The Last Hurrah
a contest entry15 total reviews
Comment from writer723
I very much enjoyed reading your excellent story. It really drew me in and captured my attention from start to finish. I found myself rooting for the main character all the way and wishing the best for the individual. Your depiction of this situation was quite emotional and touching to me. Your descriptive skills are exceptional and you express yourself very well.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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I very much enjoyed reading your excellent story. It really drew me in and captured my attention from start to finish. I found myself rooting for the main character all the way and wishing the best for the individual. Your depiction of this situation was quite emotional and touching to me. Your descriptive skills are exceptional and you express yourself very well.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Your kind words have made my day. Thank you for reading and a great review.
Comment from Hitcher
Evil is rare in one so young but it still exists and the innocence of such a child would send investigations in all the wrong directions leaving the door open for more and more burnings. A dark tale indeed! Good luck
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Evil is rare in one so young but it still exists and the innocence of such a child would send investigations in all the wrong directions leaving the door open for more and more burnings. A dark tale indeed! Good luck
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Hi Sherry, ooh, this is very clever plotting and a scary ending! I think you have got a great entry with this short story. I love the way the story developed leading up to a great conclusion to your competition entry. Giddy
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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Hi Sherry, ooh, this is very clever plotting and a scary ending! I think you have got a great entry with this short story. I love the way the story developed leading up to a great conclusion to your competition entry. Giddy
Comment Written 16-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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Thank you, dear Lady...I adored Dean Kuch and was crushed when I returned to FS only to find he had passed on...so I decided to my pen in that spooky direction.
Comment from SHABAMO
Definitely horrifying. This is very well written overall. I am assuming little Christa is possessed or something of that nature. There is a bit of a gap between "there's a foul odor in the air" and "it must be muffy" that doesn't make much sense to me...Inam assuming Christa is the cause of the cats pain but again, it's not super clear there. Maybe I'm being dense, feel free to educate me.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Definitely horrifying. This is very well written overall. I am assuming little Christa is possessed or something of that nature. There is a bit of a gap between "there's a foul odor in the air" and "it must be muffy" that doesn't make much sense to me...Inam assuming Christa is the cause of the cats pain but again, it's not super clear there. Maybe I'm being dense, feel free to educate me.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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You are not dense, dear Poet - sometimes I get ahead of myself...your remarks show me where a fix is needed...
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Glad to help!
Comment from Sanku
Great writing .it is a real horror ,very blood chilling, the small girls mind working overtime to dispose of her challenger. You have succeeded in slowly leading the reader to the clima
******.virtual six since I ran out of them
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Great writing .it is a real horror ,very blood chilling, the small girls mind working overtime to dispose of her challenger. You have succeeded in slowly leading the reader to the clima
******.virtual six since I ran out of them
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Thank you so very much!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The secret thoughts and deeds of some children are so often never detected until it is too late. Searing jealousy of another person, being
the center of attention is just not in the cards according to Christa's way of thinking.
Ralf
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The secret thoughts and deeds of some children are so often never detected until it is too late. Searing jealousy of another person, being
the center of attention is just not in the cards according to Christa's way of thinking.
Ralf
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The secret thoughts and deeds of some children are so often never detected until it is too late. Searing jealousy of another person, being
the center of attention is just not in the cards according to Christa's way of thinking.
Ralf
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The secret thoughts and deeds of some children are so often never detected until it is too late. Searing jealousy of another person, being
the center of attention is just not in the cards according to Christa's way of thinking.
Ralf
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
Comment from Carol Clark2
Oh, no! What a terrible way for Christa to get attention and be noticed. I don't usually read horror. This is a well-written story. I hope it does well in the contest. Carol
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Oh, no! What a terrible way for Christa to get attention and be noticed. I don't usually read horror. This is a well-written story. I hope it does well in the contest. Carol
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Thank you, honey girl!!
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You're welcome. Stay well & safe.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I've come to like flash horror fiction because we get to the meat of things so fast. Simmering meat too. And like many of us, Dean comes to mind often while reading this genre. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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I've come to like flash horror fiction because we get to the meat of things so fast. Simmering meat too. And like many of us, Dean comes to mind often while reading this genre. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
Thank you so much!!
Comment from royowen
Apparently Dean Kuch has left a legacy. It's probably not one I would want to leave, but if there's any consciousness in the afterlife I'll bet he approves, "happy screams", beautifully written my friend, a horror indeed, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Apparently Dean Kuch has left a legacy. It's probably not one I would want to leave, but if there's any consciousness in the afterlife I'll bet he approves, "happy screams", beautifully written my friend, a horror indeed, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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You are special to me for your faith and religious bent!!
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Bless you, Dean was/is a man of faith.
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That soothes my soul.
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Me too