Five senses of happiness
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Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Love your entry for the writing prompt! I believe writing about the five senses was very clever.
The overall presentation - artwork, font and font color are very eye appealing, suggesting happiness. Your poem pleasantly and joyfully speaks expressively and with a lilt the word 'happiness'.
Beautifully done!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
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Love your entry for the writing prompt! I believe writing about the five senses was very clever.
The overall presentation - artwork, font and font color are very eye appealing, suggesting happiness. Your poem pleasantly and joyfully speaks expressively and with a lilt the word 'happiness'.
Beautifully done!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your super review! Very encouraging!
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Wendy, it just so happens I love everything you create. Have a blessed day :)
Gale
Comment from Frances Jean
I really enjoyed reading your poem. It rhymes beautifully and indeed, you covered all the senses. Above all it made me smile and share in your happiness. Well done Franky
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
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I really enjoyed reading your poem. It rhymes beautifully and indeed, you covered all the senses. Above all it made me smile and share in your happiness. Well done Franky
Comment Written 17-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much Frankie for your very kind words and super review! Appreciated.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A nice poem. The flow is good. The imagery is nice. The tone is conversational and warm. The poem stays on point.
One suggestion:
You don't actually talk about taste. You mention food on the table (sight) and aroma (smell). I would suggest the pleasure of food on the tongue would do taste.
A good read. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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A nice poem. The flow is good. The imagery is nice. The tone is conversational and warm. The poem stays on point.
One suggestion:
You don't actually talk about taste. You mention food on the table (sight) and aroma (smell). I would suggest the pleasure of food on the tongue would do taste.
A good read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much for a thoughtful and encouraging review. I was counting the food as involving the sense of taste. I'll have another look though, so thanks for that thought.
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You are welcome.
Comment from royowen
The senses are very useful, they aid memory, speech, obtaining wisdom, keeping the body functioning. But most of all as you are alluding to the giving and receiving of love, whether with affection, or simply speech. This is beautiful written my friend, I don't look for perfection in poetry, but it's how we improve, by the receiving and giving of educated observations, I thank God for some of the stinging crits I've received over the years, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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The senses are very useful, they aid memory, speech, obtaining wisdom, keeping the body functioning. But most of all as you are alluding to the giving and receiving of love, whether with affection, or simply speech. This is beautiful written my friend, I don't look for perfection in poetry, but it's how we improve, by the receiving and giving of educated observations, I thank God for some of the stinging crits I've received over the years, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for a thoughtful and encouraging review.
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Most welcome
Comment from Hitcher
It is true, live is never perfect but near perfection is not bad at all and few get anywhere near that : )) Home should be exactly how you describe it, peaceful, comforting. A place of joy and happiness and a place where you can feel loved. Growing old with your lover and best friend, knowing that they are your safe place. Nice!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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It is true, live is never perfect but near perfection is not bad at all and few get anywhere near that : )) Home should be exactly how you describe it, peaceful, comforting. A place of joy and happiness and a place where you can feel loved. Growing old with your lover and best friend, knowing that they are your safe place. Nice!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much for your super review.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
This is so sweet...the one we are with should always fill our senses and bring us joy. This is very clever and I really enjoyed this... Perfection is not something I worship, so your write is perfect to me.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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This is so sweet...the one we are with should always fill our senses and bring us joy. This is very clever and I really enjoyed this... Perfection is not something I worship, so your write is perfect to me.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much for your lovely review. Very encouraging!
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
But the choicest sounds which I ever will hear
Are those when he says "I love you, my Dear!"
This was so heartwarming and made me smile. A wonderful poem for the competition Kindest regards and good luck Meia x
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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But the choicest sounds which I ever will hear
Are those when he says "I love you, my Dear!"
This was so heartwarming and made me smile. A wonderful poem for the competition Kindest regards and good luck Meia x
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and encouraging words.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You included all the senses here in your colourful poem, the rhythm lost its way a bit but I enjoyed the end rhymes, much fun, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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You included all the senses here in your colourful poem, the rhythm lost its way a bit but I enjoyed the end rhymes, much fun, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much. Yes the rhythm was sacrificed to what I wanted to say, I am afraid!
Comment from Livia Lynch
A wonderful poem that absolutely delights the reader. I adore it, I love the flow and the atmosphere you created. Very good job!! :)
Hope you are having a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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A wonderful poem that absolutely delights the reader. I adore it, I love the flow and the atmosphere you created. Very good job!! :)
Hope you are having a wonderful day.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you Beth much for your lovely review. Very encouraging!
Comment from Patty Palmer
A great entry for this contest. It points out all the senses that make us happy. I like the rhyme and rhythm. The picture that you chose to go with this poem enhances it very nicely. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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A great entry for this contest. It points out all the senses that make us happy. I like the rhyme and rhythm. The picture that you chose to go with this poem enhances it very nicely. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much Patty. I really appreciate your time, kind words and also your good wishes.
