It Just Won't Work, Fin
What would you do differently?17 total reviews
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
Wow!!! That was a amazing write. For, you have the
skills to hold the attention of the reader. And I can tell
that if this was a book, it would be dope. Keep Writing.
And don't forget to stop by to talk to me. Stay Connected
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Wow!!! That was a amazing write. For, you have the
skills to hold the attention of the reader. And I can tell
that if this was a book, it would be dope. Keep Writing.
And don't forget to stop by to talk to me. Stay Connected
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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I will continue to read you posting. You are uniquely different.
Comment from LisaMay
Oh dear - you spurned the fish and killed it! It took rejection very hard.
I enjoyed your humorous tone and found it entertaining, especially: "...on a road trip with no map or wife telling it where to go."
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Oh dear - you spurned the fish and killed it! It took rejection very hard.
I enjoyed your humorous tone and found it entertaining, especially: "...on a road trip with no map or wife telling it where to go."
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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it Is funny. I go in that direction occasionally. See Women: The Pentultimate Trap in my portfolio. At least I found it funny.
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It's a blind contest so i don't know who you are to look at your portfolio.
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That's true
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Something Fishy's Going On writing prompt contest. I appreciate the humor. LoL. One must try to let the fish down easy its tiny little heart. LoL
You followed the rules of the contest well.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
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Excellent entry for the Something Fishy's Going On writing prompt contest. I appreciate the humor. LoL. One must try to let the fish down easy its tiny little heart. LoL
You followed the rules of the contest well.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
Comment from victor 66
I think your entry into the "somethings fishy going on" writing contest, was most amusing. And reading your authors note, I think you should definitely keep writing. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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I think your entry into the "somethings fishy going on" writing contest, was most amusing. And reading your authors note, I think you should definitely keep writing. Best wishes.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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A poem a day is far better than an apple. Been doing so since 2017 though I began writing in '65
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Concerning writing, I have much the same philosophy and the same timing.
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, It Just Won't Work, Fin, takes this unbelievable romantic occurrence to the similarly implausible plot twist of religious differences. Funny.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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This story, It Just Won't Work, Fin, takes this unbelievable romantic occurrence to the similarly implausible plot twist of religious differences. Funny.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Thanks.
Comment from Thatguypk
What an excellent piece of nonsense. Whoever devised a writing prompt concerning a fish who loves his owner really needs psychiatric help, in my opinion, but then again, without his mad prompt, we wouldn't have funny stories like this! :-) Very well written.
PK
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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What an excellent piece of nonsense. Whoever devised a writing prompt concerning a fish who loves his owner really needs psychiatric help, in my opinion, but then again, without his mad prompt, we wouldn't have funny stories like this! :-) Very well written.
PK
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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thanks
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Oh, my. I hope this worked. Poor thing. Him. (Or her.) Not you.
Obviously, you absolutely crushed his spirit. Right down to the ground - the very crackly, sparkly stones in the bottom of the bowl. You based your love simply on the basis of your religious differences instead of explaining why the romance would never work -- of course, he died. How evil can one human be? OOOHHHH the agony!!!
hehehe
This was a lot of fun. For someone who doesn't write much prose, you did super well. Thanks for the fun and good luck!
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Oh, my. I hope this worked. Poor thing. Him. (Or her.) Not you.
Obviously, you absolutely crushed his spirit. Right down to the ground - the very crackly, sparkly stones in the bottom of the bowl. You based your love simply on the basis of your religious differences instead of explaining why the romance would never work -- of course, he died. How evil can one human be? OOOHHHH the agony!!!
hehehe
This was a lot of fun. For someone who doesn't write much prose, you did super well. Thanks for the fun and good luck!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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thanks
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Mystery writer a terrific Thursday to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your Something Fishy's going on entry, you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Hello Mystery writer a terrific Thursday to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your Something Fishy's going on entry, you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Ethan Vandervelden
Really good! I enjoyed the read and found the ending hilarious! The story feels oddly believable (as believable as it can be) and it has natural flow and follows the prompt nicely.
There is one issue you may consider addressing:
{I know not for sure when it began but out of the blue, my Cherry Barb fish, named " Fin," started doing backflips whenever I walked by, beginning in spring of sixty-five.}--This is a run on sentence, and it states that [unsure when it began], and then says [beginning in the spring of sixty-five].
I really enjoyed the read! Good luck in the contest!!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Really good! I enjoyed the read and found the ending hilarious! The story feels oddly believable (as believable as it can be) and it has natural flow and follows the prompt nicely.
There is one issue you may consider addressing:
{I know not for sure when it began but out of the blue, my Cherry Barb fish, named " Fin," started doing backflips whenever I walked by, beginning in spring of sixty-five.}--This is a run on sentence, and it states that [unsure when it began], and then says [beginning in the spring of sixty-five].
I really enjoyed the read! Good luck in the contest!!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Good Point.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Whet your whistle indeed! Good work.
And nice play on words - whetting your whistle, which usually involves being wet (somewhat) in order to properly function. I realize that the whistle thing is a cliche, but still, it works for you.
So, did the fish die?
Good luck. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Whet your whistle indeed! Good work.
And nice play on words - whetting your whistle, which usually involves being wet (somewhat) in order to properly function. I realize that the whistle thing is a cliche, but still, it works for you.
So, did the fish die?
Good luck. Best wishes.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Appreciate your kind words
