The Insecurity Tax
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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Do you mean conscious or conscience? I admit to being slightly perplexed as to the intention of this poem. I do like these words:
That little imp inside our head
which has us toss and turn in bed
Excellent rythme and rhyme, and the image is spot-on. I think with a little revision this could be a great poem.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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Do you mean conscious or conscience? I admit to being slightly perplexed as to the intention of this poem. I do like these words:
That little imp inside our head
which has us toss and turn in bed
Excellent rythme and rhyme, and the image is spot-on. I think with a little revision this could be a great poem.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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Conscious. It is the name of the imp which questions my conscience.
WIthout this radical soldier of misfortune what would I be guilty of?
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Let me suggest two good reasons for confession: Confession helps us to receive grace. Grace is not for everyone, only the needy. If you don't see yourself as needy, you'll never receive grace. This is the essence of 1 John 1:9. To receive God's grace, we must first acknowledge our need for grace.
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Let me suggest two good reasons for confession: Confession helps us to receive grace. Grace is not for everyone, only the needy. If you don't see yourself as needy, you'll never receive grace. This is the essence of 1 John 1:9. To receive God's grace, we must first acknowledge our need for grace.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
Comment from Aiona
Interesting entry in response to the Forgiveness Poem prompt. I use that word a lot, huh. "interesting" I read the whole thing through, and that says a lot, considering free-verse poetry isn't really my jam. I think it's a poem that's very relatable, except to those who never feel guilty about anything.
I saw one possible typo:
"Conscious."
I think you might have meant "Conscience."
Conscience is the little imp on our shoulder.
Conscious is the opposite of comatose, right?
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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Interesting entry in response to the Forgiveness Poem prompt. I use that word a lot, huh. "interesting" I read the whole thing through, and that says a lot, considering free-verse poetry isn't really my jam. I think it's a poem that's very relatable, except to those who never feel guilty about anything.
I saw one possible typo:
"Conscious."
I think you might have meant "Conscience."
Conscience is the little imp on our shoulder.
Conscious is the opposite of comatose, right?
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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Oppossite? IDK; but defined; known to oneself; felt. I was giving the Imp a name not a feeling.
Comment from Hawk37
I enjoyed the read, may come a day where the governments will act like churches off donation only. Still, I don't feel bad about squeezing away every cent I can get away from the government that I can. One of the responsibilities of being an adult is money retention.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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I enjoyed the read, may come a day where the governments will act like churches off donation only. Still, I don't feel bad about squeezing away every cent I can get away from the government that I can. One of the responsibilities of being an adult is money retention.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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Save this has nothing to do with money but GUILT. If we know we do wrong, can I lie when facing the judge above?
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No, being honest is the best policy. when you lie you deceive yourself and the truth is not in you.
Comment from lindafisher
This is a really well written contest entry. I'm one of those people whose conscience rules their life. I won't do it because it will haunt me. On the other hand I am haunted by what I should have done.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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This is a really well written contest entry. I'm one of those people whose conscience rules their life. I won't do it because it will haunt me. On the other hand I am haunted by what I should have done.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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Aah. Should have done. Adding that to the recipe, after being prosecuted or reviewed of what I had done that would likely be even worse. Argh.
Comment from Heather Burroughs
This is a great free verse poem. There were a few places that held me up... if* they had done it differently. And "some things don't* have men feel small" maybe? I'm not sure.
Other than that it reads well. Best of luck with your entry in the upcoming contest. Many blessings to you
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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This is a great free verse poem. There were a few places that held me up... if* they had done it differently. And "some things don't* have men feel small" maybe? I'm not sure.
Other than that it reads well. Best of luck with your entry in the upcoming contest. Many blessings to you
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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You're a saint. Said in a nice way. dun was a break from using it thrice previously so early. Poetic licensing on my part.
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That makes perfect sense. Thank you for taking the time to reply. Have a wonderful day
Comment from T B Botts
Thanks for sharing this thoughtful poem. I never worry about my taxes. I keep each month in a separate manilla envelope, and at the end of the year I go through and check all the deductable expenses and charitable contributions, write them all down and send it to my tax preparer. She's been with me for twenty years or more, and never an audit. You spoke words of wisdom when you mentioned below that if you don't want to fret over something, don't do it. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thanks for sharing this thoughtful poem. I never worry about my taxes. I keep each month in a separate manilla envelope, and at the end of the year I go through and check all the deductable expenses and charitable contributions, write them all down and send it to my tax preparer. She's been with me for twenty years or more, and never an audit. You spoke words of wisdom when you mentioned below that if you don't want to fret over something, don't do it. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thanks for your time TB
Comment from Susan Newell
I like this poem, including the title. It reads well, with the right speeds and pauses, and the message is right on point. I believe I picked up a couple of typos or spelling issues.
Some things dun have men feel small. -- dun or done? Typo?
Conscious -- conscience?
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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I like this poem, including the title. It reads well, with the right speeds and pauses, and the message is right on point. I believe I picked up a couple of typos or spelling issues.
Some things dun have men feel small. -- dun or done? Typo?
Conscious -- conscience?
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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I luv u S.N. Thanks for the thoughts. That said, I thought one more done would do the piece in and DUN, meaning "to make repeated and insistent demands" also fits. As for Conscious, it is the name I gave the Imp, even though to the human Conscious would have weighed on thier conscience. Can you see how both fit?
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I see what you are trying to do. I stumbled because the past tense of dun is dunned and conscious is more often used as adjective than a known. All ser.
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Got it. Dunned would have work, too.
