Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

It is so sad that some have to live like this. But, some have even less. It shouldn't be. Was the poem inspired by the photo?
Congrats for placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022

Joan, thank you for the review. Yes, it's very sad and something I see almost everyday. In a way the photo was my inspiration. I work in a nice office with big windows. On any given day, I look out and I see homelessness. One person had lived in an old vehicle for at least 2 years. I observed that person using a large black trash bag to cover the windows as it has been very cold. You keep writing and stay healthy as well. Thanks again

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job with your contest entry, Malerie, though it's poignant. Great job with the descriptive words and the correct syllable count. It's a sad commentary on the land of plenty.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022

Thanks for the review and your comments. Both are appreciated

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

For some reason I was thinking of a kid building a homemade fort. Not a homeless person. I thought your writing did a wonderful job of describing what I saw as a fort. Great job.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022

Thanks for the review and comments. I may need to change the title.

Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

This poem resonated with me because I have seen similar dwellings and always feel so bad for the person living there. No one should have to exist that way. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022

Thanks for the review and comments.

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

I like your poem very much. Great words to illustrate the picture. So many times the things we discard can be something useful for others. Homeless people make use of a lot of our trash.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022

Thanks for the review and comments.

reply by Anne Johnston on 10-Jan-2022

You are welcome

Comment from jwsteele

Excellent

Garbage bags
are the floors of her house
underneath rodents welcome the heat

This is an interesting poem.
What a shame to end up that way.
The numbers of people that end up in that situation are greater than recognized. Especially now.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022

Thanks for taking time to read and comment on my poem. Both are appreciated.

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

Your 3 6 9 poem is really well done--written accurately, according to the standards; and descriptive of an issue that is growing by the day. I cannot fathom what the homeless go through.

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022

Thanks for the review and comments. Both are appreciated.

Comment from Gee

Excellent

Great Topic.
I travelled quite a bit and seeing the conditions some live in is amazing. On the island of Mindanao there is an entire village under the bridge. Made from what ever trash they can locate.

I appreciate you being this subject to the light and thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2022

Thanks for your review and comments.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

It is amazing how we can recycle old things to make use of them and of course the homeless have nothing so collecting cardboard and clothes helps them keep warm, a fun post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2022

Thanks for your review and comments. Both are appreciated.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

How awful state! You have expressed rightly how the homeless person makes her living making a home using others garbage bags or black bag and cardboards and old clothes; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2022

Thanks for the review and comments.