Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Alexandra must really have the curves. And Luke seems like a guy you might want to stay away from, perhaps he likes trouble. I will continue to read the next chapter, catching up on the reading.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Alexandra must really have the curves. And Luke seems like a guy you might want to stay away from, perhaps he likes trouble. I will continue to read the next chapter, catching up on the reading.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Luke you discover later on is a horrible man. Thank you for the kind review.
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He sounds bad already.
Comment from Sanku
This was an interesting post and it throws light on the life of Texan ranchers. I was appalled when Luke pulled out the gun. Trigger happy lot and it is scary! I can understand why Ali wanted to go back.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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This was an interesting post and it throws light on the life of Texan ranchers. I was appalled when Luke pulled out the gun. Trigger happy lot and it is scary! I can understand why Ali wanted to go back.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. Sorry you had to read it with no money attached.
Comment from amahra
Wow, ten thousand dollars for a horse. This was my first horse auction, thanks. Lol! I like this chapter...some funny moments and intense ones. Loved it when the guys were about to go at it. You did great with that action. I could be wrong, but I think it's [bloodline] and not [bloodlines] for the horse.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Wow, ten thousand dollars for a horse. This was my first horse auction, thanks. Lol! I like this chapter...some funny moments and intense ones. Loved it when the guys were about to go at it. You did great with that action. I could be wrong, but I think it's [bloodline] and not [bloodlines] for the horse.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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I think you're right. I've fixed it. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Begin Again
I've been far behind on my reading but I am happy I didn't miss this one. I am enjoying the exchange between the characters and also the western atmosphere. Wonderful as always, Barbara.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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I've been far behind on my reading but I am happy I didn't miss this one. I am enjoying the exchange between the characters and also the western atmosphere. Wonderful as always, Barbara.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thank you. You remain in my prayers
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Thanks so much... I can't get any answers from anyone and I am turning into a nervous wreck.
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Have you had a mmr or any tests?
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They refused to do the scheduled mm till I saw a dr again - Why? And I have had ct, pulmonary, labs and another test on my lungs and can't find out the results except what I found in my personal chart on line which is a limited info. I have called numerous times and she is either out, busy or the results are back yet... It's been over two weeks or more. Now I am scheduled for a bunch of drs in April and May... Hopefully!!
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April and May may be too late. It only takes a couple of days to get lab results. You may have to go through patient relations to get help. If it's cancer, not always, but often your white blood cells are messed up. Can you see those results in your personal chart?
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I'll look later and see exactly what I can find. Thanks for asking.
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Dealing with a military doctor, once, I had to go to patient relations to get my results. After speaking with them, the doctor called me immediately.
Comment from RGstar
I am going to give this a six star, but some little question marks over the behaviour of the stranger who grabbed Alexandra's arm and told her to 'come over there' ...as if she was nothing, and he felt he could and she would respond....going on to imply, she would appreciate his companionship. All seems a little strange having just seen her once, seemingly knowing she was there with another party... in Cordero, even if formally boyfriend- girlfriend. Normally a person wouldn't act this way, even if bold.
Then as a result: ''She ran to him and threw her arms around him. "You're alive."
Again looks a bit rushed. If she walked away crying and Cordero found her, wouldn't it have been a better meeting if when he heard her crying, simply walking u to her and place a hand on her shoulder, asking if ok?
Apart from that, Really good writing.
Nicely balanced and the story seems to be taking good shape.
Well done.
Best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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I am going to give this a six star, but some little question marks over the behaviour of the stranger who grabbed Alexandra's arm and told her to 'come over there' ...as if she was nothing, and he felt he could and she would respond....going on to imply, she would appreciate his companionship. All seems a little strange having just seen her once, seemingly knowing she was there with another party... in Cordero, even if formally boyfriend- girlfriend. Normally a person wouldn't act this way, even if bold.
Then as a result: ''She ran to him and threw her arms around him. "You're alive."
Again looks a bit rushed. If she walked away crying and Cordero found her, wouldn't it have been a better meeting if when he heard her crying, simply walking u to her and place a hand on her shoulder, asking if ok?
Apart from that, Really good writing.
Nicely balanced and the story seems to be taking good shape.
Well done.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 30-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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I will recheck this part. It will come out later how much of a real jerk Luke is. We will see him again. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Here's your six for the week. Great job as always. It was full of tension, action, and certainly held my interest. I'm looking forward to the next one. Have a great week. Shirley
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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Here's your six for the week. Great job as always. It was full of tension, action, and certainly held my interest. I'm looking forward to the next one. Have a great week. Shirley
Comment Written 30-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for sharing another fine chapter and for a glimpse of what's to come in the future. Yes, we all have to learn the lesson about keeping Fanstorians attention. I've always kept my posts between 1200 and 1500 words when possible, because every time I got past 1800 to 2000 words, my readers cut in half or less. I don't think it's their short attention spans. They just have so many to read and so little time to get everyone read. I've often thought about cutting my readership back, but I don't have the heart. Great chapter!
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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Thanks for sharing another fine chapter and for a glimpse of what's to come in the future. Yes, we all have to learn the lesson about keeping Fanstorians attention. I've always kept my posts between 1200 and 1500 words when possible, because every time I got past 1800 to 2000 words, my readers cut in half or less. I don't think it's their short attention spans. They just have so many to read and so little time to get everyone read. I've often thought about cutting my readership back, but I don't have the heart. Great chapter!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I entered the first chapter contest and it had a minimum of 2000 words, maximum 5000 so I thought I would try my luck. Mistake. I had a high number of reviews but some protested. LOL
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Seems like there are always a few protestors against anything that doesn't work to their advantage. :-)
Comment from Jay Squires
"You look fine." He swallowed and inhaled her perfume. She's hot! He opened the door. [I forgot (or didn't notice before) that you are getting inside Cordero's mind. I thought it was only Alexandra's.]
"It wouldn't hurt to put some ice on that." He turned. "I'll get some." [She wasn't hurt by Luke's grip, was she? I'll look back, but I don't recall your mentioning that he hurt her. I checked back and saw that she fell to the ground. You might want to have her grab her arm or some such action.]
Once again, a fine chapter. The relationship is beginning to grow stronger between Cordero and Alexandra.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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"You look fine." He swallowed and inhaled her perfume. She's hot! He opened the door. [I forgot (or didn't notice before) that you are getting inside Cordero's mind. I thought it was only Alexandra's.]
"It wouldn't hurt to put some ice on that." He turned. "I'll get some." [She wasn't hurt by Luke's grip, was she? I'll look back, but I don't recall your mentioning that he hurt her. I checked back and saw that she fell to the ground. You might want to have her grab her arm or some such action.]
Once again, a fine chapter. The relationship is beginning to grow stronger between Cordero and Alexandra.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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I double checked the first one. I am in Cord's POV and I added she grabbed her arm. I was looking for Cord just wanting an excuse to get away, but I guess it didn't work. LOL
Comment from Heather Burroughs
Barbara, I really enjoyed this chapter. The dialogue flows seamlessly throughout it all and it is incredibly well written. Thank you for sharing. Many blessings to you.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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Barbara, I really enjoyed this chapter. The dialogue flows seamlessly throughout it all and it is incredibly well written. Thank you for sharing. Many blessings to you.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Barb!
Fast-paced and engaging.
I enjoyed the plot, and that Luke fella and his boorish/thug ways were described and handled well.
Realistic and believable dialogue.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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Hello, Barb!
Fast-paced and engaging.
I enjoyed the plot, and that Luke fella and his boorish/thug ways were described and handled well.
Realistic and believable dialogue.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
