Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Jim Wile
Barbara, as I've been reading this story from the beginning, I notice that you do not write a lot of description of the scene but mainly narrative and a lot of dialog. I also write without a lot of description (largely because I'm not particularly good at it, plus I don't feel it always adds much to the story), and I prefer stories written this way as long as there is some when needed.
Many authors I've noticed spend an awful lot of time on scene description, much to the detriment of the novel. It is often unnecessary, and I skim through it. Dean Koontz is a good example of someone whose books could be a lot shorter if he would cut out about 2/3 of his description.
Is it a conscious decision of yours to write without too much description?
Personally, I prefer books in the 60,000 - 90,000 word range. Much more than that, and a book probably has too much description.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Barbara, as I've been reading this story from the beginning, I notice that you do not write a lot of description of the scene but mainly narrative and a lot of dialog. I also write without a lot of description (largely because I'm not particularly good at it, plus I don't feel it always adds much to the story), and I prefer stories written this way as long as there is some when needed.
Many authors I've noticed spend an awful lot of time on scene description, much to the detriment of the novel. It is often unnecessary, and I skim through it. Dean Koontz is a good example of someone whose books could be a lot shorter if he would cut out about 2/3 of his description.
Is it a conscious decision of yours to write without too much description?
Personally, I prefer books in the 60,000 - 90,000 word range. Much more than that, and a book probably has too much description.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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My novels come in around 80,000 to 90,000 words. I don't like reading a lot of descriptions, only when necessary. If I'm reviewing a very descriptive post, I will actually skip reading that part of the of the post. I find them boring and don't move the story along. A few years ago, there was a lady here who wrote romance novels. Once she spent an entire post describing the dress and never got to the purpose for this fancy dress. Why was this person wearing it. I hope I answered your question.
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Absolutely you did. I feel the same way about description.
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It's only used if it moves the story along, and most don't.
Comment from Sankey
This was a good read I am glad I found. I am not getting notifications from this book. I would miss you." She smiled. "I have (a)feeling my son would miss you, a lot."
That American thing of extra "o's"... I can hold everything as long as I need to[o]."
8 inches of (snow?)so
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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This was a good read I am glad I found. I am not getting notifications from this book. I would miss you." She smiled. "I have (a)feeling my son would miss you, a lot."
That American thing of extra "o's"... I can hold everything as long as I need to[o]."
8 inches of (snow?)so
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and I've made the changes.
Comment from amahra
I'm starting to warm up to this new one. It's another fine chapter where a woman needs help in believing in love again.You're good at taking your time to develop your characters while romance hangs in the background. Enjoyable your trip and stay safe.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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I'm starting to warm up to this new one. It's another fine chapter where a woman needs help in believing in love again.You're good at taking your time to develop your characters while romance hangs in the background. Enjoyable your trip and stay safe.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Cattle rustlers...it does sound like a cowboy state that you are writing about. Like your story. it takes a while to get into the feeling of the chapters, but I get the sense that Alexandria will stay put at the ranch.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Cattle rustlers...it does sound like a cowboy state that you are writing about. Like your story. it takes a while to get into the feeling of the chapters, but I get the sense that Alexandria will stay put at the ranch.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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We'll have to wait and see. It will be a bumpy ride. I can promise that. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
Damn!!! You are gifted beyond your young years!!! For,
you are so deep and skilled at your writing styles, that
you can simultaneously write 2,3,and 4 books at once!
That's dope! Nevertheless, I will be looking forward to
having you sign my autograph, when your published by
the likes of Random House. Keep Writing. And Stay Connected
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Damn!!! You are gifted beyond your young years!!! For,
you are so deep and skilled at your writing styles, that
you can simultaneously write 2,3,and 4 books at once!
That's dope! Nevertheless, I will be looking forward to
having you sign my autograph, when your published by
the likes of Random House. Keep Writing. And Stay Connected
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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LOL I am far from young, but I like the compliment. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gee
Mrs. Barb you fooled me. I was expecting a Perry Mason style story based on the title....lol
I can definetly tell you love in Texas. Most of us don't have horses in the stables. One minor thing I noticed there was a lot of head tilting and cocking...just an observation.
Other than that, I enjoyed the story.
Thanks for sharing with us and have have on your trip visiting your mother.
Gee
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Mrs. Barb you fooled me. I was expecting a Perry Mason style story based on the title....lol
I can definetly tell you love in Texas. Most of us don't have horses in the stables. One minor thing I noticed there was a lot of head tilting and cocking...just an observation.
Other than that, I enjoyed the story.
Thanks for sharing with us and have have on your trip visiting your mother.
Gee
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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I will check that area out. I thought I had gotten out of that phase. I guess I slipped back into it. Thank you.
Comment from Begin Again
Awesome chapter... I love the blending of animal love and people love as well. It's just a comfortable setting even though there are bad things lurking nearby. I am definitely enjoying the story.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Awesome chapter... I love the blending of animal love and people love as well. It's just a comfortable setting even though there are bad things lurking nearby. I am definitely enjoying the story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Nice progression of the story, a slow stop and start between the attraction between the two protagonists, a nice sub-theme with Jewel, and an adrenaline kicker with the rustlers.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Nice progression of the story, a slow stop and start between the attraction between the two protagonists, a nice sub-theme with Jewel, and an adrenaline kicker with the rustlers.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for sharing another fine chapter, which I enjoyed as much as I enjoy them all. Have a nice vacation visiting your mother and getting back to nature in the snow. Of course, you all had snow and ice this week too. I'll probably have withdrawals too, from both your stories, if you don't get to post. Have a safe and enjoyable trip!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Thanks for sharing another fine chapter, which I enjoyed as much as I enjoy them all. Have a nice vacation visiting your mother and getting back to nature in the snow. Of course, you all had snow and ice this week too. I'll probably have withdrawals too, from both your stories, if you don't get to post. Have a safe and enjoyable trip!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Ahh, that's sweet. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RGstar
A couple of commas here and there, Barbara, and sometimes early n the text, I had to read a two or three times to ascertain who was speaking and when. Not a criticism, perhaps just me. It could be that placing the different dialogues from each person on different lines my help, when not mentioning the name of the person speaking...sometimes....I stress sometimes. I also missed the perihery...so important to the mind's eye, as when watching a film, the surroundings are picked up naturally, so it is nice to think about it within a text, showing what the unconscious mind would normally see.
The surroundings...the room, colours, mannerisms...maybe quirks, traits or behavior that categorize a character or two.
Having said that, I am warming to this, and believe it will be a good book. Just a few little things I noticed.
My best.
Have a pleasant week.
RGstar
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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A couple of commas here and there, Barbara, and sometimes early n the text, I had to read a two or three times to ascertain who was speaking and when. Not a criticism, perhaps just me. It could be that placing the different dialogues from each person on different lines my help, when not mentioning the name of the person speaking...sometimes....I stress sometimes. I also missed the perihery...so important to the mind's eye, as when watching a film, the surroundings are picked up naturally, so it is nice to think about it within a text, showing what the unconscious mind would normally see.
The surroundings...the room, colours, mannerisms...maybe quirks, traits or behavior that categorize a character or two.
Having said that, I am warming to this, and believe it will be a good book. Just a few little things I noticed.
My best.
Have a pleasant week.
RGstar
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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To be honest, I don't put in a lot of room colors etc. because I don't like reading them. To me they take away from the story line. When I am reading somebody's post and they a lot of it in it, I honestly skip reading that part and go on to the next part. I know there are a lot of people out there, but there are a lot of people like me too. Thank you for the kind review.
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Yes, I understood that when reading, but if you consider sight without anything to see for the mind, might understand where I'm coming from, for sometimes ard for the reader to have any sense of place or where the characters are, or even see natural characteristics that people have, which helps the unconcious mind place the character in their minds, or, like you say...only concentrating on dialogue, and not the person that utters it. But...I understand. To each his own, and the story works well. Just I had a feeling somethings were missing. And yes, you are right...some concentrate only on dialogue. Best wishes.
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I will consider what you're saying and check with some other reviewers and get their feedback. I am NOT dismissing your thoughts.
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Sorry about the spellings and letter missing...my keyboard has a problem with spacing and some letters, unless hitting it hard. Have a pleasant weekend Barbara.
