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Trinity's Story

A lifetime of dreams...

30 total reviews 
Comment from Melissa Place
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Wow, stunning story. I thought we were talking about a wedding, but unfortunately, it was a funeral. Wow, wow,wow! I love your writing. Are you published? Best wishes, Melissa

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
    Thank you so much for your outstanding review and the stars. It made me smile and that's a difficult thing to do lately. Appreciate the review.

    Hugs, Carol
Comment from Teri7
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This is a very well written supernatural story you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. I wish you well in the contest. love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
    Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Valerie Fish
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Wow, that was beautiful, I didn't see that one coming. ( Although 'supernatural' was a big clue!) You really built up the story, I was wandering how it was all going to end. Great description throughout, especially of the dress. ( love the pic). ' You Raise Me Up' means a lot to me, and our choir sang it for a charity concert once.

Well done.

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    Thank you so much Valerie for your kindness and awesome stars for my supernatural story. I appreciate your time and thoughts.

    Smiles, Carol
Comment from dmt1967
Excellent
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'Trinity gasped as she watched Paul, dressed in a black tuxedo, step from a car, double-parked( beside the other cars).' (delete) There is no need to elaborate as most people would assume and know there will be other cars.

Great story with a nice twist at the end that made me shed a tear lol. Take care, my friend, and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
    Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Patty Palmer
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I think this deserves seven stars!! However, since I have only six, that's how many I'm giving you. The story although sad, was very touching. It was surprising to realize it was her funeral instead of their wedding that they had planned together. Good luck with the contest!
Patty

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
    Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
Excellent
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This is a beautiful love story. However, I became confused along the way.
"Her fairytale wedding with the love of her life..." and "The beautiful bride allowed herself one momentary glance..." I know the funeral was the surprise ending, but the two sentences I mentioned clearly (at least to me) said wedding. When I read them, what did I miss?

I especially liked the descriptions of the flowers and the gown.

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
    Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Mary Shifman
Excellent
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This story is very well written. I wasn't sure how it would end, but I figured that something had happened at the wedding. I didn't realize that it was Trinity's funeral. It is a good story, but I still want to know what happened to the poor girl. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
    Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from pookietoo
Excellent
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I wish you good luck in the supernatural story contest entry. I hope all is well with you. Enjoy the blessings of life. Best wishes and keep smiling always.

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
    Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by pookietoo on 20-Oct-2021
    Welcome
Comment from lyenochka
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That's so sad. It seems that what was meant to be that fairytale wedding was in reality the memorial service for Trinity. It also seems that her parents had gone before. Best wishes in the contest!
Suggestion:
white gladiolus, (gladioli) for the plural, or even gladioluses

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
    Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from writer723
Excellent
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I very much enjoyed reading your excellent story. It really drew me in and captured my attention from start to finish. I found myself rooting for the main character all the way and wishing the best for the individual. Your depiction of this situation was quite emotional and touching to me. Your descriptive skills are exceptional and you express yourself very well.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
    Thank you for taking the time to read, enjoy and review my story. It means a great deal to me and I truly appreciate it.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol