I Thanked God
A wonderful, forever lasting love.40 total reviews
Comment from Stu Harrell
I really enjoyed this.....I lost my wife some years ago.....have never gotten over it....it is just the way it is....plus, I'm an old guy anyway.....Thanks again for your service....Godspeed....Stu Harrell
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I really enjoyed this.....I lost my wife some years ago.....have never gotten over it....it is just the way it is....plus, I'm an old guy anyway.....Thanks again for your service....Godspeed....Stu Harrell
Comment Written 01-Apr-2022
Comment from Rena Smith
Wow, this is a beautiful poem that really tugs at the heart strings. It's emotional and sentimental. It's about love and it's sad. I think that is a gift to find someone to spend your life with until death do you part. It's a beautiful poem even though it's sad.
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Wow, this is a beautiful poem that really tugs at the heart strings. It's emotional and sentimental. It's about love and it's sad. I think that is a gift to find someone to spend your life with until death do you part. It's a beautiful poem even though it's sad.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2022
Comment from Henry Woodward
A beautiful poem. I'm sorry for your loss. The four stars are because the meter of the stanzas broke cadence in four of the five verses.
Maybe the second verse could read,
She looked up at me,
With tired, hazel eyes.
"Don't be sad" she said,
True love never dies.
And maybe the third verse could be,
Again we'll be together,
In God's house above.
So, please when I'm gone,
Don't forsake our love.
And the fourth stanza might be,
A tear slowly rolled,
Down her sweet soft cheek.
I gently wiped it away,
And tried, but could not speak.
For the fifth verse, maybe this,
Then she closed her eyes,
For the final time.
And I thanked our loving God,
Long ago He made her mine.
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A beautiful poem. I'm sorry for your loss. The four stars are because the meter of the stanzas broke cadence in four of the five verses.
Maybe the second verse could read,
She looked up at me,
With tired, hazel eyes.
"Don't be sad" she said,
True love never dies.
And maybe the third verse could be,
Again we'll be together,
In God's house above.
So, please when I'm gone,
Don't forsake our love.
And the fourth stanza might be,
A tear slowly rolled,
Down her sweet soft cheek.
I gently wiped it away,
And tried, but could not speak.
For the fifth verse, maybe this,
Then she closed her eyes,
For the final time.
And I thanked our loving God,
Long ago He made her mine.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2022
Comment from bob cullen
For me, this verse truly defines the meaning of love. You are indeed fortunate to have found such a partner. I wish you well. May 2022 bring you every happiness.
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For me, this verse truly defines the meaning of love. You are indeed fortunate to have found such a partner. I wish you well. May 2022 bring you every happiness.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
Comment from MissMerri
What a lovely love poem! I totally agree... "True love never dies." It continues long past the grave and has the power to change lives and bring joy and purpose. Thank you for this beautiful reminder of the meaning of true love. I hope this does well in the contest. I loved everything about it.
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What a lovely love poem! I totally agree... "True love never dies." It continues long past the grave and has the power to change lives and bring joy and purpose. Thank you for this beautiful reminder of the meaning of true love. I hope this does well in the contest. I loved everything about it.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
Comment from Janet Foor
A beautiful poem filled with love. I can see why you posted the picture as well. Your love for each other comes right off the page.
Thank you for sharing your love story.
Blessings
Janet
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A beautiful poem filled with love. I can see why you posted the picture as well. Your love for each other comes right off the page.
Thank you for sharing your love story.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, your poem is beautiful, albeit sad. Of special note:
We were holding hands,
When she passed away.
I lost the best part
Of my heart that day.
(I leave my tear on this page.)
Beautiful photo. Good rhyming scheme. Heartfelt writing. Well done.
Today you wrote something brave--six stars for you. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Hello author, your poem is beautiful, albeit sad. Of special note:
We were holding hands,
When she passed away.
I lost the best part
Of my heart that day.
(I leave my tear on this page.)
Beautiful photo. Good rhyming scheme. Heartfelt writing. Well done.
Today you wrote something brave--six stars for you. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Sorry it took so long to respond to your review, I have Parkinson''s. It's hard to use my computer Sometimes. Thank you. You, honor me with the six.
Comment from Gert sherwood
A wonderful, forever lasting love.
I Thanked God
A beautiful poem about everlasting true love. Your use of free verse with rhyming. Made your poem about love and very emontial where you say,
'She closed her eyes
One last time,
And I thanked God
he- He made her mine'.
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A wonderful, forever lasting love.
I Thanked God
A beautiful poem about everlasting true love. Your use of free verse with rhyming. Made your poem about love and very emontial where you say,
'She closed her eyes
One last time,
And I thanked God
he- He made her mine'.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Wonderful witness to the world. Glad she shared
times together. Tresure your memories. God is with
you both on Heaven and Earth. True love never dies!
flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Wonderful witness to the world. Glad she shared
times together. Tresure your memories. God is with
you both on Heaven and Earth. True love never dies!
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Sorry it took so long to respond to your review. I have Parkinson's.
It's sometimes hard to use my computer. You honor me with the six, thank you.
Comment from Michele Harber
What a sad and sweet poem. I'm so sorry for your loss, but you express your love so beautifully and poignantly that you take the reader with you from the very first line. Your rhymes are very well chosen.
From a poetic standpoint, I'd suggest you work a bit on meter but, from an emotional standpoint, this is unsurpassable.
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What a sad and sweet poem. I'm so sorry for your loss, but you express your love so beautifully and poignantly that you take the reader with you from the very first line. Your rhymes are very well chosen.
From a poetic standpoint, I'd suggest you work a bit on meter but, from an emotional standpoint, this is unsurpassable.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
