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Approaching the end

How could she be ...

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Comment from Frances Jean
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What a sad story Wendy. Eating disorders are dreadful but so many young ones particularly women suffer from it. Media and magazines have improved with the way they have portrayed models but it's still a real problem. Thanks for sharing Franky

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 27-Nov-2021
    Thank you very much, Franky, for your kind and understanding review. Greatly appreciated.
    Wendy
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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I love the true short story. Well done!

Excellent form and very engaging. Great entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 26-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
    Many thanks for your lovely review and encouragement as well as good wishes. All are appreciated.
Comment from l.raven
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it's so sad to see anyone in
that kind of condition...you want to help...
but there is nothing you can do....but pray...
I will put her in my prays...

your story is very well written my sweet friend...
and your picture speaks for itself...love you...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
    Thank you very much Linda for your lovely words and compassion. So appreciated.
reply by l.raven on 26-Nov-2021
    your so welcome you...well worth voting for...
    love xxoo
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Brutal. This may well be winner. Stunning closer says it all. Per your note she is hanging on, but barely. This rings too close to home--my sister has been anorexic for 50 years--maintains herself above acute danger level--but her health sucks. Spot on at 100 words. (assuming twenty-eight counts as a single word with the judges--I think it does).

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
    Thanks so much for your super review. Very encouraging! I appreciate your words, and that you can identify with the theme and understand.
Comment from Judy Lawless
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You've told a very sad story in these one hundred words. It's a story that isn't often talked about. Too often I see people out and about who could very well be suffering from anorexia. Well written. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
    Thank you very much Judy. I always appreciate your reviews. Thank you too for the good wishes.
reply by Judy Lawless on 26-Nov-2021
    You?re welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This one-hundred-word story, Approaching the End, has the required word count and tells a horror story about the neffects of this terrible eating disorder and gives the readers a stark image to remember.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
    Thank you very much for your thoughtful review. Much appreciated.
Comment from jaded831
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Although your entry is sad I enjoyed it. One perfect for giving thanks for our own lives. My heart goes out to this young woman experiencing what she is going through. Outstanding entry, good luck.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
    Thank you so much for your very kind and compassionate review. Much appreciated.
Comment from HarambeForPresident
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This scene is very well set up to surprise the reader. The phrase "under her woolen beanie" is particularly clever, adding layers/dimensions and context to the image, like the reference to the street party. There must be a lot more to the story. Where does this chance encounter occur? Thanks for a marvelous story.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
    Thank you very much for the super review and the gift of six stars. I appreciate it so much. Yes, there is a lot of back story.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Oh my goodness this is so very tragic. I know people, mainly girls die of this terrible affliction. Controlled by the mind, the body suffers and this conflict is hard to heal, a poignant and shocking write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
    Thank you so much for your compassionate and understanding review, much appreciated. Unfortunately this is a true story.
reply by Dolly'sPoems on 26-Nov-2021
    I voted for you as people should be aware that his is a real illness x x x
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
    Thank you so much. I appreciate that a lot. (And it makes up for the guy who gave me only four stars, because it didn't have a happy ending! Never mind whether it was written well or not.) I appreciate your thoughtfulness, and I do hope it does raise some awareness.
Comment from Bonnie Seach
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Well formatted.
A sad yet compelling story. How quickly a young life can change and age. How sad that, in this case, the cause of ageing could have been avoided. There is help for those who suffer from eating disorders. If treated in time a full recovery is possible.
The imagery and idea for this presentation enhances the theme.
Best wishes for the voting booth

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
    Thank you so much, Bonnie, for your compassionate and understanding review, which I greatly value. Yes, she has had a lot of treatment, but maybe they didn't start early enough. Many thanks for your good wishes as well.