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Football - A Novel

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A mother faces life's struggles.

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Comment from Ben Colder
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When I saw the photo, I could not believe it. I had just seen my grandson doing the same on FaceBook. Now I am steak hungry, so that I will thaw one out. Good one, Barb. Like the Granpaw bit.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. Have a steak for me too.
Comment from Judy Lawless
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I feel like you've figured out where and how you want to take this story now, Barbara. It flows nicely and is believable. It will be interesting to see how it goes. Well done.


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. It will have a few twists, I promise.
Comment from BethShelby
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Katherine is a wonderful mother but she is very cautious when it comes to dating. Her inlaws have a lot of nerve when it comes to trying to get her boys. I wonder if they think they might get custody of their trust funds. It sounds as though their son had a better grasp of managing money than his parents. I enjoying the story and look forward to more.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
    I am pretty sure George knew his parents really well. Thank you for the kind review. PS He had some really bad qualities, that have yet to be shown.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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The plot thickens! And the romance ... ! Charming interaction amongst the group--meticulous attention to detail and nuances of dialog.

... Monthly money is put into my account for as long as I live. I don't know what George left his parents."

Katherine [thought=>SUGG: "continued" (to refer to prior para)]. "I also got a lump sum...

But like I said [sugg: COMMA] George didn't include me on money decisions."





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 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
    Thank you for pointing these out. I will double check them.
Comment from Ulla
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Well, Barbara, I think it's about time she gets out of this turning Gabriel down all the time. Before she knows it, he will look elsewhere. By now, she should be clever enough to recognise when something good is happening. So I hope this will change before long.
Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
    LOL Wait and see what will happen. Thank you for the kind revie.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This Romance Fiction, Part 2 of Chapter 22, speaks both Katherine Riley and Gabriel Hudson, a football coach, discover some information, thru' a taletelling, progresses thru' plot, backed by dialogues realistic; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR

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 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
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I really like Gabriel's parents. They've really been welcoming to Katherine and her sons. Katherine has my sympathy. She's so young and has four Children, and it's good she doesn't have any financial worries. And Jordan is ready to start dating. Her life is complicated. I'm curious to see what develops with her in-laws. I suspect they're scheming to try to get custody of the boys and control the money that will be theirs. It's good that Gabriel is so understanding of the boys. Excellent chapter! judi

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
    Thank you for the understanding. We'll see.