My Play-Doh Heart
Nonet Contest entry15 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This poem is a powerful metaphor. The reader is invited to viscerally experience your sense of devastation. Many will, sadly, be able to identify. This remind me of Grace VanderWaal's song Clay.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Hs5fP7G8gBc
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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This poem is a powerful metaphor. The reader is invited to viscerally experience your sense of devastation. Many will, sadly, be able to identify. This remind me of Grace VanderWaal's song Clay.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Hs5fP7G8gBc
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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I listened to that song. It made me cry. I love it.
Thank you for your thoughtful review, as always. Hugs and blessings to you.
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Grace is becoming one of my favorites. She is an old soul. She write her own stuff. It is quite profound. Her most recent work is wild
Comment from karenina
Wow. Playfully fuschia, innocent Play-Doh references...and yet this is such a sad and painful poem. Sadly it is so relatable... I've been there in the past. Seemed like I was the only one in the game for along time... Seemed I was expendable long before I "hardened." Powerful in the juxtaposition between child's play and betrayal by adults...who ought to be old enough to know better... Perfect count. Great Nonet.
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Wow. Playfully fuschia, innocent Play-Doh references...and yet this is such a sad and painful poem. Sadly it is so relatable... I've been there in the past. Seemed like I was the only one in the game for along time... Seemed I was expendable long before I "hardened." Powerful in the juxtaposition between child's play and betrayal by adults...who ought to be old enough to know better... Perfect count. Great Nonet.
Karenina
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your support and encouragement. Sadly, I think I'm there now. Hugs.
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I am so sorry. Alone is better, somehow, than disregarded....
Karenina
Comment from AnnaLinda
Leann,
Your fushia play-doh heart nonet entry is very unique and the metaphor is strong...pieces of your heart Smashed in the rug.
Wow! Memorable piece and well done! Best wishes.
Anna
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Leann,
Your fushia play-doh heart nonet entry is very unique and the metaphor is strong...pieces of your heart Smashed in the rug.
Wow! Memorable piece and well done! Best wishes.
Anna
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Anna, for your kind review. I appreciate it. Hugs.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Interesting Nonet poem dealing with a broken heart. There's not a lot in the world that feels worse than having your heartbroken. It's an awful situation. You're left feeling totally useless, devastated. But you should never have vengeful rage towards whoever hurt 'em. Just some random thoughts. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Interesting Nonet poem dealing with a broken heart. There's not a lot in the world that feels worse than having your heartbroken. It's an awful situation. You're left feeling totally useless, devastated. But you should never have vengeful rage towards whoever hurt 'em. Just some random thoughts. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your review and thoughtful comments. I appreciate it.
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Thank you for your review and thoughtful comments. I appreciate it.
Comment from mermaids
Excellent nonet form that brings forth emotions and feelings. The sense of being hurt comes through clearly in your words. "Crumbled bits were discarded" is a strong line that impacts your words.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Excellent nonet form that brings forth emotions and feelings. The sense of being hurt comes through clearly in your words. "Crumbled bits were discarded" is a strong line that impacts your words.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Thank you for this thoughtful and encouraging review. It is greatly appreciated. Hugs.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-You wrote a very good nonet, Leann.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery of a Play Doh
heart being crushed and "rolled flat"
as a metaphor for a real broken heart.
-Like the play heart hardened,
so did the real one.
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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-You wrote a very good nonet, Leann.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery of a Play Doh
heart being crushed and "rolled flat"
as a metaphor for a real broken heart.
-Like the play heart hardened,
so did the real one.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate your supportive comments. I just seem to have toys and glitter and Plato on my mind this week, as I have three young granddaughters staying with me. :-) Thanks again. Hugs.
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You are very welcome, and that would be understandable with your granddaughters there. Enjoy your time together!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
My Play-Doh Heart
by Leann DS
Nice Nonet Contest entry. The font is hard to read. You might try white font.
It's a unique topic. Never thought of a playdough heart. I like the metaphor of playing with the heart like playdough.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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My Play-Doh Heart
by Leann DS
Nice Nonet Contest entry. The font is hard to read. You might try white font.
It's a unique topic. Never thought of a playdough heart. I like the metaphor of playing with the heart like playdough.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Thank you. I will change my font color. I greatly appreciate this tip. Hugs.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, this heart is well and truly broken into pieces and can't be mended by the sound of things, your descriptions here are vivid Leann, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Oh my goodness, this heart is well and truly broken into pieces and can't be mended by the sound of things, your descriptions here are vivid Leann, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate your encouragement and kind comments. Hugs and blessings to you.
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Thank you. I appreciate your encouragement and kind comments. Hugs and blessings to you.
Comment from royowen
Don't worry, I can remember the play dough we made years ago with our kids, and now we have the same trouble with the grands, beautifully written Leann, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Don't worry, I can remember the play dough we made years ago with our kids, and now we have the same trouble with the grands, beautifully written Leann, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Roy. I always love Plato. I appreciate your comments and review. Hugs.
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Good job
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Thank you, Roy. I always love Plato. I appreciate your comments and review. Hugs.
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Bless you
Comment from damommy
What a great metaphor. Good description of a heart being broken by a cruel person. Nonets are hard to write, but you've done a good one. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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What a great metaphor. Good description of a heart being broken by a cruel person. Nonets are hard to write, but you've done a good one. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Oh, thank goodness that they are hard to write. I had one heck of a time. I greatly appreciate your encouraging comments. Thank you also for reviewing/reading. Hugs.
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Oh, thank goodness that they are hard to write. I had one heck of a time. I greatly appreciate your encouraging comments. Thank you also for reviewing/reading. Hugs.
