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Nostalgia of an Aging Stripper

Behind the fantasy

28 total reviews 
Comment from karenina
Excellent
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Superb. Raw. Real. Hardscrabble truth of a mom hustling for her child... Living the nightmare of cashing in on lustful dreams of bloated ego and bulging crotch.

Karenina

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
    I actually don't like this one. Don't like that I took the "I" POV perspective of a woman.
reply by karenina on 15-Feb-2022
    And I thought hmmm. First time, to my mind, A man's gotten it right.
Comment from sue133
Excellent
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A vivid, amazing poem about the one thing women can do for money when they are desperate. You have painted the whole picture and in doing so, have given us a story. Your use of metaphors and imagery are genius and your ability to understand the mind of this woman is wonderful. Excellent

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
    Thanks so much for your review.
Comment from Katherine M. Kean
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This is wonderful. You have made me picture a whole new lifestyle. I especially pondered your words:
whispering
innuendoes and alibis to men
who hate their wives
I had always imagined it as being men who were bored with their wives, or dissatisfied with their sex life who turned to a stripper. But hate? Have I got things wrong?

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
    Thanks, Kate for the meaningful review.
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
Excellent
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Mr. McDowell...your skill super cedes heights phenominal! And
this poem is straight off the meters!!! For, it is nevertheless funny
how no matter how much money one can make from stripping,
you can never get your dignity back. And your skill put that on
display. Keep Writing. And Stay Connected.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
    Thanks for the great review. I hope all is well with you.
Comment from HarambeForPresident
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This is an incredible read, easily one of your best, and that is saying something. The fractal fractured metaphors are so vivid, diving deep through time. I can't believe we got this treat today instead of on Valentines Day. Amazing work.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
    Thanks for the great review and for bookcasing this one. Thanks for your thorough reviews.
Comment from Wendy G
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I kept this an extra day so I could give you a six, which it absolutely deserves. Amazing mastery of the inner workings of the mind of a stripper, her thoughts and experiences, her tears ... and the contrast with her feelings when she picks up her child. Those last four lines are so incredibly RIGHT!
Also "the cremated ashes of dreams" and "play my body like a perfectly crafted violin", many of your expressions throughout are just superb.
Wendy
(Typo : "I vow to never (to) come back": remove second "to")

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
    Thanks for the great review, and I have corrected the typo.
Comment from Gloria ....
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Superbly written from the POV of a woman, making a living for her family as a single mother.

Strong and vivid imagery capturing the act of seduction, and through carefully placed smoke and pole dances.

A most impressive poem, T. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
    Thanks, Gloria, for the great review and for the six stars.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I glad I had one more six left. You certainly deserve it for your portray ing a stripper as a person trying to support her son and herself. I have known a few of these women and I have to say while their profession and themselves are seen as seedy.. I have seen the side that they have large generous and kind hearts.
Best wishes
Mary

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
    Mary, thanks for the great review and the six stars.
Comment from Pamplemousse1
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This is such a dignified homage to forgotten women--women whispered about and ostracized by the status quo in many societies. You've given her a voice and a purpose as her spirit devolves from the thrill of being the object of desire to simply paying her bills to make a better life for her infant son. The ending with the child is filled with redemption and hope for her after all the shame and disappointment with the men she's encountered both on and off the stage. I really loved this write because you made her human and relatable. I know many women that stripped at one point in their lives. Some did it for the thrill of control. Some did it to pay for their education. There is a quiet dignity in the routine humbling many women endure for the sake of a paycheck. This is true for many professions today.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
    You are one of the best reviewers on this site. Thank you.
reply by Pamplemousse1 on 19-Jan-2022
    Thank you T! I really appreciate it.
Comment from GeraldShuler
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

With magnificent talent and grace, you have bared far more than just a stripper's flesh... you put the spotlight on her soul. I love the way you have her revealing her own painful thoughts without even making her sound bitter. Your words let us watch an innocent girl make bad decisions but still have hope in her future. Very well written!

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
    Thank you for your great review and the six stars.