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The Last Hurrah

a contest entry

15 total reviews 
Comment from writer723
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I very much enjoyed reading your excellent story. It really drew me in and captured my attention from start to finish. I found myself rooting for the main character all the way and wishing the best for the individual. Your depiction of this situation was quite emotional and touching to me. Your descriptive skills are exceptional and you express yourself very well.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
    Your kind words have made my day. Thank you for reading and a great review.
Comment from Hitcher
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Evil is rare in one so young but it still exists and the innocence of such a child would send investigations in all the wrong directions leaving the door open for more and more burnings. A dark tale indeed! Good luck

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2021

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
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Hi Sherry, ooh, this is very clever plotting and a scary ending! I think you have got a great entry with this short story. I love the way the story developed leading up to a great conclusion to your competition entry. Giddy

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
    Thank you, dear Lady...I adored Dean Kuch and was crushed when I returned to FS only to find he had passed on...so I decided to my pen in that spooky direction.
Comment from SHABAMO
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Definitely horrifying. This is very well written overall. I am assuming little Christa is possessed or something of that nature. There is a bit of a gap between "there's a foul odor in the air" and "it must be muffy" that doesn't make much sense to me...Inam assuming Christa is the cause of the cats pain but again, it's not super clear there. Maybe I'm being dense, feel free to educate me.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
    You are not dense, dear Poet - sometimes I get ahead of myself...your remarks show me where a fix is needed...
reply by SHABAMO on 12-Sep-2021
    Glad to help!
Comment from Sanku
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Great writing .it is a real horror ,very blood chilling, the small girls mind working overtime to dispose of her challenger. You have succeeded in slowly leading the reader to the clima
******.virtual six since I ran out of them

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
    Thank you so very much!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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The secret thoughts and deeds of some children are so often never detected until it is too late. Searing jealousy of another person, being
the center of attention is just not in the cards according to Christa's way of thinking.

Ralf

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2021

Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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The secret thoughts and deeds of some children are so often never detected until it is too late. Searing jealousy of another person, being
the center of attention is just not in the cards according to Christa's way of thinking.

Ralf

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2021

Comment from Carol Clark2
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Oh, no! What a terrible way for Christa to get attention and be noticed. I don't usually read horror. This is a well-written story. I hope it does well in the contest. Carol

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
    Thank you, honey girl!!
reply by Carol Clark2 on 10-Sep-2021
    You're welcome. Stay well & safe.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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I've come to like flash horror fiction because we get to the meat of things so fast. Simmering meat too. And like many of us, Dean comes to mind often while reading this genre. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021

    Thank you so much!!
Comment from royowen
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Apparently Dean Kuch has left a legacy. It's probably not one I would want to leave, but if there's any consciousness in the afterlife I'll bet he approves, "happy screams", beautifully written my friend, a horror indeed, well done, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
    You are special to me for your faith and religious bent!!
reply by royowen on 09-Sep-2021
    Bless you, Dean was/is a man of faith.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
    That soothes my soul.
reply by royowen on 09-Sep-2021
    Me too