Trick or Treat
A trick-or-treat experience48 total reviews
Comment from dellsworthpoet
The poem has a good flow. The images are clear. The story has a nice arc. The rhyme scheme is consistent. The story stays on point.
A good read. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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The poem has a good flow. The images are clear. The story has a nice arc. The rhyme scheme is consistent. The story stays on point.
A good read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the review. It was a fun time writing this.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Anne-Marie brison
Dear author,
A very good read with a comfortable rhyme scheme. I really enjoyed this!! May God bless you and your family!!!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Dear author,
A very good read with a comfortable rhyme scheme. I really enjoyed this!! May God bless you and your family!!!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks, Anne-Marie. We'll try another one soon.
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a charming poem that I enjoyed very much. It rhymes well and reads smoothly. I liked the imagery, too. It reminds me a bit of my small home town although it wasn't decked out that elaborately, but it was a lot of fun. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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This is a charming poem that I enjoyed very much. It rhymes well and reads smoothly. I liked the imagery, too. It reminds me a bit of my small home town although it wasn't decked out that elaborately, but it was a lot of fun. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks, Mary. Get ready for those little goblins.
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You too. You're welcome.
Comment from karenina
Hey you! Clever poem/story! Loved your jaunty rhyme and tie-tapping meter! Inspired the way you spun you yarn. Never saw that ending coming, which made it a double treat! I'm so glad our town is allowing the kiddos to go out trick or treating this year. A tiny bite of normalcy will be so sweet!
Good luck in the contest!
Karenina
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Hey you! Clever poem/story! Loved your jaunty rhyme and tie-tapping meter! Inspired the way you spun you yarn. Never saw that ending coming, which made it a double treat! I'm so glad our town is allowing the kiddos to go out trick or treating this year. A tiny bite of normalcy will be so sweet!
Good luck in the contest!
Karenina
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks, Karenina. I don't know what is going to be allowed here.
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With rules, mandates, masks, etc --ever shifting it's all a crap shoot.
I HOPE it's still allowed by Halloween!
Karenina
Comment from vpatterson222
Wow, such a great read! Not only is it a wonderful Halloween poem but it teaches children to treat everyone equal. I can definitely see this turn into a children's Halloween book. Good job!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Wow, such a great read! Not only is it a wonderful Halloween poem but it teaches children to treat everyone equal. I can definitely see this turn into a children's Halloween book. Good job!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the review. I've always thought about a children's book. Maybe I should do something about it.
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Best of luck!!
Comment from royowen
What thoughtful kids initially, knowing they had plenty of lollies were prepared to share them with the little boy who was cropped, but a kindly elf had beat them to him, and had given him two bags of sweeties, but it in the thought that counts, this is a beautifully written ballad my friend, well done, blessings beautifully written, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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What thoughtful kids initially, knowing they had plenty of lollies were prepared to share them with the little boy who was cropped, but a kindly elf had beat them to him, and had given him two bags of sweeties, but it in the thought that counts, this is a beautifully written ballad my friend, well done, blessings beautifully written, Roy
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks, Roy. I couldn't tell from your review if you knew that the elf was the little cripple boy, himself.
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I must admit I didn?t
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is truly a delightful children's Halloween poem that tells a story and delivers a message about the virtues of sharing. The details of the story...an elf with a cane and green hat, collecting candy, is phenomenally creative. I enjoyed this story and the surprise ending. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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This is truly a delightful children's Halloween poem that tells a story and delivers a message about the virtues of sharing. The details of the story...an elf with a cane and green hat, collecting candy, is phenomenally creative. I enjoyed this story and the surprise ending. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks, LJ. It was fun writing this poem. It did take me a few minutes to come up with the ending.
Comment from Hitcher
How cool was that, you had an entire street turn it on for you kids. That would definitely stay with a kid as a fond memory forever, I was raised in the UK so we didn't really do trick or treating... we missed out big time!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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How cool was that, you had an entire street turn it on for you kids. That would definitely stay with a kid as a fond memory forever, I was raised in the UK so we didn't really do trick or treating... we missed out big time!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks, Hitch. Yes, you missed out on a great experience.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Since we lived in near poverty - Halloween meant a lot. We got so much candy! My brother ate his and got sick. I counted out the days that the candy would last and hid it in a special place so I would make it last a long time. Rich or poor, Halloween brought memories to us all. Your poem is well-written and a jolly memory!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Since we lived in near poverty - Halloween meant a lot. We got so much candy! My brother ate his and got sick. I counted out the days that the candy would last and hid it in a special place so I would make it last a long time. Rich or poor, Halloween brought memories to us all. Your poem is well-written and a jolly memory!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the review, Sherry. That's a very sad story about your Halloween. There must be a poem there.
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Never thought of that - maybe I will!!
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
And they could not believe their eyes,
For lying on his bed
Were two big bags of candy,
And an elf's hat on his head.' SO FUNNY! I loved this! A brilliant read that was cheering and spooky! Well done and good luck kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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And they could not believe their eyes,
For lying on his bed
Were two big bags of candy,
And an elf's hat on his head.' SO FUNNY! I loved this! A brilliant read that was cheering and spooky! Well done and good luck kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks, Meia. I thought for some time before I came up with the ending.
