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When I Am Gone

A poem

52 total reviews 
Comment from June Sargent
Exceptional
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I really enjoyed the beautiful sentiments you expressed in this piece. And many will relate to the words - as poets and writers. The legacy we leave behind will be like a garden of verse that will bloom forever. These were my favorite lines:

Let the flowers take root on the surface of your heart.
Let the wonder of love start.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from jenintorre
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I really enjoyed reading your lovely poem. It is very poignant and made me think. I wonder if anyone will read my poems after I'm gone. Best wishes. Jen.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from dragonpoet
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This poem reminds the we and our words live on. Our poetry or other writing shows who we are and will be. Love lives forever as faith tells us we may too.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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reply by dragonpoet on 04-Nov-2021
    You're welcome.
    Joan
Comment from Sherry Asbury
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Sigh! This is lovely and just a bit melancholy - as love often is. Your rhyme scheme is very nice...but the end line in the second verse seems a bit contrived...had you thought of: For loving you, I have no defence - or something such as that. Your last line is so tender and loving - very nice work!

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from RPSaxena
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Hello Poeticxscape,
Nice piece of poetry having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting the poet's self-confidence in writing worth remembering poems.
2nd stanza is particularly noteworthy.


 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from Paul McFarland
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The message is coming through, loud and clear, but it reads a little rough. You have done a good job with the rhyme, but the meter needs some work to make the reading more smooth.

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 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from royowen
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I don't presume to know why others write, but I do know why I do, apart from being a little driven, I want my works to proceed me, and a legacy for those loved ones. But I'm equally sure you probably do too. Beautifully written my friend, you display your excellent post reveals your deft abilities, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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    Most welcome
Comment from Ronni
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This is a very poignant and powerful personal epitaph and eulogy
that this person wants to be remembered for and what his life
left in his verse ; goals, ideals, self worth in simple candor,
integrity and truth; replete with humbleness and grace from
beginning to end. His last line, most beloved,
'Read my words and know that for fact my love lives forever'
Thanks for sharing, and do keep writing more!
Best wishes, Ronni

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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We can't guarantee anyone will remember us when were gone as people who die are soon forgotten. We can only hope the words we leave behind can in some how impact on others, our stories are our legacy. I enjoyed the sentiment here, and your rhymes although meter is uneven, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from karenina
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The sincerity with which you express the import of the words you compose, speaks to every writer's aspiration! That when we pass--our essence will live on!

Karenina

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2021
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reply by karenina on 04-Nov-2021
    My pleasure...

    Karenina