Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Lol. You've described most checkout counters in American grocery stories. I think it's less of a temptation for adults as it is for kids and it all becomes too much for young parents as they try to buy their groceries.
Congratulations on the win!!

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021

Thanks, lyenochka

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

cute poem. I definitely feel like you at a check out counter. I get to the counter and wonder if I really need this or that. I probably like the things that I don't need.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021

Thanks, Rosemary

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Haha, I know what you mean. Those 'things' are there to keep one occupied while the cashier rings up the person in front of you. They are tempting. I hate to be behind a basket that has a screaming kid wanting everything. You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading it. I like the rhymes, the image, the color scheme, and the true message for us all. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021

Thank you, Jan

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

This is the first poem I have read about the check out counter and your words are so true. Everything is there to tempt us and take our hard earned money. You have a smooth flow of rhyming words and a theme that many can relate to.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021

Thank you, mm

Comment from artisart4u

Exceptional

Yes, I think those items are meant to be there for that purpose. While you are waiting in line you look around and say oh, then you get a taste for something your eyes spotted
or this particular article you been dying to read in a newspaper or magazine and you just got to read it. curiosity wins.
It is temptation.
Your couplets are nice and good luck with this poem.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021

Thank you, art, for the terrific review.

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

I know what you mean. When shopping with my grandchildren, they have handfuls of trinkets gathered by the time we check out. There's an entire level of temptation just below our eye view. Great entry we can all relate to.

Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal :))

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021

Thank you, Sal

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Ha ha ha, this made me smile as the store tries to sell us things we doÅ?t really need by tempting us at the check out stage to add more items to our shopping list! I try not to be tempted, but always succumb to this ruse, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021

Thanks, Dolly.

Comment from Theodore McDowell

Excellent

In a sense, the poem is a commentary on our culture with temptations presenting themselves at every turn. We do need blinders and perhaps at times to unplug from technology.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021

Thanks, Theodore, for giving this a look.

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

Excellent, yes the super markets are very good at putting temptation right in our line of vision, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021

Thanks, kahpot

Comment from AliMom

Excellent

Cute. Humorous. It's even harder to resist when you pass those booby-traps with children. That's why I snack before the shopping trips. Those lures to purchase last-minute things that you neither want nor need are strong. Good luck with the contest.

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 Comment Written 15-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021

Thanks, AliMom