The Unpredictable Cycles of Life
Unexpected changes.59 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I saw this coming a mile away, and he did too.
He let it play because he knew she held the key to the folks that had been clumsily following him. He knew she would rob him, but was unsure whether she would completely offer herself up, but one can dream. The Fenilli brothers were not expecting retribution, but then, he wasn't sure their elevators went all the way to the top. When they killed that remarkable beauty , he decided negotiations were a mute point.
Karen
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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I saw this coming a mile away, and he did too.
He let it play because he knew she held the key to the folks that had been clumsily following him. He knew she would rob him, but was unsure whether she would completely offer herself up, but one can dream. The Fenilli brothers were not expecting retribution, but then, he wasn't sure their elevators went all the way to the top. When they killed that remarkable beauty , he decided negotiations were a mute point.
Karen
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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Wow, I'm so honored to wake up and find all your reviews of old stuff that offers nothing in return. Thank you so much for your generous review and kind words, and most of all your valuable time and interest. I appreciate YOU!
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Yesiree Bob I am quite the ticket. I love stories that fire my mind so much , I have scenarios running in my head.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I don't have any sixes left or you'd have it.
I was rooting for true love, but it seemed too easy from the start and, in the end, it was a sham.
What a great telling of a night in one's life - an unexpected encounter with a sexy, engaging woman who wants nothing more than to take you to bed. Too easy.
Did he really just smile at her misfortune?
This held my interest from the start - what a gifted storyteller you are.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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I don't have any sixes left or you'd have it.
I was rooting for true love, but it seemed too easy from the start and, in the end, it was a sham.
What a great telling of a night in one's life - an unexpected encounter with a sexy, engaging woman who wants nothing more than to take you to bed. Too easy.
Did he really just smile at her misfortune?
This held my interest from the start - what a gifted storyteller you are.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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True love is too easy to write, and in real life, there always seem to be obstacles to keep it from happening or tear it apart. Wouldn't it be nice if we lived in a happily-ever-after world? But without conflict, where would the story come from? Did he really just smile? Why not? She got exactly what she asked for, taking advantage of a brokenhearted old man. LOL. Thanks so much, Pam, for going back to read an old story that offers no reward. I appreciate your kind words and generous review. But most of all, YOU!
Comment from Seanna Grimes
That was absolutely wonderful to read. It caught my short attention span and made me feel sympathy for the protagonist in such little time. My horror writer intrusive thoughts kept wanting something to happen, and I wasn't disappointed at all. The plot twist made me laugh, and the ending was satisfying.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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That was absolutely wonderful to read. It caught my short attention span and made me feel sympathy for the protagonist in such little time. My horror writer intrusive thoughts kept wanting something to happen, and I wasn't disappointed at all. The plot twist made me laugh, and the ending was satisfying.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much, Seanna, for your generous review and kind words. This story isn't for everyone. I kind of like my characters, like to have variable sides, like most of us. In this case, a heartbroken side to a monster. LOL. Appreciate you taking time to read this. :-)
Comment from irishauthorme
Wow! A blockbuster story! Even without names, your characters sprang to life, the 'Lingua Italia' gave authority to your dialog. Your description of the Black Widow Lady prompted some, um, memories of a similar encounter, a memory I thought was safely tucked away under lock and key.
And hey, an "hourglass of boobs and booty?" Perfect. Everything else was just icing on the cake.
A very interesting finale, with some regrets for a lost orchid that might have been saved with a little care.
Great work!
irish
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Wow! A blockbuster story! Even without names, your characters sprang to life, the 'Lingua Italia' gave authority to your dialog. Your description of the Black Widow Lady prompted some, um, memories of a similar encounter, a memory I thought was safely tucked away under lock and key.
And hey, an "hourglass of boobs and booty?" Perfect. Everything else was just icing on the cake.
A very interesting finale, with some regrets for a lost orchid that might have been saved with a little care.
Great work!
irish
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Irish, for your generous review and kind words. I'm just a crazy old man with nothing better to do than make up goofy stories. LOL. I've just posted the final chapter-7 of my Tucker series that's still paying handsomely. It can be read without all the other chapters, but each one builds off the other and gives explanations, making them better as a group. LOL. I appreciate your encouraging remarks and taking time out to read my story!
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Hey, I'm going to start on the Tucker series this morning, sounds interesting. Also, I learn a lot just by reading, and sometimes get an inspiration to get to work on something my Muse has been bugging me to write.
irish
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I've been out of town since early this morning and just now saw this message when I got home. I've already seen where you read three of the Tucker series. They would probably been better in order, but I just appreciate that you even bothered to read stories that don't offer a reward. Much appreciated!
Comment from pome lover
well, it says fiction, so I assume it is. What a story and, look at the the accolades!
Congratulations of All Time Best and for winning Story of the Month! And for Heaven's sake, I checked out your portfolio and you have cornered the market on All time Bests and first place awards. Really something! Well, good for you! Well done!
Katharine
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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well, it says fiction, so I assume it is. What a story and, look at the the accolades!
Congratulations of All Time Best and for winning Story of the Month! And for Heaven's sake, I checked out your portfolio and you have cornered the market on All time Bests and first place awards. Really something! Well, good for you! Well done!
Katharine
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Katharine, for taking time to read one of my silly stories. Yes, it's all fiction, but I try to make it seem as realistic as possible to keep readers guessing. I greatly appreciate your stopping by, along with your kind words and generous review.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
After Terry's made-up interview I was prompted to see who RicMyworld was and review a work of his. Very nicely done, and totally fictitious though until I turned to page three thought it may have been real.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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After Terry's made-up interview I was prompted to see who RicMyworld was and review a work of his. Very nicely done, and totally fictitious though until I turned to page three thought it may have been real.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Tom for you kind words and generous review. It's always nice when someone new to my scratchings comes along for a peek. Much appreciated!
Comment from Maria Millsaps
This was a very engaging story with a tragic ending. Yet realistic. A male friend of mine who had travel to Columbia had a similar experience, except, they stole his kidney and left him on a brick of ice.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2022
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This was a very engaging story with a tragic ending. Yet realistic. A male friend of mine who had travel to Columbia had a similar experience, except, they stole his kidney and left him on a brick of ice.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Maria, for taking time to read my story. Luckily, this story is fiction. I'm sorry about your friend's misfortune. Sadly, those things happen. I too had a close friend who visited a woman he had met online, in Columbia. He was robbed and murdered by the woman's real boyfriend and two others. Appreciate your generous rating and review. Ric
Comment from Ronni
Hi Ric
When I first read this, was wondering if a sympathy card was in
order or a curious latter day "Believe it or not" mystery. Relieved
to note it was a fiction story, ultimately quite intrigued by its
blend of post breakup blues and an incredulous disbelief of being
seduced by a steamy siren with all flirtations and baiting in full
steam and passionate pleasures ad infinitum!
I found the suggestive and licentous dialogue between the two most
compelling and probing a carnal mix of typical pick up and " tease
me some more" a story within a story in itself and a perfect set up
for being "taken' and shaken' which it was for both; to each their
own proclivity and perfect 'user manual' misread or dismissed ending.
Your dialogue and descriptions throughout are searing and sensational
according to emotion and desires at play. Great write!
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A surprise peek at yours inevitable after yours on review of my poem,
"Best & Dearest" several days ago. Especially re the intriguing comment
of 'popping into your mind' momentary puzzlement....which I did
comment on; but appears you have not yet read yet; but perhaps
will eventually? Maybe not so puzzling or crazy after all.
Hope all is going great with you, and thanks again for the deligtful
surprise!
Best wishes always, Ronni
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Hi Ric
When I first read this, was wondering if a sympathy card was in
order or a curious latter day "Believe it or not" mystery. Relieved
to note it was a fiction story, ultimately quite intrigued by its
blend of post breakup blues and an incredulous disbelief of being
seduced by a steamy siren with all flirtations and baiting in full
steam and passionate pleasures ad infinitum!
I found the suggestive and licentous dialogue between the two most
compelling and probing a carnal mix of typical pick up and " tease
me some more" a story within a story in itself and a perfect set up
for being "taken' and shaken' which it was for both; to each their
own proclivity and perfect 'user manual' misread or dismissed ending.
Your dialogue and descriptions throughout are searing and sensational
according to emotion and desires at play. Great write!
***************
A surprise peek at yours inevitable after yours on review of my poem,
"Best & Dearest" several days ago. Especially re the intriguing comment
of 'popping into your mind' momentary puzzlement....which I did
comment on; but appears you have not yet read yet; but perhaps
will eventually? Maybe not so puzzling or crazy after all.
Hope all is going great with you, and thanks again for the deligtful
surprise!
Best wishes always, Ronni
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Hello, Ronni,
It's always a pleasure to receive your reviews, comments and, best of all, to know you liked my story. We cross many paths every day and why one person lingers in our memory or their thoughts and views matter more than others is hard to decipher. Especially those we've hardly communicated with other than a few words on a page. Thanks for taking time to read my story and the smile on my face. I hope all is well in your world!
Wishing you the best! Ric
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Hi Ric
A very wise and considerate reflection
indeed, so in tune with your always thoughtful, gentlemanly nature
and positive, objective compliment!
which I have always admired, likewise
with smiles and pleasure, as they
have occured periodically on FS communicated 'between a few words on a page.'
Even momentary smiles and pleasures few and far between, are
touching gifts and pleasures 'as it is,
when it is'.....Amen.
Thanks for timely reply.
Best always, Ronni
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Not enough adjectives to describe how good this one is. The plot was excellent with great twists and turns, especially at the end (karmas a bitch). Great development of the protagonist's character--self-effacing and yet charming. Great use of dialogue that is snappy and good banter between the woman and the protagonist. Obviously, the twist at the end makes the story rreally work and brings it around full circle. Great job.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Not enough adjectives to describe how good this one is. The plot was excellent with great twists and turns, especially at the end (karmas a bitch). Great development of the protagonist's character--self-effacing and yet charming. Great use of dialogue that is snappy and good banter between the woman and the protagonist. Obviously, the twist at the end makes the story rreally work and brings it around full circle. Great job.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much, Tim, for your kind words and generous review. It's always a pleasure when those I read and enjoy every day can find something nice to say about what my rambling mind might come up with. LOL. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from robyn corum
Ric,
I am so, so happy to see you. *smile* I have heard about you and your clever writing from several friends and have watched for your pieces - but it seems you and I travel in totally different circles here. I always think that is SO WEIRD! It kinda seems impossible but I've seen it happen again and again. When I've been here over ten years and then meet someone else who's been here that long or longer who I've never met!
Anyway - you were recommended to me very highly and I've been on the lookout. I was happy when I saw you had won this contest and came immediately to read your winning post! Congrats!!
Unfortunately (sorry, sorry!) the editor in me still had to absolutely rip you apart. *smile* Hope you won't mind. You'll see that these notes still weren't enough to reduce the rating. The story was fun and real and so close to the men I know that I smiled many times through the reading. I really appreciated the humility here.
Please take a look below and see what you think and if there are things you agree with. Use the ones you do and chuck the rest. *smile*
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Notes:
1.) And although, nothing is truly perfect, commitment and compatibility seemed pedestal worthy.
--> no comma after 'although'
2.) Then, the wet-mop-of-sudsy-reality smacked me in the face, when unexpectedly, from out of nowhere, she said. "I don't love you anymore."
--> Then the wet-mop-of-sudsy-reality smacked me in the face when, unexpectedly (and) from out of nowhere she said(,) "I don't love you anymore."
3.) Those feelings or lack thereof surely hadn't been an overnight pursuance.
--> is 'pursuance' the right word? Implying she sought to fall out of love? Most women are committed to their relationships UNTIL something turns south, right? Maybe 'awareness'/ 'discovery'...?
4.) "Is this the regular Happy Hour crowd?" (s)he asked.
5.) It's not on my favorite's list, simply close
--> favorites
6.) So, nonchalant . . . and you slipped it in, effortlessly,
--> no comma after 'So'
7.) and (asked), "How could I refuse(?)"
8.) Starving myself. I couldn't help but ask,
--> Should these two be connected - same sentence? With a comma instead of a period?
9.) "Until the Heavenly ambrosial aura from the eatery overwhelmed my senses."
--> I questioned this comment before I made it because I know you can get away with this but I reeaaallly fell like 'aroma' would be more appropriate?
10.) Although, I've heard wonderful reviews.
--> no comma
11.) One of the finest, and hardest restaurants
--> questioning 'hardest'
12.) to get an available date, and they move you to the front of the line. To what appears, your own table."
--> neither needs a comma
13.) Guido is a good friend, and I eat here probably three nights a week or more."
--> no comma
14.) I called you a "Lovely, very beautiful lady." She feigned being visibly
--> (")I called you a (')Lovely, very beautiful lady.(') (new paragraph for her actions, please) She feigned being visibly
15.) An obvious catch in her throat, unable
--> confusing - you said she feigning being moved by what he'd said, right?
16.) Where he asks the wine preference - needs a new paragraph also
17.) Then, she excused herself, to powder her nose, and returned with two glasses of vermouth Amaro, neat.
--> Then she excused herself to powder her nose and returned with two glasses of vermouth Amaro, neat.
18.) The headline read: singer/actress plunges 14 floors to her death from a penthouse atop The Roosevelt New Orleans.
--> headlines are all caps and short:
"Penthouse Leap for Failed Actress"
This was well put together, the progression and pace were really nice, and the conclusion was stellar. I enjoyed this a lot. Thanks so much! I look forward to more of your work - NOW I see what those folks were talking about!!! Thanks a heap.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Ric,
I am so, so happy to see you. *smile* I have heard about you and your clever writing from several friends and have watched for your pieces - but it seems you and I travel in totally different circles here. I always think that is SO WEIRD! It kinda seems impossible but I've seen it happen again and again. When I've been here over ten years and then meet someone else who's been here that long or longer who I've never met!
Anyway - you were recommended to me very highly and I've been on the lookout. I was happy when I saw you had won this contest and came immediately to read your winning post! Congrats!!
Unfortunately (sorry, sorry!) the editor in me still had to absolutely rip you apart. *smile* Hope you won't mind. You'll see that these notes still weren't enough to reduce the rating. The story was fun and real and so close to the men I know that I smiled many times through the reading. I really appreciated the humility here.
Please take a look below and see what you think and if there are things you agree with. Use the ones you do and chuck the rest. *smile*
***
Notes:
1.) And although, nothing is truly perfect, commitment and compatibility seemed pedestal worthy.
--> no comma after 'although'
2.) Then, the wet-mop-of-sudsy-reality smacked me in the face, when unexpectedly, from out of nowhere, she said. "I don't love you anymore."
--> Then the wet-mop-of-sudsy-reality smacked me in the face when, unexpectedly (and) from out of nowhere she said(,) "I don't love you anymore."
3.) Those feelings or lack thereof surely hadn't been an overnight pursuance.
--> is 'pursuance' the right word? Implying she sought to fall out of love? Most women are committed to their relationships UNTIL something turns south, right? Maybe 'awareness'/ 'discovery'...?
4.) "Is this the regular Happy Hour crowd?" (s)he asked.
5.) It's not on my favorite's list, simply close
--> favorites
6.) So, nonchalant . . . and you slipped it in, effortlessly,
--> no comma after 'So'
7.) and (asked), "How could I refuse(?)"
8.) Starving myself. I couldn't help but ask,
--> Should these two be connected - same sentence? With a comma instead of a period?
9.) "Until the Heavenly ambrosial aura from the eatery overwhelmed my senses."
--> I questioned this comment before I made it because I know you can get away with this but I reeaaallly fell like 'aroma' would be more appropriate?
10.) Although, I've heard wonderful reviews.
--> no comma
11.) One of the finest, and hardest restaurants
--> questioning 'hardest'
12.) to get an available date, and they move you to the front of the line. To what appears, your own table."
--> neither needs a comma
13.) Guido is a good friend, and I eat here probably three nights a week or more."
--> no comma
14.) I called you a "Lovely, very beautiful lady." She feigned being visibly
--> (")I called you a (')Lovely, very beautiful lady.(') (new paragraph for her actions, please) She feigned being visibly
15.) An obvious catch in her throat, unable
--> confusing - you said she feigning being moved by what he'd said, right?
16.) Where he asks the wine preference - needs a new paragraph also
17.) Then, she excused herself, to powder her nose, and returned with two glasses of vermouth Amaro, neat.
--> Then she excused herself to powder her nose and returned with two glasses of vermouth Amaro, neat.
18.) The headline read: singer/actress plunges 14 floors to her death from a penthouse atop The Roosevelt New Orleans.
--> headlines are all caps and short:
"Penthouse Leap for Failed Actress"
This was well put together, the progression and pace were really nice, and the conclusion was stellar. I enjoyed this a lot. Thanks so much! I look forward to more of your work - NOW I see what those folks were talking about!!! Thanks a heap.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much, Robyn, for your kind words, corrections, and generous review of my errant scribblings. You worked harder trying to polish this piece than I did writing it. I have a tendency to write really fast, and barely knowing a noun from a verb and principles of grammar, I can create quite a mess. Writing what whirls through my pea brain is what's fun for me, and since I hate the editing and polishing grind, I don't do much, if any. Other than a quick read over. I guess, I should be ashamed or just quit until I'm willing to do better. But as long as I can put a smile on a few faces with my foolishness and keep myself entertained a bit, its all in fun. I can't thank you enough for all the time you spent pointing out my blunders. Your review is very much appreciated!
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Don't you DARE consider quitting.
