Presidential Melee
The last man standing takes a hike.8 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
What fantastical mayhem! You've been very innovative in killing each off in a manner relevant to some aspect of their lives. I am very surprised though tghat Trump went so quietly... I was waiting for him to rise from the dead.
Corrections:
stepped onto a rock, shouting a whispered cry (how can you shout and whisper at the same time?)
Siezing an opportunity (seizing)
James Buchanon (Buchanan)
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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What fantastical mayhem! You've been very innovative in killing each off in a manner relevant to some aspect of their lives. I am very surprised though tghat Trump went so quietly... I was waiting for him to rise from the dead.
Corrections:
stepped onto a rock, shouting a whispered cry (how can you shout and whisper at the same time?)
Siezing an opportunity (seizing)
James Buchanon (Buchanan)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Trump - I tried not not stir the crazy pot.
shouted whisper - wide-eyed, body tensed, whole body shaking/screaming, but voice is muted/muffled.
Thank you for the great review.
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Haha... very considerate of you to spare us the crazy pot.
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smiley face here
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thumbs up in return.
Comment from lyenochka
Well, that was a lot of violence but quite humorously done. I liked that you included a few tidbits of deeds or slogans that each president was known for. You did a great job with this and hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Well, that was a lot of violence but quite humorously done. I liked that you included a few tidbits of deeds or slogans that each president was known for. You did a great job with this and hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thank you! It was fun. (Even though I didn't necessarily like having to murder some fine men - others might have deserved worse - just kiddin' - sorta)
Comment from GregoryCody
Wow a great piece. This should definitely be a six over all.
The story is interesting and keeps the reader into it. I like your close. Pitch nose.
The flow was good too. Very smooth.
Nice work!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Wow a great piece. This should definitely be a six over all.
The story is interesting and keeps the reader into it. I like your close. Pitch nose.
The flow was good too. Very smooth.
Nice work!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thank you. I refrained from better tying mode of death to presidential experience - too boring.
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I agree!
Comment from Ricky1024
I really enjoyed this history lesson with running sentences.
This a step.
Yes, step back in time.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this and keep writing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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I really enjoyed this history lesson with running sentences.
This a step.
Yes, step back in time.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with Grammar Issues.
...
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this and keep writing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Thank you. I left out a lot of allegorical fun stuff thinking it might bore too many readers.
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is clever. Although quite violent, lol. It gave me satisfaction in some parts and laughter in others. I grieved in parts, but I got over it as soon as I took them into account and applied my minuet knowledge in history as too who had killed whom. I loved it!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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This is clever. Although quite violent, lol. It gave me satisfaction in some parts and laughter in others. I grieved in parts, but I got over it as soon as I took them into account and applied my minuet knowledge in history as too who had killed whom. I loved it!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you. I wish I'd taken the words (and thought) to be more fair in the whom to whom part. And I didn't want to bore readers with comments on all 45. Some of them were more mean-hearted than others. I was wishing than I was allowed to let some escape.
Tanks again.
Comment from royowen
I guess it's good thst the majority of these former presidents are dead, so they couldn't be here. But then again, you've majorly resurrected them to try again, with none left except maybe Donald Trump to carry on, there you go, we're stuck with Donald, nicely done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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I guess it's good thst the majority of these former presidents are dead, so they couldn't be here. But then again, you've majorly resurrected them to try again, with none left except maybe Donald Trump to carry on, there you go, we're stuck with Donald, nicely done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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He was pummeled and then in case he was only injured, Cleveland snuffed the life out of him in the last paragraph.
thanks for the review.
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Thank you.
Comment from damommy
My goodness, that took a lot of thought and research. Amazingly good. You tied them all together with their petty gripes, and then threw in some administerial mistakes. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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My goodness, that took a lot of thought and research. Amazingly good. You tied them all together with their petty gripes, and then threw in some administerial mistakes. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you.
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Comment from lancellot
Well that escalated quickly. Very interesting way to make an unofficial battle among the presidents and i like the brief set-up and chosen location for the fight to be held. Good work on inserting personal rivalries into it.
Good luck in the less violent contest.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Well that escalated quickly. Very interesting way to make an unofficial battle among the presidents and i like the brief set-up and chosen location for the fight to be held. Good work on inserting personal rivalries into it.
Good luck in the less violent contest.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you!
