Be-Leaf
Fall calls.4 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Exceptional.
'fall calls' 'Be-Leaf' ... love this.
'yet ekes' - is still flowing.
'ekes through veins' - powerful words signifying life.
'summer clings to life' - excellent imagery.
A clever, beautifully expressed poem and the overall presentation is gorgeous. Great entry!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Exceptional.
'fall calls' 'Be-Leaf' ... love this.
'yet ekes' - is still flowing.
'ekes through veins' - powerful words signifying life.
'summer clings to life' - excellent imagery.
A clever, beautifully expressed poem and the overall presentation is gorgeous. Great entry!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for your kind and detailed review! It's fun to select just the right word, isn't it?! I am happy to hear my intended imagery was received by you.
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You definitely had my vote :)
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Oh, thanks so much! Your words encourage me.
Comment from LisaMay
It seems that nothing in life likes change very much - even the leaves cling to the past. I enjoyed your presentation, a well thought out poem and attention paid to colouring.
(September where I live in New Zealand is Springtime, so I had to adjust my thinking.)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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It seems that nothing in life likes change very much - even the leaves cling to the past. I enjoyed your presentation, a well thought out poem and attention paid to colouring.
(September where I live in New Zealand is Springtime, so I had to adjust my thinking.)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Hehe, I sometimes forget we do not all experience the seasons simultaneously! Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review, LisaMay! And yes, even the leaves. :)
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Sometimes I Americanize my poems - change the spelling and the seasons because I know there's more of you than us.
Comment from pookietoo
A nice job with the poem. I enjoyed reading this poem. Keep writing your poems. Good luck to you in the contest. Best wishes and keep smiling. :) :)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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A nice job with the poem. I enjoyed reading this poem. Keep writing your poems. Good luck to you in the contest. Best wishes and keep smiling. :) :)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Thank you again! Sending smiles right back to you. :)
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Thank you.
Comment from kiwisteveh
As long as winter doesn't cling on too long down here in NZ. We should be well into spring, but the weather is not cooperating!
This is a beautiful 5-7-5 - both the words and the visual presentation. I particularly like your choice of the word 'ekes' and the satori-like last line with its potent message.
Well done!
Steve
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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As long as winter doesn't cling on too long down here in NZ. We should be well into spring, but the weather is not cooperating!
This is a beautiful 5-7-5 - both the words and the visual presentation. I particularly like your choice of the word 'ekes' and the satori-like last line with its potent message.
Well done!
Steve
Comment Written 14-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Haha, Steve, I sometimes forget we don't all experience seasons simultaneously! Thank you for reading my poem all the way from NZ! I appreciat eyour kind and encouraging review.
