Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Football Chapter 20 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
28 total reviews
Comment from AJ McCall
I officially DO NOT LIKE GRACE. C'mon, she nearly ruined everything between Gabriel and Katherine. (That's was so just blatant! UGH!) But I'm glad Gabe made it up to her... with a kiss. This is definitely getting better and better with each chapter!!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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I officially DO NOT LIKE GRACE. C'mon, she nearly ruined everything between Gabriel and Katherine. (That's was so just blatant! UGH!) But I'm glad Gabe made it up to her... with a kiss. This is definitely getting better and better with each chapter!!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Thank you.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Sanku
'Thank you for explaining the 'morality clause' .Though it is unfair it may be right when it concerns impressionable young adults.
Glad Gabriel explained the small incident to kate..
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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'Thank you for explaining the 'morality clause' .Though it is unfair it may be right when it concerns impressionable young adults.
Glad Gabriel explained the small incident to kate..
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Yes, almost all the schools I taught at have had them in some form. Thank you for understanding.
Comment from estory
Gabriel's pulling away from a former relationship in dramatic fashion. With Katherine watching, the old girlfriend tries to kiss him and this leads to a misunderstanding. But Gabriel confronts it head on and we see him finally kiss Katherine and hold her. It seems a bit abrupt the way she has been holding herself at arms length for some time. And there is also that confrontation with Kenny and Rhonda, and there is plenty of tension there. estory
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Gabriel's pulling away from a former relationship in dramatic fashion. With Katherine watching, the old girlfriend tries to kiss him and this leads to a misunderstanding. But Gabriel confronts it head on and we see him finally kiss Katherine and hold her. It seems a bit abrupt the way she has been holding herself at arms length for some time. And there is also that confrontation with Kenny and Rhonda, and there is plenty of tension there. estory
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tfawcus
Great chapter, Barbara. What a dreadful misunderstanding. That's going to set the relationship back a bit. Thanks for the notes at the front to add context. Most helpful.
It's interesting how important rhythm is in so many of the things we do.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Great chapter, Barbara. What a dreadful misunderstanding. That's going to set the relationship back a bit. Thanks for the notes at the front to add context. Most helpful.
It's interesting how important rhythm is in so many of the things we do.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, it would have been easy to misread the situation of Grace kissing him, and then feeling embarrassed by having let her feelings for him develop and grow. An awkward situation to untangle, particularly if Grace persists in throwing herself at Gabriel. Very awkward for him with her doing it in public in front of his students as well. Very well written, interesting. Looking forward to the next.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Yes, it would have been easy to misread the situation of Grace kissing him, and then feeling embarrassed by having let her feelings for him develop and grow. An awkward situation to untangle, particularly if Grace persists in throwing herself at Gabriel. Very awkward for him with her doing it in public in front of his students as well. Very well written, interesting. Looking forward to the next.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. This will come back and haunt Gabriel.
Comment from amahra
This was an outstanding chapter, Barbara. I loved the way you romantically wrote Gabriel's handling proof that he didn't participate in Grace's kissed. Laying one on her (referring to kissing Katherine) was hot. I could really picture that moment.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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This was an outstanding chapter, Barbara. I loved the way you romantically wrote Gabriel's handling proof that he didn't participate in Grace's kissed. Laying one on her (referring to kissing Katherine) was hot. I could really picture that moment.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement. I needed it.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
What a great chapter.. The way you wrote, I felt that I also was watching the race. "Oh no" I said to myself when was kissing another woman.
Barb. a great way to end Chapter 20 part 1
Oh by the way what is the name of the woman that was kissing
Gabriel?
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Hello Barb
What a great chapter.. The way you wrote, I felt that I also was watching the race. "Oh no" I said to myself when was kissing another woman.
Barb. a great way to end Chapter 20 part 1
Oh by the way what is the name of the woman that was kissing
Gabriel?
Gert
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Her name was Grace. Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the name of a new arrival in your novel
Gert
Comment from Alaskastory
"Listen Well" definitely is a good chapter. The characters are well portrayed, which can be very difficult when the story has so many. I appreciate your review of preceding chapter.
correct: " Is it fair?(,n) No, but it's reality.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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"Listen Well" definitely is a good chapter. The characters are well portrayed, which can be very difficult when the story has so many. I appreciate your review of preceding chapter.
correct: " Is it fair?(,n) No, but it's reality.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and the suggestion.
Comment from eliz100
This is a great chapter to your story. There is no room for improvement. I had an Idea - now a days women eat a pint of Ben and Jerry's. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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This is a great chapter to your story. There is no room for improvement. I had an Idea - now a days women eat a pint of Ben and Jerry's. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. You could be right about the ice cream. LOL
Comment from nomi338
The biggest problem we have as humans is that we far too often jump to the wrong conclusions. We expect to be hurt so many time that we hurt ourselves by misreading a situation before we take the time to use reason. How has this person behaved in the past. does their past actions align with what I think I just heard or saw? We need to take a breath, pause to clear our head and do a calm examination of the situation.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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The biggest problem we have as humans is that we far too often jump to the wrong conclusions. We expect to be hurt so many time that we hurt ourselves by misreading a situation before we take the time to use reason. How has this person behaved in the past. does their past actions align with what I think I just heard or saw? We need to take a breath, pause to clear our head and do a calm examination of the situation.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Katherine needs to take a breath. We'll where the couple goes from here. Thank you for the kind review.
