Tom's General Store
a Haibun poetic form32 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Pope
Once again, you picked the perfect format. You needed the prose to display the store's offerings, and you needed the haiku to reflect on those offerings. And what an original piece. I'm betting that Tom loves it. Somehow, he ought to incorporate it into his promotion of FanStory. His store does have so much to offer, particularly for fledgling writers. It is a veritable buffet.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2021
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Once again, you picked the perfect format. You needed the prose to display the store's offerings, and you needed the haiku to reflect on those offerings. And what an original piece. I'm betting that Tom loves it. Somehow, he ought to incorporate it into his promotion of FanStory. His store does have so much to offer, particularly for fledgling writers. It is a veritable buffet.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2021
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Hi Debbie. I am delighted you liked this one... it was so much fun to write and pull together. :). I have had responses from people who tell me what items would be in their baskets.. such fun! Thank you so much.
Melissa
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I like tankas.
Comment from poetwatch
I have no idea what a honeybun is, Melissa. :) What I do know is that your writing here is exceptional. I love it. I don't know how many words this is, but it could win any contest. :) I could probably write your prose into freestyle since there is a sale going on in Tom's store. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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I have no idea what a honeybun is, Melissa. :) What I do know is that your writing here is exceptional. I love it. I don't know how many words this is, but it could win any contest. :) I could probably write your prose into freestyle since there is a sale going on in Tom's store. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Hahaha, you have made me laugh, Jose. Thank you for such a lovely review and you nut, it is a haibun... not a honeybun... hahaha. I loved your comments and really appreciate your great sense of humor.
Melissa
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Tom's General Store happens to be a unique place for shoppers and poets as well. What a wonderful idea! You have given it a shape and made it lively with a unique form of writing poetry. This is the first reading experience for me. Much enjoyed.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Tom's General Store happens to be a unique place for shoppers and poets as well. What a wonderful idea! You have given it a shape and made it lively with a unique form of writing poetry. This is the first reading experience for me. Much enjoyed.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Thank you Seshadri. I am delighted you liked this one about FS... it was fun to write and think up those different forms.
Melissa
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is certainly a delightful poem to read since it deals with Tom running a general store where we can buy things that we need to conform to contest prompts. There is everything we need to compose some magnificent poetry, mystery, and comic humor. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Patty
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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This is certainly a delightful poem to read since it deals with Tom running a general store where we can buy things that we need to conform to contest prompts. There is everything we need to compose some magnificent poetry, mystery, and comic humor. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Patty
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Hello Patty. I am delighted that you saw the humor and comparison to our fun times here on FanStory. I had fun writing this one. :). Thank you.
Melissa
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You're more than welcome! I had a blast reading it.
Patty
Comment from Sally Law
I'm ripe fruit and particularly nutty here in Tom's Store. I love the haibun, it's becoming one of my favorites. You did a splendid job with this, dear Melissa.
Sending you my best today and love and blessings from the fruit cart,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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I'm ripe fruit and particularly nutty here in Tom's Store. I love the haibun, it's becoming one of my favorites. You did a splendid job with this, dear Melissa.
Sending you my best today and love and blessings from the fruit cart,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Hello Sally... if you are ripe fruit and nutty... then, are you a fruitcake??? I have long known you as sweet Sal. :). Thanks, dear friend, for the fun review.
Melissa
Comment from Janet Foor
A delightful haibun. Fun, clever and very creative. Perfect artwork to compliment your poem.
I smiled and laughed as I read your most enjoyable piece.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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A delightful haibun. Fun, clever and very creative. Perfect artwork to compliment your poem.
I smiled and laughed as I read your most enjoyable piece.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Hi Janet. I had such fun writing this one. I am glad you liked it. Thank you so very much!!
Melissa
Comment from Senyai
Hi SugarRay,
What a cute idea! Love this, as it dawned on me quickly that this is Tom Ens' general store of poetic wares. Super cute! Going down these "grocery aisles" I imagined what my basket would look like approaching the register.
A dozen assorted free verse. A package of Senryū, a half pound of haiku, an acrostic and one reverse quatrain.
What fun! An original, entertaining haibun.
Always,
Senyai
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Hi SugarRay,
What a cute idea! Love this, as it dawned on me quickly that this is Tom Ens' general store of poetic wares. Super cute! Going down these "grocery aisles" I imagined what my basket would look like approaching the register.
A dozen assorted free verse. A package of Senryū, a half pound of haiku, an acrostic and one reverse quatrain.
What fun! An original, entertaining haibun.
Always,
Senyai
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thanks so much for your lovely review!!!
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
This is wonderful. What a great idea to think of Tom's General Store, and the vast array of goodies awaiting. I think you're right about the 5-7-5 being among the most popular forms. How nice that there's no expiration date. These poems are good any time. You made some good selections at the store, and you referenced the contests that generate interest among the shoppers. You really carry out the them in your closing Haiku. It is a delicious buffet. So much to choose from. judi
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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This is wonderful. What a great idea to think of Tom's General Store, and the vast array of goodies awaiting. I think you're right about the 5-7-5 being among the most popular forms. How nice that there's no expiration date. These poems are good any time. You made some good selections at the store, and you referenced the contests that generate interest among the shoppers. You really carry out the them in your closing Haiku. It is a delicious buffet. So much to choose from. judi
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Hello Judi. I am so glad you enjoyed the humor in this Haibun. The prose section was too lengthy... or so I am told... but it was a fun write for me. Thank you for your wonderful review and rating!! Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
You are so creative lately! I love this story and the haiku at the end. Haibun is not an easy format to use, but you have done well with this piece. I;m sure Gypsy would be impressed. Thanks for sharing and encouraging others to try out various formats.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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You are so creative lately! I love this story and the haiku at the end. Haibun is not an easy format to use, but you have done well with this piece. I;m sure Gypsy would be impressed. Thanks for sharing and encouraging others to try out various formats.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Hello June. Thanks for your wonderful comments. I think I messed up the prose part of the haibun. Gypsy said it was 432 words and it is traditionally 100-300. Well, just sue me! LOL. I am an American and think like one. Don't tell her I said that. :) No point in causing trouble. Haha.. thank you again.
Melissa
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I know Gypsy can be a little touchy about the rules of Japanese poetry - and her personal preferences. She said she prefer I don?t use pictures that shows the Fanart logo. Spoils the poem...
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Oh my goodness!!!!
Comment from Sanku
This Haibun is a great tribute to Fanstory .Very metaphorically written.You are right when you say that people surround the smaller poem section.It made smile through out.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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This Haibun is a great tribute to Fanstory .Very metaphorically written.You are right when you say that people surround the smaller poem section.It made smile through out.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Hi Sanku... thanks for your wonderful comments on this Haibun. Glad you enjoyed it!!
Melissa
