Pondering
A Barbee poem25 total reviews
Comment from karenina
What a unique form! You've written it very well...I can see the "E" represented and your rhymes are perfect! Love the final two lines...a zing to any who would frivolously spend to pad their vanity! It's so nice to be back home and reviewing again! Thanks for sharing this one...it's going on my "have to try it" list!
Karenina
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
What a unique form! You've written it very well...I can see the "E" represented and your rhymes are perfect! Love the final two lines...a zing to any who would frivolously spend to pad their vanity! It's so nice to be back home and reviewing again! Thanks for sharing this one...it's going on my "have to try it" list!
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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I hope you do try it. I know how glad you are to be home, safe and sound. Blessings.
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It is great to be back home...
Thanks!
K
Comment from Pearl Edwards
My daughter and granddaughter have been on a shopping weekend, I think your ending lines would certainly apply to them. LoL This sounds like a complicated form, must get my muse ready for the challenge. Great write Yvonne. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2021
My daughter and granddaughter have been on a shopping weekend, I think your ending lines would certainly apply to them. LoL This sounds like a complicated form, must get my muse ready for the challenge. Great write Yvonne. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2021
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Thank you. Fortunately for my budget, I hate shopping. Looking forward to reading your poem.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This General Poetry speaks how man ponders for changes to fulfill wishes, whether needed or not; well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this, write more, fast, time is limited, I, DR, wrote 114 books, R 123600/N21. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
This General Poetry speaks how man ponders for changes to fulfill wishes, whether needed or not; well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this, write more, fast, time is limited, I, DR, wrote 114 books, R 123600/N21. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 28-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from lyenochka
You did a fabulous job with your Barbee poem challenge and you give us pause to be thankful and consider how much we really need. So many Americans probably spend in "shopping flings" more than some kings!
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
You did a fabulous job with your Barbee poem challenge and you give us pause to be thankful and consider how much we really need. So many Americans probably spend in "shopping flings" more than some kings!
Comment Written 28-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
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Fortunately for my budget, I hate shopping. Thanks, Helen.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is quite lovely, Yvonne. All the elements of good poetry are present, and you have worked your gift of skilled metre and rhymes and cross-rhymes in harmoniously.
And one can picture the dress and pondering upon its value quite adequately.
You served the form well with a most enjoyable read today. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
This is quite lovely, Yvonne. All the elements of good poetry are present, and you have worked your gift of skilled metre and rhymes and cross-rhymes in harmoniously.
And one can picture the dress and pondering upon its value quite adequately.
You served the form well with a most enjoyable read today. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 26-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Thank you. This one was quite challenging for this tired old brain, but it was fun.
Comment from aryr
This was a wonderful Barbee and yes I do know what that is damommy. I really enjoyed the concept of your words. They showed that there is hope but does come with a price. Unfortunately everything comes with a price. I loved the siloulette, it was great. Very well done and thoroughly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
This was a wonderful Barbee and yes I do know what that is damommy. I really enjoyed the concept of your words. They showed that there is hope but does come with a price. Unfortunately everything comes with a price. I loved the siloulette, it was great. Very well done and thoroughly enjoyed.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate that.
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You are so very welcome, Yvonne.
Comment from dragonpoet
Yvonne,
This is a tricky form which you performed well for the potlatch club. It tells a witty story of a woman pondering whether she should buy an expensive dress. She feels guilty because she already spends much more than she should.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
Yvonne,
This is a tricky form which you performed well for the potlatch club. It tells a witty story of a woman pondering whether she should buy an expensive dress. She feels guilty because she already spends much more than she should.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
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Comment Written 26-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much for reviewing.
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You are most kindly welcome, Yvonne.
Joan
Comment from Ulla
Hi Yvonne, you did a great job with this poem, a form I've never seen before. Not surprisingly taking into account my little knowledge of poetry. It's true, we've all bought something we didn't need and in the end didn't like either. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
Hi Yvonne, you did a great job with this poem, a form I've never seen before. Not surprisingly taking into account my little knowledge of poetry. It's true, we've all bought something we didn't need and in the end didn't like either. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 26-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Fortunately for me, I hate shopping, so I'm very careful what I choose because I don't want to have to go back. lol. I think that comes from my mother and grandmother sewing so beautifully, and wearing school uniforms. Shopping was a rare thing for me growing up. Thanks, Ulla, for a great review.
Comment from Tina Crute
This is a really cool style! Pondering is the exact perfect title for the artwork. It made me have to read this. There are so many facets to this poem, like the 'E' shape and girly font and great rhyming and reflective feel, but it reads as smoothly as can be. Do you remember cameo pins that women wore? This profile art reminds me a bit of that time and makes me realize these reflections of a girl considering clothes is a universal reflection:)
Tina
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
This is a really cool style! Pondering is the exact perfect title for the artwork. It made me have to read this. There are so many facets to this poem, like the 'E' shape and girly font and great rhyming and reflective feel, but it reads as smoothly as can be. Do you remember cameo pins that women wore? This profile art reminds me a bit of that time and makes me realize these reflections of a girl considering clothes is a universal reflection:)
Tina
Comment Written 26-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Tina. Yes, I remember those cameo pins very well. My grandmother had one that she wore every day.
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Oh, that's cool! I see them in antiques stores and am tempted to buy one and wear it. I think they are beautiful:)
Thanks to your poem, I now have that in my mind, so thanks!
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne.
You did a good job of meeting the style standard for the Barbee form. Since nothing is more reprehensible to me than going shopping, I can't identify with that. Going shopping to me is hitting the Dollar Tree. It is soon to be the $1.25 Tree.
Robert
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
Hello Yvonne.
You did a good job of meeting the style standard for the Barbee form. Since nothing is more reprehensible to me than going shopping, I can't identify with that. Going shopping to me is hitting the Dollar Tree. It is soon to be the $1.25 Tree.
Robert
Comment Written 26-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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I'm the same about shopping. I hate to shop, especially for clothes. The Dollar Tree is my kind of store. lol.