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When I Am Gone

A poem

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Comment from RGstar
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Very deep. I like this. Try taking the full stops away from the end of the line, not needed unless prose, for it may cause grammar issues on individual lines.
A very good piece of work.
Well done.
My best wishes.
RGstar

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from nomi338
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Outstanding. The love we project out into the world will last and have impact long after we have left this earthly plane. Of all the things that might e said of me after my demise. Let them with conviction proclaim, he showed great love and compassion for everyone.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from Boogienights
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This is beautifully written and it's a lovely idea that the words we write are left behind. It's ny hope that future family will read my poems and understand me better. Thanks for sharing. :)

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from amahra
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This is a fine poem, full of emotion and passion. Below are my favorite lines.

Let the flowers take root on the surface of your heart.
Let the wonder of love start. [I like these lines.]

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from Hitcher
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When I'm gone is a well written thought provoking poem. To be remembered by ones words, for in the reading of those words lie traces of the truth that was you...

I loved this stanza
Let the flowers take root on the surface of your heart.
Let the wonder of love start.
In those lines, my soul lies hence.
I did not perch on anyone's fence.
Im not sure about deaf and left - love and enough rhyming-or was that intentional

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from Raul1
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I think that the majority of the people's love lives are doing well. Thank you for sharing this well written poem. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from Terry Broxson
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Well, first let us hope it is long time before you are gone. I really like the first stanza. I also love the imagery of "flowers take root on the surface of your heart"...that is outstanding! Good Job.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from sandramitchell
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When I am gone...
As I age, those thoughts are with me a lot. You spoke of how you'd like to be remembered, and it mirrors my wishes. If our words can bring comfort to those we leave behind, and have them remember who and what we were, that's all anyone can ask. Lovely poem, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
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I really enjoyed the poignant emotions you expressed in this piece.
As a poet, your contribution to posterity will provide motivation and inspiration. Ideas, words, and sayings that are far more powerful than all the others. Much enjoyed. Keep them coming!

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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A very eloquent and deep poem that gives us a comforting feeling about our passage into the next realm.

"When I am gone, should you forget?
Even though we have never met.
Read my poems aloud, everyone.
And feel as I did, the warmth of the sun."

Ralf

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2021


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