Pondering
A Barbee poem25 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
There are significant restraints in this poetry style, but you have mastered them well. In terms of theme, I feel it is a measure of th values of our society that we feel compelled to dress a certain way to succeed in life. Appearances influence people more than capabilities and skill. Hence a very thought-provoking poem, on a different, but important theme.
Wendy
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
  |
There are significant restraints in this poetry style, but you have mastered them well. In terms of theme, I feel it is a measure of th values of our society that we feel compelled to dress a certain way to succeed in life. Appearances influence people more than capabilities and skill. Hence a very thought-provoking poem, on a different, but important theme.
Wendy
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
-
Thank you. The form was very challenging.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hi, Yvonne. You must have spent a fair bit of time on this to get the complicated rhyming and cross-rhyming to work. You have done a good job in that the demands of that rhyme scheme don't overwhelm the flow and meaning of the poem.
The first few lines are very pretty while the following ones show your thoughts about dressing to succeed - with or without the black sheath dress!
The frequent rhyming gives this a musical tinkling effect when read aloud.
Steve
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
|
Hi, Yvonne. You must have spent a fair bit of time on this to get the complicated rhyming and cross-rhyming to work. You have done a good job in that the demands of that rhyme scheme don't overwhelm the flow and meaning of the poem.
The first few lines are very pretty while the following ones show your thoughts about dressing to succeed - with or without the black sheath dress!
The frequent rhyming gives this a musical tinkling effect when read aloud.
Steve
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
-
Thank you for such lovely comments. This was a tricky form for me, and I had a hard time making it make sense, so I am especially thankful for your remarks. Whew! I don't think I'll be doing another one of these for a while. The old brain's tuckered out. LOL.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like someone who loves clothes and needs them for all her activities and to look her best at work too, I am not familiar with this form but it seemed to have a lovely flow and your message came across clearly here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
|
This sounds like someone who loves clothes and needs them for all her activities and to look her best at work too, I am not familiar with this form but it seemed to have a lovely flow and your message came across clearly here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
-
Thank you for saying that. I had a hard time with this form, and I hoped it made sense. Thanks, Dolly.
Comment from royowen
I think we'd have to conclude that the majority of what we but is a little self indulgence, simply because we live, fortunately, in wealthy nations (although, unfortunately, not all in our respective countries wealthy) I'm not wealthy, but we have all we need. Beautifully written Yvonne, excellent job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
|
I think we'd have to conclude that the majority of what we but is a little self indulgence, simply because we live, fortunately, in wealthy nations (although, unfortunately, not all in our respective countries wealthy) I'm not wealthy, but we have all we need. Beautifully written Yvonne, excellent job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
-
Thank you. This was a tricky form for me, so I'm grateful for your comment. I have all I need, too. You're right. Society tends to over-indulge themselves these days. No sense of anticipation, but instant gratification.
-
Well done
Comment from BethShelby
There seems to always be new forms of poetry to challenge you in the Potlatch club. You are skilled at all of them. I'm glad I'm retired and don't have to bey dresses to look successful at work any more. I never did like to shop for clothes.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
|
There seems to always be new forms of poetry to challenge you in the Potlatch club. You are skilled at all of them. I'm glad I'm retired and don't have to bey dresses to look successful at work any more. I never did like to shop for clothes.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
-
I loved working where I wore suits, but those days are long gone. Now, it's sweatpants and T-shirts, or in summer, jeans and T-shirt. I've become a sloppy dresser in my old age. thanks for reviewing.
