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A Star Is Born

A short prayer

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Comment from lyenochka
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What a great little poem! I think we all can relate to being in our youth and wanting fame and fortune as a "star." But you gave a humorous reply to God taking it quite literally. Congratulations on your second place finish!

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2021
    Thanks, Helen. You have to choose your words carefully when talking to God.
Comment from Sally Law
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Wonderful Naani poem, Paul. I find the Lord to be specific. That's usually how I know it's Him. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal :))

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2021
    Thanks, Sal. God is always playing tricks on me.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This naani, A Star is Born, using four lines and twenty-four syllables, gives the readers some guidance on what to ask for beyond the general goal.

The drifter said he once prayed to God to let him become somebody. He knows now that he should have been more specific.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
    Thanks, Bill. Right, you have to choose your words carefully.
Comment from jbrax wilkn
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Lovely naani poem with a bit of clever double meaning available in the request to be a "star". Were God and the requestor on the same page? Can Omniscience pretend playful misunderstanding? Or would that be Omnipotence playing a joke? Words are just so full of all kinds of crazy thoughts. Initially, I enjoyed the light spirituality of your poem, and then I enjoyed the fun I had with "hidden" (or maybe not) interpretation I found (or invented) in the word "star". Your picture may (or may not) be misleading. Anyway... entirely enough of my foolishness. Bottom line, thank you for sharing a lovely poem.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
    Thanks for the review. I'd hate to see your review of a long poem. Haha.
Comment from LateBloomer
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Hello Paul, Very good, very cute. I like your play on the word, Star. Nice twist at the ending which made me laugh just a wee bit. Lovely artwork choice. Good syllable count. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
    Thanks, LB. Some didn't get the astronomy.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
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' A Star is Born ' is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. The wit and wisdom of this poet's work has great appeal. I look forward to seeing your next post. Good luck with the contest. My fingers are crossed for you!

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2021
    Thanks, Duchess. I came in second in the contest.
reply by duchessofdrumborg on 10-Dec-2021

    Paul, you're welcome and I'm delighted you did so well.
    Bless you and have a great week,
    the Duchess
Comment from Mrs. KT
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Hello Paul,
An exquisite naani.
Love the message and element of rhyme.
I also appreciate the inclusion of dialogue. Huge fan of dialogue in poetry, and yours made me smile.

Best Wishes!
diane

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2021
    Thanks, Diane. It's sometimes tough to incorporate rhyme in the short ones.
Comment from RShipp
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What a beautiful Naani writing prompt entry.

I loved the freedom you allowed in talking to God about the desires of your heart.

Exquisitely done.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2021
    Thanks for the review. I have to talk to God every once in awhile about various things.
Comment from HarambeForPresident
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I was half expecting to see a picture of Elvis on here. This is a good sort of double meaning to have in your poem. Nice double rhyme. The only improvement I recommend is changing your background to black, and your text to some light color, so that it fits better with the image. I think this will be a significant visual upgrade. thank you for the read!

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2021
    Thanks for the review and advice. Elvis would have been nice.
Comment from Eternal Muse
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This was a beautiful Naani. It's touching and has a great imagery, visuals and presentation. I liked your subtle humor too.

An excellent choice of artwork. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2021
    Thanks, EM. I like subtle humor once in awhile.