One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from lancellot
Humanity Haiku that's a new one to me. I see it touches on the things created by humanity, and the seasonal word or aspect would be in this case the Harvest Moon. Well done, just from the words alone the scene is accurately described.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2021
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Humanity Haiku that's a new one to me. I see it touches on the things created by humanity, and the seasonal word or aspect would be in this case the Harvest Moon. Well done, just from the words alone the scene is accurately described.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2021
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Lancellot -Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Gert sherwood
My what a lovely haiku. smiles to the way o telling us.
When there is full moon the beautiful lady
Wears her kimono with the fire red daises.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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My what a lovely haiku. smiles to the way o telling us.
When there is full moon the beautiful lady
Wears her kimono with the fire red daises.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for taking the time to review and read my poem. I'm glad you like it.
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Gypsy Blue you are welcome.
Gert
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Splendid work - it is like the sun breaking through the clouds on a rainy day...a splash of glory that works its way into the soul. You are so good at
these forms and they please the senses so. Thank you for a glorious moment in my day!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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Splendid work - it is like the sun breaking through the clouds on a rainy day...a splash of glory that works its way into the soul. You are so good at
these forms and they please the senses so. Thank you for a glorious moment in my day!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for taking the time to review and read my poem. I'm glad you like it.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
A beautiful presentation and I now understand (thank you) your words describe the artwork wonderfully and the last line ties it all together, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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A beautiful presentation and I now understand (thank you) your words describe the artwork wonderfully and the last line ties it all together, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 16-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from Gloria ....
What is most interesting to me, is your presentation, and haiku ushers in a parasol, and there isn't one there. That is magical writing indeed.
A beautiful work here and most enjoyable read today. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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What is most interesting to me, is your presentation, and haiku ushers in a parasol, and there isn't one there. That is magical writing indeed.
A beautiful work here and most enjoyable read today. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 15-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much, Gloria. It's always good to hear from you :) I appreciate your time and review.
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Orange Fire Daisies", is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. It was a pleasure to read and review your work again. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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"Orange Fire Daisies", is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. It was a pleasure to read and review your work again. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Goodnight :)
Gypsy Hugs
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Gypsy,
You're more than welcome.
Goodnight to you too :)))
the Duchess
Comment from Boogienights
Lovely colors, beautiful picture and a delightful poem. I love the way you formatted your poem and it's stunning with the colors used. Good choice. Thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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Lovely colors, beautiful picture and a delightful poem. I love the way you formatted your poem and it's stunning with the colors used. Good choice. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 15-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Goodnight :)
Gypsy Hugs
Comment from lyenochka
A thoughtful ekphrastic haiku. I had to consider what was meant by "fawn shade" and at first I was thinking that "shade" meant protection from the sun. And perhaps you wanted the shadow effect playing against the light of the "harvest moon." I would either suggest "fawn-hued" or if you really want to keep "shade," then "fawn-shade" would keep the reader from looking for the animal. Lol.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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A thoughtful ekphrastic haiku. I had to consider what was meant by "fawn shade" and at first I was thinking that "shade" meant protection from the sun. And perhaps you wanted the shadow effect playing against the light of the "harvest moon." I would either suggest "fawn-hued" or if you really want to keep "shade," then "fawn-shade" would keep the reader from looking for the animal. Lol.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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'Fawn' is a shade of beige and 'fire' is a shade of orange. I added a note to clarify.
and I used a dash..fawn-shade. I don't like the sound of 'hue'
Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I appreciate your feedback.
Gypsy hugs
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Okay - thanks for clarifying. I see lots of fawns here so it's easy to confuse me. May and June are the months when the does have their fawns.
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Fawns are so cute :)
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written humanity haiku Gypsy, this is an, and apart from your knowledgeable input, I always thought it had to be about nature, perhaps with a connection, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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A beautifully written humanity haiku Gypsy, this is an, and apart from your knowledgeable input, I always thought it had to be about nature, perhaps with a connection, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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Kigo (season word) has categories... seasons: summer, winter, fall, spring; heavens: moon, sun, meteors, falling stars, etc; plants; animals; celebrations: new year, Christmas, Halloween, 4th of July, etc...; Humanity: work (farmer...etc), clothes (thin clothes for summer, coat for winter etc), sports: baseball season, soccer, swimming...etc; so everything is nature trees and humans. All part of nature.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Thanks Gypsy
Comment from roof35
You have such a talent for this type of poem. Your inspiration is beautiful and your poem is beautiful. But, then, I have yet to see any of your work that was not beautifully done.
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
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You have such a talent for this type of poem. Your inspiration is beautiful and your poem is beautiful. But, then, I have yet to see any of your work that was not beautifully done.
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. You are very kind. May you have a wonderful day.
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