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End of Sleep

An Empat Empat poem

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Comment from Pearl Edwards
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I think we've all had those nights that you described well in this Empat poem. It certainly is the time when all the fears come out of the shadows. Your words flow easily to tell this story in your Empat poem Yvonne. I haven't done mine yet, hopefully it's today's project.
Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2021
    Thanks, Valda. Looking forward to yours.
Comment from karenina
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What an interesting form! An equally interesting theme! The older I get the more often I seem to startle from sleep for some reason or another...
There are, indeed, nights when I ponder if it's the bladder haunting me or some ghostly apparition! (Smiling...) I'll just say: It "Depends."

(Better to laugh about it than cry right?)

Karenina

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
    Hahahaha. Yes, it is. I blame the cats when I hear noises.
reply by karenina on 27-Jul-2021
    That would work for me...but my cats have passed to they'd be kitty spirits! (somehow not quite as scary a thought!)

    Karenina
Comment from aryr
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I truly loved this one, damommy. It covered all the questions, the doubts and the fears of being aroused from a deep sleep. I thought the picture was priceless. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
    Thank you.
reply by aryr on 27-Jul-2021
    Most welcome
Comment from Loren .
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Quote the raven: Never more!
This has a sing-song quality to it and it mixes so well with the foreboding mystery. Masterfully done and great fun to read ! Loren

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
    Thank you so much for this wonderful review!
Comment from Boogienights
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An interesting form of poetry to which I can relate. I've been feeling kind of jumpy of late and often hear things go bump in the night. This poem certainly conveys that feeling. Thanks for sharing. :)

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
    When I hear anything, I chalk it up to my cats. lol. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from judiverse
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I like the rhyme pattern in this Empat Empat, and you did a great job with the rhyme. All of your rhymes worked in quite naturally. Those dreams can make you wake up, all right. I dreamed a couple of nights ago that I was driving on these dirt roads, and I was lost and about to run out of gas. What a predicament! I think we do have a fear of those strange noises in the night. In the dark, they seem magnified and more ominous. May you be free of dreams with mysterious sounds that disturb your sleep. judi

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
    Thank you, Judi. If I have nightmares, I don't remember them. Any bumps in the night I blame on the cats. hahahahaha
reply by judiverse on 26-Jul-2021
    You're welcome. One of my cats, Smokey, always jumps on the bed in the middle of the night. Maybe she's had a bad dream. judi
Comment from harmony13
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The theme of this poem is unique. The read made me think of times
a noise scared me and woke me up. The author's words are descriptive, clear and creative. The words flow and connect well. The artwork couldn't be better and it compliments the theme of this poem.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
    Thank you for these lovely comments.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I never think of ghosts when I sleep and my bedroom is full of shadows dancing on my walls! I love the dawn. He he he, a fun post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
    Thank you. I don't either think of ghost or ghoulies.
Comment from dragonpoet
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Yvonne,
I think this happens to everyone at least once. Sometimes you can believe it was just a dream and go back to sleep and other times you can't.
This is a well done empat empat poem for the potlach club.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
    Thank you. Take care.
reply by dragonpoet on 25-Jul-2021
    My pleasure, Yvonne. You, too..
    Joan
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hello Yvonne.

We all sometimes anticipate, but hope we don't hear, those little things that go "bump" in the night. It can roust us from a peaceful sleep. Your poem talks about the real and sometimes perceived threats that we can imagine in the middle of the night when we hear that "bump."

Robert

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
    Thank you. I usually chalk it up to the cats.
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 25-Jul-2021
    You're welcome