Purgatory Ridge
Hosea doesn't know how to live after dying12 total reviews
Comment from amahra
Wow, this is great. I want to know who pulled him out while he was trying to save his wife and kids. I would like to follow this film script. Good job. You made it really interesting.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Wow, this is great. I want to know who pulled him out while he was trying to save his wife and kids. I would like to follow this film script. Good job. You made it really interesting.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thanks, I've been inactive on site for a while. Just read this. Appreciate u.
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I understand. I haven't long returned, myself.
Comment from royowen
Wow. What an episode, I don't think there could be anything worse that losing one's family in a house fire, without being able to save them, in a sense, one can't blame a father for wanting to shoot his son in law. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Wow. What an episode, I don't think there could be anything worse that losing one's family in a house fire, without being able to save them, in a sense, one can't blame a father for wanting to shoot his son in law. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thanks Roy! Been taking a break for a while. Appreciate you. Got some catching up to do. This review is real encouraging. Been debating whether I can write a complete script.
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Well done
Comment from robyn corum
Stan,
Well, this is sad. It's horrible that the rest of the family died. That's tragic enough. The fact that his extended family and certainly his father-in-law seem to put the blame at Hosea's feet will only make things worse. I'm assuming this is the very famous Chicago Fire? If so, that fire was started by the neglect of a woman, if I remember correctly. Hope the truth will finally come out so that Hosea will get some peace.
Nice stuff, my friend. Thanks!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Stan,
Well, this is sad. It's horrible that the rest of the family died. That's tragic enough. The fact that his extended family and certainly his father-in-law seem to put the blame at Hosea's feet will only make things worse. I'm assuming this is the very famous Chicago Fire? If so, that fire was started by the neglect of a woman, if I remember correctly. Hope the truth will finally come out so that Hosea will get some peace.
Nice stuff, my friend. Thanks!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thanks, Robyn. Been taking a break for a while. Appreciate you.
Comment from lyenochka
This is a dramatic scene and fit for a drama but it seems to be a hybrid between prose and script. This appears to be two scenes from the start of a script. You might want to check out Jay Squires or Judiverse for their scriptwriting technique.
Your prose is great as in "Flames light up the house enough for him to see his wife down the hall and hear her screams to find their daughters. "
But for a script, you only need to give the barest of directions to the actors. And the above should have given a part for the wife.
Wife:
[screams] Find our daughters!
Also, the spelling is Father-in-law with two hyphens.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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This is a dramatic scene and fit for a drama but it seems to be a hybrid between prose and script. This appears to be two scenes from the start of a script. You might want to check out Jay Squires or Judiverse for their scriptwriting technique.
Your prose is great as in "Flames light up the house enough for him to see his wife down the hall and hear her screams to find their daughters. "
But for a script, you only need to give the barest of directions to the actors. And the above should have given a part for the wife.
Wife:
[screams] Find our daughters!
Also, the spelling is Father-in-law with two hyphens.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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This helps. Thanks!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good job. Nice story.
I found that if the writing is saved in 'plain text', and then copied into FanStory using 'advanced editor', then the special characters will transfer. (mostly) But at least in advanced editor you can go in and edit with bold, italics, fonts, and etc.
Best of luck and best wishes.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Good job. Nice story.
I found that if the writing is saved in 'plain text', and then copied into FanStory using 'advanced editor', then the special characters will transfer. (mostly) But at least in advanced editor you can go in and edit with bold, italics, fonts, and etc.
Best of luck and best wishes.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Yes, thanks. I so should have done that.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I usually don't read scripts but this one caught my attention. How tragic your story is. I didn't see any mistakes. You did a great job. Have a wonderful day. Shirley
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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I usually don't read scripts but this one caught my attention. How tragic your story is. I didn't see any mistakes. You did a great job. Have a wonderful day. Shirley
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks!
Comment from Eunice Amero
This is a sad story. The drunken man should get the blame he might had been able to save his family. Drinking wont profit a person nothing. You did a good job. Thanks for sharing. Good luck
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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This is a sad story. The drunken man should get the blame he might had been able to save his family. Drinking wont profit a person nothing. You did a good job. Thanks for sharing. Good luck
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks. It leads into a redemption story saving others.
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Yes you are very welcome.
Comment from Ben Colder
There are five ways to write the script. Not sure if I can remember them, but this looks as it may be for a video. I did some of this year ago. I also dug one out of my stuff and now trying to change it to a story. Not sure how it will turn out. You have written an interesting typical write.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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There are five ways to write the script. Not sure if I can remember them, but this looks as it may be for a video. I did some of this year ago. I also dug one out of my stuff and now trying to change it to a story. Not sure how it will turn out. You have written an interesting typical write.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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How are you bend? I hope to take a trip to Arkansas this May or June, if I can afford the gas!
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$4,00 here and climbing. Is everyone happy with Biden> I can remember when it was 11cents? Come on down and maybe we can get together for lunch. Just let me know.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Very good script with the right amount of fury in father-in-law and despair in Hosea. The father-in-law makes the only answer he can, as the cane and shakiness suggests he may not be around long enough to see his son-in-law punished for not guarding his treasures. You can correct the formatting by going to My post and clicking edit but be sure you go to end of edit to click that you are finished.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Very good script with the right amount of fury in father-in-law and despair in Hosea. The father-in-law makes the only answer he can, as the cane and shakiness suggests he may not be around long enough to see his son-in-law punished for not guarding his treasures. You can correct the formatting by going to My post and clicking edit but be sure you go to end of edit to click that you are finished.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks. So true. I should have to use advanced editor, esp. scripts.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello 12,
This was an interesting script. I'd like to see where it goes next. The only suggestion I'd have would be to possibly make the font a little bit bigger so it would be easier to read. A lot of us on here are on the more elderly side. Well done.
Blessings
Tom
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Hello 12,
This was an interesting script. I'd like to see where it goes next. The only suggestion I'd have would be to possibly make the font a little bit bigger so it would be easier to read. A lot of us on here are on the more elderly side. Well done.
Blessings
Tom
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks!
