Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
Should "bottle feeding one" be bottle feed one?
Good thing she did not step on the rattler.
Seems Ali is getting a real taste of ranch life. With Cord she will need it.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Should "bottle feeding one" be bottle feed one?
Good thing she did not step on the rattler.
Seems Ali is getting a real taste of ranch life. With Cord she will need it.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you for going back and reading this post even though there was no money attached. I appreciate it.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Another snake for Alexandra to contend with; glad he was shot. There is something about snakes that gives a person the jitters. Besides they are full of poison. I will continue to read and catch up.....
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Another snake for Alexandra to contend with; glad he was shot. There is something about snakes that gives a person the jitters. Besides they are full of poison. I will continue to read and catch up.....
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Thank you for reading when no money was attached.
Comment from RGstar
An excellent social chapter. Very well written. Nicely balanced scenes, and seems still a relationship building between the main two characters for the time being. Cordero seems a changed man, and Ali, seems the same, so good contrasts there.
Yes, enjoyed this one, was able to immerse quickly.
My best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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An excellent social chapter. Very well written. Nicely balanced scenes, and seems still a relationship building between the main two characters for the time being. Cordero seems a changed man, and Ali, seems the same, so good contrasts there.
Yes, enjoyed this one, was able to immerse quickly.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ethan Vandervelden
Really well written chapter.
I'm enjoying the stories progression and found this chapter to provide a variety of interest!
One potential SPAG for your consideration:
{I know he lives in a house closer(to?) the main part of the ranch.}--Sorry it wouldn't copy in italics. I think there is a word missing in this sentence.
Couple things I really liked:
-I enjoyed the details about the twin foals, and the reality that you placed in, where one foal would normally be aborted, rather than painting a cutesy portrait about them.
-I appreciated Alexandra's response to Cord shooting the snake. Felt believable and has potential for you to touch on a little more if you so choose.
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Really well written chapter.
I'm enjoying the stories progression and found this chapter to provide a variety of interest!
One potential SPAG for your consideration:
{I know he lives in a house closer(to?) the main part of the ranch.}--Sorry it wouldn't copy in italics. I think there is a word missing in this sentence.
Couple things I really liked:
-I enjoyed the details about the twin foals, and the reality that you placed in, where one foal would normally be aborted, rather than painting a cutesy portrait about them.
-I appreciated Alexandra's response to Cord shooting the snake. Felt believable and has potential for you to touch on a little more if you so choose.
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I made the correction.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I had to get tickled about the having never been spanked. Although it's not considered proper these days, I got one or more every day. And to those who don't believe in spankings, I probably needed more than I ever got. Fear is the greatest deterrent ever. Time outs and such never would have worked for me. LOL. Thanks for sharing another enjoyable chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I had to get tickled about the having never been spanked. Although it's not considered proper these days, I got one or more every day. And to those who don't believe in spankings, I probably needed more than I ever got. Fear is the greatest deterrent ever. Time outs and such never would have worked for me. LOL. Thanks for sharing another enjoyable chapter.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I was spanked and spanked my boys. They got less than they should've. Time out never worked on them either. I have friend whose husband always told her that her problem was she never got spanked. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sanku
I enjoy reading about ranch life .The snake incident was terrifying ! and what a shot was that!.
Enjoy the birthday celebration and pass on my wishes to your mother!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I enjoy reading about ranch life .The snake incident was terrifying ! and what a shot was that!.
Enjoy the birthday celebration and pass on my wishes to your mother!
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from amahra
Ok, thanks for traumatizing me with an artwork of a rattlesnake. LOL! Just seeing a picture makes my skin crawl. Aside from that, I liked the chapter. I especially liked his chasing and teasing her with a spanking she never got from her parents. Just one thing below:
"They're around just rare" [I know this is dialogue, but it doesn't seem to make sense.]
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Ok, thanks for traumatizing me with an artwork of a rattlesnake. LOL! Just seeing a picture makes my skin crawl. Aside from that, I liked the chapter. I especially liked his chasing and teasing her with a spanking she never got from her parents. Just one thing below:
"They're around just rare" [I know this is dialogue, but it doesn't seem to make sense.]
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I'll check that sentence out.
Comment from Sankey
Another great chapter and I think there might be one more to get to, of this story. Seems I will have a pile of reading today but we have to go out.
A couple of areas to look at. the[y] guys will be hungry."
Something not clear in the following...I know he lives in a house closer the main part of the ranch.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Another great chapter and I think there might be one more to get to, of this story. Seems I will have a pile of reading today but we have to go out.
A couple of areas to look at. the[y] guys will be hungry."
Something not clear in the following...I know he lives in a house closer the main part of the ranch.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I'll check those areas out.
Comment from bhogg
Like all your posts, professional written and edited. All of your work is so comfortable to read. Just good writing with believable dialog that moves you quickly through. Bill
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Like all your posts, professional written and edited. All of your work is so comfortable to read. Just good writing with believable dialog that moves you quickly through. Bill
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Barb!
I enjoyed this chapter.
I especially enjoyed learning about rattlers! Don't see many in Michigan!
The pace of your story and dialogue were well-executed.
One small edit:
"Now you understand how deep the rivalery (rivalry) goes."
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Hello Barb!
I enjoyed this chapter.
I especially enjoyed learning about rattlers! Don't see many in Michigan!
The pace of your story and dialogue were well-executed.
One small edit:
"Now you understand how deep the rivalery (rivalry) goes."
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. That's the second time I've fixed that word. Thank you for pointing it out.
