's going to happen again.
I love the video you added. Clever!

Thanks for sharing. It is really heartfelt.
Sincerely,
Shana :)

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
    Two reviews in one day!! Awesome and a big thank you, Shana :)

    Always
    Justafan of yours
    Missy
Comment from Jesse James Doty
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This is an interesting piece and I am not sure what to make of it. His Monday's coming...what exactly is this supposed to mean? I 'get' that he has been burned a time or two but haven't we all? What is special about him that you wrote a poem for him? I love the presentation with its different color schemes throughout the poem form. And I have always loved the Mama's and the Papa's music and lyrics as well as their stage presence. I just don't understand the significance of the song Monday, Monday.
If you don't mind, I would like a clarification for this one, please.
Have a great weekend!
Jesse


 Comment Written 25-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
    This is a great friend of mine and it was written with him in mind. He calls his retirement from "JohnQ public" as his Monday. No worries with residual income.
    The song choice was simply because of the word "Monday. Nothing sinister just one man?s look at life after working all his life.

    Thank you for your review
    Always
    Justafan
reply by Jesse James Doty on 25-Feb-2022
    Oh...I see said the blind man.

    Have a nice day,
    Jesse
Comment from Ric Myworld
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"Monday's coming," good or bad. So we had all better get ready and start counting the days, living each one to the fullest, until the payback calendar reads Monday. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
    Thank you again...Two reviews in one day. You're catching up :)
    Hugs

    Always
    Justafan of yours
    Missy
Comment from Begin Again
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Good one, Missy

Plant that seed deep inside the mind and heart and let it blossom. Our world tends to give us a field of weeds, but if we continue to nurture the good thoughts we can clear the weeds and our lives.

Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
    You always make me smile reading your review and this is no exception. Thank you, my friend.

    Always
    Justafan of yours
    Missy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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We do dread certain dates in our calendar, an appointment or a meeting we fear and this anticipation of fear is often worse than the event itself, a poignant write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
    Hi there Ms. D. It's lovely to see your smiling face in my reviews. Thank you so very much :)

    Always
    Justafan of yours
    Missy